Haiku(golden rays of sun)
Nature Haiku4 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
When the sun sets with those beautiful colors, it is truly awesome. Your haiku reflects the serenity of those moments. Nicely composed. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
When the sun sets with those beautiful colors, it is truly awesome. Your haiku reflects the serenity of those moments. Nicely composed. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Thanks for reading & critique zanya
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very lovely haiku, well composed.
The first two lines use vivid concrete imagery and the lines are indeed grammatically connected, as required.
You "kigo", or seasonal reference, is quite obvious--summer.
The word "linger" is a strong verb choice to help capture the moment.
Your alliterative satori is not only a good observation of the poem as a whole, it's also the type of 'Ah-ha'! moment that make haiku so very popular.
Great work!
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
This is a very lovely haiku, well composed.
The first two lines use vivid concrete imagery and the lines are indeed grammatically connected, as required.
You "kigo", or seasonal reference, is quite obvious--summer.
The word "linger" is a strong verb choice to help capture the moment.
Your alliterative satori is not only a good observation of the poem as a whole, it's also the type of 'Ah-ha'! moment that make haiku so very popular.
Great work!
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Thanks for the accolade & the lovely 'good luck' motif !zanya
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Anytime.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very clever poem. This should do well in the contest. Contests are not easy to win, but they are a lot of fun to enter. I usually don't do well, but I don't let that stop me.
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
A very clever poem. This should do well in the contest. Contests are not easy to win, but they are a lot of fun to enter. I usually don't do well, but I don't let that stop me.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Thanks for those sensible words - zanya
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a beautiful and vivid nature poem about a lingering sunset. You have a nice use of S alliteration and consonance, creating a smooth read. Thank you for sharing this sunny haiku. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
This is a beautiful and vivid nature poem about a lingering sunset. You have a nice use of S alliteration and consonance, creating a smooth read. Thank you for sharing this sunny haiku. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Great review -thanks for reading zanya