The Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 85 "Wayward Wings"Poems that are Sonnet Variations
9 total reviews
Comment from His Grayness
Darn it ... out of sixes for this great poetic lesson! I really appreciate the time and generosity given here to teach this unique poetic style. Many sincere thanks! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Darn it ... out of sixes for this great poetic lesson! I really appreciate the time and generosity given here to teach this unique poetic style. Many sincere thanks! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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tHANK YOU vANCE, iF YOU LEARNED SOMETHING WHILE ENGAGED, THEN i AM most pleased.
Comment from Pantygynt
Like your Dante sonnet you have chosen a "b" rhyme that is assonant to your "a" rhyme. I commented on this when reviewing your Dante piece so I am assuming wicked malice aforethought here. I want the last line to read "and slow to be unfurled" -- not a full rhyme but an interesting slant wouldn't you say.
This is a great little series on sonnets that i am thoroughly enjoying.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Like your Dante sonnet you have chosen a "b" rhyme that is assonant to your "a" rhyme. I commented on this when reviewing your Dante piece so I am assuming wicked malice aforethought here. I want the last line to read "and slow to be unfurled" -- not a full rhyme but an interesting slant wouldn't you say.
This is a great little series on sonnets that i am thoroughly enjoying.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you Pantygynt, I just can't get my mind around that change to do it. Although I like the nuance.
Comment from dmt1967
I love the picture and the words fit it perfectly. I like the comical effect these birds have and the poem also captures that as well. This is a great, well-written poem and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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I love the picture and the words fit it perfectly. I like the comical effect these birds have and the poem also captures that as well. This is a great, well-written poem and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you dmt. Glad you enjoyed my bird.
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed your poem, the wings imagery is really beautiful. As is the photo by the way. All is all a beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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I enjoyed your poem, the wings imagery is really beautiful. As is the photo by the way. All is all a beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you oliver
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Hex-sonnetta. This format I have done two times before. It us a fun format. You chose an excellent subject of the Egret busy taking off. A great photo as well.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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A very well-written Hex-sonnetta. This format I have done two times before. It us a fun format. You chose an excellent subject of the Egret busy taking off. A great photo as well.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you. Sandra. Glad you liked my format , as well as the bird.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. I believe this is the first example I have seen of this form type, and I love the posts where I learn something new. I did enjoy your informative description, and would even encourage you to create a contest around this form.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you for sharing. I believe this is the first example I have seen of this form type, and I love the posts where I learn something new. I did enjoy your informative description, and would even encourage you to create a contest around this form.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you KYColonel Randal. I appreciate your enthusiasm.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a Great White Egret on its wayward wings, how it maintains its feat in wings in general and how it wings overseas and enjoys breeze and climbs; I liked, enjoyed the flight experience read.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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This speaks about a Great White Egret on its wayward wings, how it maintains its feat in wings in general and how it wings overseas and enjoys breeze and climbs; I liked, enjoyed the flight experience read.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Thank you ALDear, great fkying with you.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I very much enjoyed this Hex Sonnetta format, Tom.
Sonnets often sound forced to me; as if those writing them are trying to squeeze in too many words per line just to meet a specific syllable count and structure.
Not this.
This read quite natural, and flowed as smooth as silk when read aloud.
As for the Egret...holy hang gliding.
What a wingspan those birds have!
Excellent writing as always.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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I very much enjoyed this Hex Sonnetta format, Tom.
Sonnets often sound forced to me; as if those writing them are trying to squeeze in too many words per line just to meet a specific syllable count and structure.
Not this.
This read quite natural, and flowed as smooth as silk when read aloud.
As for the Egret...holy hang gliding.
What a wingspan those birds have!
Excellent writing as always.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Thank you Dean. Loved your review.
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My pleasure as always, Tom.
~Dean
Comment from marybell1
Another interesting form of Sonnetta. You chose a lovely picture and followed all the rules for this form.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Another interesting form of Sonnetta. You chose a lovely picture and followed all the rules for this form.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Thanks again Marybell.
