Hummingbird Delight
Nature Haiku11 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Lovely haiku about birds.... I am guessing by the picture. Without it it would be hard to know. Good form and syllable count. The presentation is nice.Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Hello my friend
Lovely haiku about birds.... I am guessing by the picture. Without it it would be hard to know. Good form and syllable count. The presentation is nice.Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thank you! Wanted to note that it was a hummingbird,
too many syllables!
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It would help if you mentioned a bird.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written a beautiful haiku about the humming bird as he goes around the garden love the description in closing line well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Yes this is well written a beautiful haiku about the humming bird as he goes around the garden love the description in closing line well done regards Jill
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging feedback!
Comment from Joan E.
What a lovely presentation! I enjoyed your description of hummingbirds and your
"gardeners" metaphor in the satori. Your addition of alliteration to this 5-7-5 haiku increased its intensity. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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What a lovely presentation! I enjoyed your description of hummingbirds and your
"gardeners" metaphor in the satori. Your addition of alliteration to this 5-7-5 haiku increased its intensity. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your insights!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku of a well attended garden that is a pleasure to the eyes and usually we enjoy the aromas drifting in the air into our noses. The gardener gets the honor.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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A very well-written haiku of a well attended garden that is a pleasure to the eyes and usually we enjoy the aromas drifting in the air into our noses. The gardener gets the honor.
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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It's this time of year that reminds us there is still beauty in the world. Thanks for the positive feedback.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your entry in the Nature haiku contest. Your poem is exquisite. The presentation and the words all go well together. I love the simplicity and complexity of it all. Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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thank you for sharing your entry in the Nature haiku contest. Your poem is exquisite. The presentation and the words all go well together. I love the simplicity and complexity of it all. Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Appreciate your taking the time to read and review my efforts!
Comment from Thal1959
Charming Haiku of an existential situation, something everyone can relate to and understand. Very effective Satori. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Charming Haiku of an existential situation, something everyone can relate to and understand. Very effective Satori. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing!
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure.
Comment from marybell1
You wrote beautiful 5-7-5 Haiku, which I believe is the true haiku. All you lines and syllables were correct and you chose a beautiful picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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You wrote beautiful 5-7-5 Haiku, which I believe is the true haiku. All you lines and syllables were correct and you chose a beautiful picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Appreciate your insights on my poem!
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hummingbirds are such interesting, tiny creatures, aren't they, Anonymous Poet?
They skitter, flitter, and flutter haphazardly about, their little wings beating so fast.
They are truly a treasure to observe.
Your haiku captures this image quite well.
Lines one and two display concrete imagery, you've chosen a more traditional westernized 5/7/5 syllable count, and your "kigo", or seasonal reference, though rather vague, is spring and summer. This is when hummingbirds first emerge in colder climates.
The expressive satori gives your readers a bit of insight as to the reasons why these tenacious little buzzing birds drink the nectar of flowers.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hummingbirds are such interesting, tiny creatures, aren't they, Anonymous Poet?
They skitter, flitter, and flutter haphazardly about, their little wings beating so fast.
They are truly a treasure to observe.
Your haiku captures this image quite well.
Lines one and two display concrete imagery, you've chosen a more traditional westernized 5/7/5 syllable count, and your "kigo", or seasonal reference, though rather vague, is spring and summer. This is when hummingbirds first emerge in colder climates.
The expressive satori gives your readers a bit of insight as to the reasons why these tenacious little buzzing birds drink the nectar of flowers.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I guess you know your birds as well as your poetry! I do live in a colder climate, New England. And it was 40 one day and 90 the next last week. So the poor hummingbirds get rather confused around here! So they gather furiously when they can. Thanks so much for the review!
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Sounds like your weather is just as crazy as ours has been in Ohio.
You are very welcome.
~Dean
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, hummingbirds are bejeweled gardeners. This is a beautiful haiku of well-chosen words to paint a shimmering picture of the twirling and sipping birds. Your satori is also effect.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest with this fine entry.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Yes, hummingbirds are bejeweled gardeners. This is a beautiful haiku of well-chosen words to paint a shimmering picture of the twirling and sipping birds. Your satori is also effect.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest with this fine entry.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Much appreciation for your taking the time to read and review!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Beautiful artwork and nice presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-Good imagery about the hummingbird;
you describe its quick movements and
behavior very well.
-The satori line is very good and
is very fitting for these delicate creatures.
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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-Beautiful artwork and nice presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-Good imagery about the hummingbird;
you describe its quick movements and
behavior very well.
-The satori line is very good and
is very fitting for these delicate creatures.
-Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Appreciate very much your feedback!
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You are welcome.
