Unrequited love
Minute poem28 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written minute poem for the contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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This is a very well written minute poem for the contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Thanks so much Teri. Unfortunately, too many know of this state. However, I'm glad you enjoyed my post
Trisha
Comment from aryr
Definitely a poem of reality. It is so true that in the beginning love is somewhat blind and the heart does indeed fall prey to the feelings. And unfortunately for some as time passes the love diminishes and the heart is not longer joyful. You did very well in writing about the passing of time and the change of feelings. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Definitely a poem of reality. It is so true that in the beginning love is somewhat blind and the heart does indeed fall prey to the feelings. And unfortunately for some as time passes the love diminishes and the heart is not longer joyful. You did very well in writing about the passing of time and the change of feelings. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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I am glad the poem rang true! True heartache can cause big health problems. Too many go through that.
Thanks for a great review
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You are most welcome.
Comment from c_lucas
When love is
replaced with lust
Bitter sorrow
Is the outcome
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Unrequited love leads to frustration, sometimes to acts unwarranted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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When love is
replaced with lust
Bitter sorrow
Is the outcome
***
Unrequited love leads to frustration, sometimes to acts unwarranted. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for your compliments. I totally agree with your comments about the effects of rejection.i really appreciated your review.
Comment from planetjanet
This is really good, I love the rhythm you create with similar sounding words.
In the first stanza "wined, kissed, dined" all past tense, and in the last stanza, "Other's heartache, Lover's mistake".
The middle is the best, I almost want to sing it, "Laughter ended, Both pretended" but I can't quite pinpoint what makes it so good (I do not claim to be a poet or English teacher).
That first line, it feels like a struggle, but the first line of the last stanza brings it to happy close. Well, maybe not emotionally, but rhythmically.
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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This is really good, I love the rhythm you create with similar sounding words.
In the first stanza "wined, kissed, dined" all past tense, and in the last stanza, "Other's heartache, Lover's mistake".
The middle is the best, I almost want to sing it, "Laughter ended, Both pretended" but I can't quite pinpoint what makes it so good (I do not claim to be a poet or English teacher).
That first line, it feels like a struggle, but the first line of the last stanza brings it to happy close. Well, maybe not emotionally, but rhythmically.
Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Many thanks for your in depth review, and 5 stars. My real reward comes from knowing that readers really enjoyed my poetry.
I appreciate your good luck wishes as well.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Bucketlist, this is a very well written Minute poem entry for the contest. All syllables are in check with a story line that flows well to express a scene that is all too apparent nowadays. So many relationships that sink before they can swim because the foundations were not checked and strengthened before the knot was tied. Well done on this reality of a read and good luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Bucketlist, this is a very well written Minute poem entry for the contest. All syllables are in check with a story line that flows well to express a scene that is all too apparent nowadays. So many relationships that sink before they can swim because the foundations were not checked and strengthened before the knot was tied. Well done on this reality of a read and good luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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thanks for your kind wishes and super review
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written I love the rhyming unfortunately the green eyed monster does make an appearance in some relationships this can destroy them if they let it trust is the key good luck regards Jill
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Yes my friend this is well written I love the rhyming unfortunately the green eyed monster does make an appearance in some relationships this can destroy them if they let it trust is the key good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Jill, I feel honored that you grade my penning so highly. My friend, it's always good to know you enjoy my poetry.That is my target each time. Thank you very much.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written minute poem. When love goes wrong, the ones involved are surely get hurt by each other. When we start a relationship we take a chance with a stranger, sometimes it works well, other times it's doomed to end badly.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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A very well-written minute poem. When love goes wrong, the ones involved are surely get hurt by each other. When we start a relationship we take a chance with a stranger, sometimes it works well, other times it's doomed to end badly.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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How sage you are! I had fun writing that style poetry. I'm happy for the positive review you kindly wrote
Comment from bertranclan
I enjoyed your Minute poem, albeit was about unrequited love. I know all about that personally, so it was kind of comforting to read about, however sad that is. Good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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I enjoyed your Minute poem, albeit was about unrequited love. I know all about that personally, so it was kind of comforting to read about, however sad that is. Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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I think poetry on this site yields a lot of emotional memories. Kind of cathartic. But it's tough reading if it's sad.
I really appreciate your review and stars. .
Comment from Asem.inspirations
This is the usual patteren of most relationships these days. They start off almost like a dream come true then they start going through the motions thay you have described. Thisv is what can be expected from imperfect relationships in an imperfect world. Your minute contest entry is appropriate and you should do well. I know, I keep saying that. Have a great day.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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This is the usual patteren of most relationships these days. They start off almost like a dream come true then they start going through the motions thay you have described. Thisv is what can be expected from imperfect relationships in an imperfect world. Your minute contest entry is appropriate and you should do well. I know, I keep saying that. Have a great day.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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There's nothing wrong with encouragement! Thanks very much. I appreciate every review you make.
You have a great day too, Trisha
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your Minute poem "Unrequited Love". All lines and syllables were correct and you chose an appropriate picture. Just one small thing - Line one in the last stanza - 'Twas.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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I enjoyed reading your Minute poem "Unrequited Love". All lines and syllables were correct and you chose an appropriate picture. Just one small thing - Line one in the last stanza - 'Twas.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thanks Marybel for your review and stars
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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Have a great day
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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Happy Saturday!
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Thank you. Happy Sunday from me.
Marybell1.
