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Comment from damommy
Beautifully written free verse - very moving - about a love that he wants to keep to himself. At least, that's how I took it.
The presentation is lovely - the font, background, and photo.
I don't have a six to give you, but I wish I did. 8-)
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Beautifully written free verse - very moving - about a love that he wants to keep to himself. At least, that's how I took it.
The presentation is lovely - the font, background, and photo.
I don't have a six to give you, but I wish I did. 8-)
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from rama devi
WOW, Mikey...this is fantastic!!!!!
Wish I had a six.
A phenomenal free verse with multiple avenues of interpretation including erotic)...and an awesome medley of metaphors macramed like musical chords into one long extended nature metaphor of varying melodies. Amazing. The flow is fluid and shimmers like silk with subtle cadences of movement sculpted in your phrasing and presentation. I think this is one of my favorite of your poems!
If I could copy and paste the text here, I'd list all those delicious nuances that phonetically delight when read aloud. But the way you posted it, the text is embedded, so I cannot quote my favorite lines and high notes without having to type them out. Suffice it to day that I read it twice and applauded each nuance with a STANDING OVATION!
The avoidance of punctuation serves this poem well as you use line breaks to show the flow so well. Bravo. That's not easy to do. I see no nits except there should be no space after the dash in the second stanza. Love your use of parenthesis in the first.
Love all the alliteration (etc.) woven with finesse.
Masterful. Tight and polished with no wasted words--also not easy to achieve in a longer poem. Impressive! The personification is phenomenal as well!
Bravo. Sic virtual stars ******
Love,
rd
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WOW, Mikey...this is fantastic!!!!!
Wish I had a six.
A phenomenal free verse with multiple avenues of interpretation including erotic)...and an awesome medley of metaphors macramed like musical chords into one long extended nature metaphor of varying melodies. Amazing. The flow is fluid and shimmers like silk with subtle cadences of movement sculpted in your phrasing and presentation. I think this is one of my favorite of your poems!
If I could copy and paste the text here, I'd list all those delicious nuances that phonetically delight when read aloud. But the way you posted it, the text is embedded, so I cannot quote my favorite lines and high notes without having to type them out. Suffice it to day that I read it twice and applauded each nuance with a STANDING OVATION!
The avoidance of punctuation serves this poem well as you use line breaks to show the flow so well. Bravo. That's not easy to do. I see no nits except there should be no space after the dash in the second stanza. Love your use of parenthesis in the first.
Love all the alliteration (etc.) woven with finesse.
Masterful. Tight and polished with no wasted words--also not easy to achieve in a longer poem. Impressive! The personification is phenomenal as well!
Bravo. Sic virtual stars ******
Love,
rd
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Wow. I am not the best with myephors and the like, but I am flushed reading this. Beautiful and incredily sensual. The ending was just the best and made my eyes eell up. This is really one of your best. NG
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Wow. I am not the best with myephors and the like, but I am flushed reading this. Beautiful and incredily sensual. The ending was just the best and made my eyes eell up. This is really one of your best. NG
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Michael,
I really enjoyed this piece. It is laced with symbolism and works on various levels. There is that element of personification when read a certain way but it it so much more representative of the 'blossoming' flower in the allegorical/analogy sense.
there is a superb flow to the piece but more than it, the words move... which plays nicely with the feeling of movement throughout the piece itself.
Excellent piece. Excellent and beautiful.
G
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Hi Michael,
I really enjoyed this piece. It is laced with symbolism and works on various levels. There is that element of personification when read a certain way but it it so much more representative of the 'blossoming' flower in the allegorical/analogy sense.
there is a superb flow to the piece but more than it, the words move... which plays nicely with the feeling of movement throughout the piece itself.
Excellent piece. Excellent and beautiful.
G
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from Heather Knight
I like the way you have personified nature in your poem and not always in a positive way. I'll be looking at trees through different eyes from now on.
The picture of the flower that opens is cool.
Thanks for sharing.
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I like the way you have personified nature in your poem and not always in a positive way. I'll be looking at trees through different eyes from now on.
The picture of the flower that opens is cool.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from DR DIP
A really nice write and beautifully presented in this green font and black surrounds. Full of wonderful metaphors describing the scene. Thanks for sharing this with us Michael. the thinking poets poem.
dip
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A really nice write and beautifully presented in this green font and black surrounds. Full of wonderful metaphors describing the scene. Thanks for sharing this with us Michael. the thinking poets poem.
dip
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh wow, you know those pieces that need candels, chilled wine, the scent of roses, a warm bath, and a man with a deep voice, slowly reading a passionate verse...you did that proud.
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Oh wow, you know those pieces that need candels, chilled wine, the scent of roses, a warm bath, and a man with a deep voice, slowly reading a passionate verse...you did that proud.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from Sankey
Loved this old mate. Loved the style and especially the active opening rose at the beginning. I am nearly done with my biography. One last chapter for a final review then I have to somehow get a foreword done. As Ron Craig said I might have to do that myself hehe. Then I will start doing Revive Certificates on my poems and other stuff.
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Loved this old mate. Loved the style and especially the active opening rose at the beginning. I am nearly done with my biography. One last chapter for a final review then I have to somehow get a foreword done. As Ron Craig said I might have to do that myself hehe. Then I will start doing Revive Certificates on my poems and other stuff.
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Comment Written 20-May-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem. A dream about a special lady that you are shy to approach, admiring her from a distance will not whisper her name to no one. It seems it will stay just a dream.
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A very well-written free verse poem. A dream about a special lady that you are shy to approach, admiring her from a distance will not whisper her name to no one. It seems it will stay just a dream.
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Comment Written 20-May-2017
