My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Love's Ampeletum"a collection of my poetry
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Comment from Hitcher
I have never seen the form before but I was missing from F.S for a good three years. Four tight stanzas with a specific rhyme scheme with a delayed refrain. I'm thinking Tricky and Challenging but you look to have nailed it friend. Very romantic : )
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I have never seen the form before but I was missing from F.S for a good three years. Four tight stanzas with a specific rhyme scheme with a delayed refrain. I'm thinking Tricky and Challenging but you look to have nailed it friend. Very romantic : )
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hello; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words about this poetic form; its a challenge, but fun write,
~patty~
Comment from Leena
For the first time I've come across 'The Ampeletum". And you have done complete justice to the form. Beautiful poetry...enjoyed reading every bit of it. More love to you!
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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For the first time I've come across 'The Ampeletum". And you have done complete justice to the form. Beautiful poetry...enjoyed reading every bit of it. More love to you!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,
~patty~
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a beautiful poem, Patty, in this very lovely Ampeletum form, suites it well.
It's a wonderful heartfelt love poem, sweet and endearing. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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This is a beautiful poem, Patty, in this very lovely Ampeletum form, suites it well.
It's a wonderful heartfelt love poem, sweet and endearing. ~Kerry
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Kerry; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I am glad you enjoyed the poem,
~patty~
Comment from Pantygynt
Maths was never my Fortescue and I sense something like a mathematical progression the the way the linking works. However the logic of it loses me in the third stanza. I can see what rhymes link but I am damned if I can see why.
Anyway you have kept to the rhyme scheme and so have produced an ampeletum. Never having come across the word before and not finding it in dictionaries Google it and found myself in Fanstory 2011.
Die ampeletum is German for traffic lights or traffic signals and ...etum usually implies a horticultural collection (arboretum = a collection of trees) so is this poem a collection of traffic lights? Perhaps I have dug myself into too deep a hole here and had better stop.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Maths was never my Fortescue and I sense something like a mathematical progression the the way the linking works. However the logic of it loses me in the third stanza. I can see what rhymes link but I am damned if I can see why.
Anyway you have kept to the rhyme scheme and so have produced an ampeletum. Never having come across the word before and not finding it in dictionaries Google it and found myself in Fanstory 2011.
Die ampeletum is German for traffic lights or traffic signals and ...etum usually implies a horticultural collection (arboretum = a collection of trees) so is this poem a collection of traffic lights? Perhaps I have dug myself into too deep a hole here and had better stop.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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LOL! I'm not entirely sure where the name comes from. There was a writer here that created it, and I added it to my ever-growing list of poetic forms. I found it again this past week, and decided to give it a go.
Thank you for reading and the entertaining review,
~patty~
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hmmmm...yet another poetic form for me to try and tackle.
But, I do love a challenge.
I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and pattern, Patty.
If you haven't done so already, this would have made for a nice entry in the Love Poem Contest currently available. More than likely it would have been a strong contender because of its uniqueness.
Well done.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hmmmm...yet another poetic form for me to try and tackle.
But, I do love a challenge.
I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and pattern, Patty.
If you haven't done so already, this would have made for a nice entry in the Love Poem Contest currently available. More than likely it would have been a strong contender because of its uniqueness.
Well done.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Dean; epic fail on my part - the Love Poetry contest closed yesterday, and the next doesn't close until October. (Maybe I can come up with something else by then.)
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and excited that you may try one.
~patty~
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Or...
you can simply alter the title of this slightly and enter it in the contest.
I've done so on a number of occasions, there's no rules against it.
~Dean
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Really? I thought we could never re-post anything, even if it were 'heavily edited.' I would love to enter this in the contest, but I'm afraid of the 'powers that be.'
~p~
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It's still the same post, Sally
You're not editing anything.
You simply copy your poem, paste it as a new post with a slightly altered name, and disable the other.
You are then free to enter it into the contest and no one is the wiser.
Except for you, of course.
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Aha! Great idea.
Comment from pbomar1115
Now, this is the love I've often viewed. I have imagined what it would be like with someone before I married at 20 years old. But that did not last. I can't say I remember this deep kind of love. This to me is the marrying kind of love. Something I did not feel pre-young-marriage. I really, really wish the best for those who have this kind of love. This love is really a dream come true for those who's heart is ready for this love. I suspect when you are open to this love that love, I hope, is returned. Love is not on sided.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Now, this is the love I've often viewed. I have imagined what it would be like with someone before I married at 20 years old. But that did not last. I can't say I remember this deep kind of love. This to me is the marrying kind of love. Something I did not feel pre-young-marriage. I really, really wish the best for those who have this kind of love. This love is really a dream come true for those who's heart is ready for this love. I suspect when you are open to this love that love, I hope, is returned. Love is not on sided.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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thank you for the lovely review. I'm a very lucky lady. I've shared this kind of love for over thirty-three years. We may not always see eye-to-eye, but every few years, we get to fall in love on a whole new level. It is wonderful!
~patty~
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Great. I try being honest. I don't want to ruin anyone's concept what love is. I am happy for you, Patty.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Is this a new love in your life for you or not about you?
in any case it is a great love poem and written in good form.
Teresa
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Is this a new love in your life for you or not about you?
in any case it is a great love poem and written in good form.
Teresa
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Teresa; it is about the constant love of my life. He has been with me through thick and thin for the past thirty-three years. It seems like every few years, I fall in love all over again. (smile)
thank you for reading and the lovely review,
~patty~
Comment from alvina224224
Very well done, Patty. It has given me something else to learn, and the format is one I would love to try. The content is so sincere between lovers, and provides a simple, yet sincere picture.
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Very well done, Patty. It has given me something else to learn, and the format is one I would love to try. The content is so sincere between lovers, and provides a simple, yet sincere picture.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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thank you so much for the wonderful review. I'm glad you liked my poem and I encourage you to try one of your own. The poetic form was a challenge, but it was a fun write,
~patty~
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
this is kinda like a free verse with lots of rhyming.
Very different but you followed the syllable count perfectly and still kept the magic of love. Very nicely done
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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this is kinda like a free verse with lots of rhyming.
Very different but you followed the syllable count perfectly and still kept the magic of love. Very nicely done
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Barb; thank you so much for your thoughtful review. Writing in this poetic form is quite the challenge, but I enjoyed it very much!
~patty~
Comment from c_lucas
There comes a time when we meet Love face to face. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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There comes a time when we meet Love face to face. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,
~patty~
