haiku (nations meet to save)
countries unite to stop the killing42 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Good haiku!! Love the satori--the last line. It really gives a punch. It would be awesome if it was the other way around--poachers and hunters becoming extinct. :)
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Good haiku!! Love the satori--the last line. It really gives a punch. It would be awesome if it was the other way around--poachers and hunters becoming extinct. :)
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, Rasmine. Thanks for mentioning you like the satori.
Comment from Leena
A nice read! Message conveyed of saving the endangered and extinct is pretty clear in the poem. Wish there was a complete possibility of poaching getting abolished. All the best for the contest.
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A nice read! Message conveyed of saving the endangered and extinct is pretty clear in the poem. Wish there was a complete possibility of poaching getting abolished. All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, Leena. Thanks for mentioning you like the message, and I appreciate your good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from mvbrooks
In Tampa, Busch Gardens used to have a catch phrase on much of its merchandise "extinction is forever." This poem captures that same message in a few words. Interesting twist with the "poachers" being the ones to become extinct. well done.
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In Tampa, Busch Gardens used to have a catch phrase on much of its merchandise "extinction is forever." This poem captures that same message in a few words. Interesting twist with the "poachers" being the ones to become extinct. well done.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, mvbrooks. Thanks for mentioning you like the satori. It scares me to think so many treasured animals are so close to being gone forever.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your nature haiku entry for the contest. Your minimum words do a great job of conveying a message. The requirements say you can include an image - it would make for a better presentation.
~patty~
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thank you for sharing your nature haiku entry for the contest. Your minimum words do a great job of conveying a message. The requirements say you can include an image - it would make for a better presentation.
~patty~
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, patty. Thanksfor suggesting I use a photo, but I truly like readers to form their own imagery from the words.
Comment from Kazzawin
This is a contest with fairly strict rules.
You seem to have fulfilled the criteria with your haiku.
It is indeed a sad fact that these magnificent creatures are slowly dying out through mans greed and selfishness.
Let's hope the humane in humanity prevails : )
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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This is a contest with fairly strict rules.
You seem to have fulfilled the criteria with your haiku.
It is indeed a sad fact that these magnificent creatures are slowly dying out through mans greed and selfishness.
Let's hope the humane in humanity prevails : )
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, Kazzawin. Thanks for sharing your emotional response. It truly scares me to think so many treasured animals may be gone forever...forever.
Comment from KL Williams
I really enjoyed your haiku. You're exactly right that the poachers should be extinct and not the animals. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
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I really enjoyed your haiku. You're exactly right that the poachers should be extinct and not the animals. Great job, and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, KL. Thanks for your kind good luck wish for the contest.
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You're welcome! :)
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A really good entry for the competition. All syllables present and correct. good structure maintained. The last line is very well observed.
I'm a hunter myself... I hide behind trees in the countryside until fox hunters come past and hurl abuse at them. Makes me feel better...
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi there,
A really good entry for the competition. All syllables present and correct. good structure maintained. The last line is very well observed.
I'm a hunter myself... I hide behind trees in the countryside until fox hunters come past and hurl abuse at them. Makes me feel better...
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, GMG. LOL!! I can easily imagine your disguising yourself as a tree to hurl obscenities to those hoity toity fox killers. Made me laugh.
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your nature Haiku "Nations strive to save". All your lines and syllables were correct. I think 5-7-5 haiku is the only real haiku.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I enjoyed reading your nature Haiku "Nations strive to save". All your lines and syllables were correct. I think 5-7-5 haiku is the only real haiku.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, marybell. I like using fewer Syllables for haiku, but needed the 17 for this particular poem. Thamks for your kind good luck wish.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, Karyn.
I knew this had to be yours. You cannot hide from me.
Ya gotta get rid of the poachers if you want to stop the poaching.
Unfortunately I don't believe that poachers are going to become extinct anytime soon.
Well, not soon enough.
You haiku is well composed, although I question what your intended kigo, or seasonal reference, might be. As far as I can tell it doesn't have one.
Summer? Spring, perchance? I seriously doubt that you're implying winter.
Lines one and two use concrete imagery.
Your syllable count comes in right at 17, well within the requirements of haiku poetry.
You chosen to use no artwork or picture, allowing your haiku to paint the image for your readers.
Good effort.
You'll probably win because, well, it's you.
Best of luck.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hello, Karyn.
I knew this had to be yours. You cannot hide from me.
Ya gotta get rid of the poachers if you want to stop the poaching.
Unfortunately I don't believe that poachers are going to become extinct anytime soon.
Well, not soon enough.
You haiku is well composed, although I question what your intended kigo, or seasonal reference, might be. As far as I can tell it doesn't have one.
Summer? Spring, perchance? I seriously doubt that you're implying winter.
Lines one and two use concrete imagery.
Your syllable count comes in right at 17, well within the requirements of haiku poetry.
You chosen to use no artwork or picture, allowing your haiku to paint the image for your readers.
Good effort.
You'll probably win because, well, it's you.
Best of luck.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and write a review for this haiku, Dean. I appreciate your good luck comment for the contest.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from lyenochka
Great way to turn the problem on its head in this 5-7-5. Just as the poachers are making animals endangered, a cooperation among countries can make such an occupation extinct.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Great way to turn the problem on its head in this 5-7-5. Just as the poachers are making animals endangered, a cooperation among countries can make such an occupation extinct.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, lyenochka. Thanks for understanding and sharing your thoughts.
