haiku (nations meet to save)
countries unite to stop the killing42 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh YES! Would that not be the best? It's a situation that is out of control, and there simply does not seem to be a solution.
This is an excellent poem - good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Oh YES! Would that not be the best? It's a situation that is out of control, and there simply does not seem to be a solution.
This is an excellent poem - good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Dawn. I appreciate your time to write your kind response, and thanks for your good luck wish for the contest.
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from Ogden
Your haiku is well done, in support of a worthy cause. The killings of these endangered, majestic creatures, for any reason, are unforgivable crimes.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Your haiku is well done, in support of a worthy cause. The killings of these endangered, majestic creatures, for any reason, are unforgivable crimes.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and kind comments for my haiku, Don. I agree these criminals need to be caught and punished.
Comment from royowen
I don't think many would disagree with you on this score, the raping of the earth's resources, including animals, is at epidemic levels. So well done, a great entry to this contest, highlighting a great social issue. Great satori, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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I don't think many would disagree with you on this score, the raping of the earth's resources, including animals, is at epidemic levels. So well done, a great entry to this contest, highlighting a great social issue. Great satori, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and kind comments for my haiku, Roy. I appreciate your good luck wish for the contest., and thanks for mentioning you liked the satori.
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Most welcome
Comment from Pantygynt
Poacher extinction would indeed be a great idea. Unlike their prey, these beasts are not an endangered species. There seem to be enough breeding pairs to go on forever.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Poacher extinction would indeed be a great idea. Unlike their prey, these beasts are not an endangered species. There seem to be enough breeding pairs to go on forever.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review for my haiku, Pantygynt. I appreciate your comments and kind response.
Comment from Mai Mai
This is a very interesting piece. It's thought provoking, that makes it very powerful. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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This is a very interesting piece. It's thought provoking, that makes it very powerful. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Mai Mai. I appreciate your time to write your kind response.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
haiku (nations strive to save) is an extremely well-written piece. Short,succinct and very much to the point. Poachers are both the animals and my enemies. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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haiku (nations strive to save) is an extremely well-written piece. Short,succinct and very much to the point. Poachers are both the animals and my enemies. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Duchess. I appreciate your time to write your kind response.
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Dear Anon, you're more than welcome, and definitely deserved the kind review.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Dear contest contestant,
17 syllables...SPOT ON!
two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery (whatever that means)...CHECK!
a satori (an a-ha or moment of insight)...CHECK
short/long/short format...CHECK
present tense...CHECK
No caps...well, I suppose the poachers might wear caps...no, I guess not...CHECK!
Minimal punctuation...might have overdone the commas...ah, what the heck...CHECK!
personification allowed...(who are you calling a rhino?!)...CHECK!
no special effects what so ever...nothing special here...except that's a pretty special way to spell 'whatsoever'...CHECK!
two colour presentation (one text, one background)...well, that was easy points!...CHECK!
one illustration...BAAAARRRRRPPPPP!
no author's notes...CHECK!
I guess 11/12 'aint bad. An illustration, this reviewer feels, would have elevated your entry to a higher plane. All the best with the competition.
Monsieur Charlemaine
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Dear contest contestant,
17 syllables...SPOT ON!
two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery (whatever that means)...CHECK!
a satori (an a-ha or moment of insight)...CHECK
short/long/short format...CHECK
present tense...CHECK
No caps...well, I suppose the poachers might wear caps...no, I guess not...CHECK!
Minimal punctuation...might have overdone the commas...ah, what the heck...CHECK!
personification allowed...(who are you calling a rhino?!)...CHECK!
no special effects what so ever...nothing special here...except that's a pretty special way to spell 'whatsoever'...CHECK!
two colour presentation (one text, one background)...well, that was easy points!...CHECK!
one illustration...BAAAARRRRRPPPPP!
no author's notes...CHECK!
I guess 11/12 'aint bad. An illustration, this reviewer feels, would have elevated your entry to a higher plane. All the best with the competition.
Monsieur Charlemaine
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Wow! What a complete, in-depth remarkable review for my haiku, Antoine Charlemagne. (Sheesh, you have a long name. AC!) Thank you for all your comments, Monsieur. About point #12...most poetry isn't dolled-up with artwork. Unless I missed the pretty pictures Willie S used in his poetry books. The Japanese never used artwork with haiku unless they decided to create haiga, which is poetry imbedded into the artwork. I would like the reader to use their own imagination to envision the words instead of being swayed by the photo. (Unless I write about something that people might not know about and a picture would help.)
Thanks for your 11/12 rating, Charlie Mane. It means a lot to me.
Appreciative Contest Contestant :-)
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Tell it to the judges...
;) Mangy Charlie xx
Comment from MaggieF
Our children's children will probably live in a very different world to us, devoid of some many of the beautiful animals that we see. Wouldn't it be great if 'poachers' became extinct/ MaggieF
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Our children's children will probably live in a very different world to us, devoid of some many of the beautiful animals that we see. Wouldn't it be great if 'poachers' became extinct/ MaggieF
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Maggie. I appreciate your time to write your kind response. It's unbelievable so many animals are close to being gone forever.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written I love the way you turned the poem around in the closing well done good luck in the contest with a subject that definitely will make readers think regards Jill
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Yes this is well written I love the way you turned the poem around in the closing well done good luck in the contest with a subject that definitely will make readers think regards Jill
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Jill. I appreciate your time to write your kind response, and thanks for your good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from Irish Rain
I surely hope they can save them. What a horrible thing, to be born into a world that will kill you for your beauty. What is WRONG with people???? Great haiku. Blessings....
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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I surely hope they can save them. What a horrible thing, to be born into a world that will kill you for your beauty. What is WRONG with people???? Great haiku. Blessings....
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Irish Rain. I appreciate your time to write your kind response, and I agree it's horrible we are killing animals to extinction to sell for unneeded products. Thanks!
