Life Struggles
His Love is Constant66 total reviews
Comment from Hansel1
It sounds as though you're going through a struggle indeed - my condolences. A beautifully written quatrain; the diction used has a saddening calm to it.
It takes a brave soul to display vulnerability in this manner. I commend you, and thank you as well for sharing your work with us - Cheers!
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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It sounds as though you're going through a struggle indeed - my condolences. A beautifully written quatrain; the diction used has a saddening calm to it.
It takes a brave soul to display vulnerability in this manner. I commend you, and thank you as well for sharing your work with us - Cheers!
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
A primal cry from deep within
resounds and permeates my soul.
I've been there. Some of us more than others, but it's part of life, making death seem like the better option. Then, things get better. We ride a roller coaster through life, sometimes slow, sometimes fast, but always up and down. Face it...a long, flat stretch would be boring. :)
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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A primal cry from deep within
resounds and permeates my soul.
I've been there. Some of us more than others, but it's part of life, making death seem like the better option. Then, things get better. We ride a roller coaster through life, sometimes slow, sometimes fast, but always up and down. Face it...a long, flat stretch would be boring. :)
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you Phyllis for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments - you're right, life is a lot like a roller coaster. But, God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
I feel that I know what this poem is about. Yes, it is a mighty struggle when a certain "love", certain person, is the only one that one wants. I, personally, kept waiting for a very long time, very long, and it was a struggle as your poem so expertly depicts. Finally, at long last we will be together. It was worth the wait. While waiting I have done other things, had other "adventures". Your poem speaks of a very deep love. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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I feel that I know what this poem is about. Yes, it is a mighty struggle when a certain "love", certain person, is the only one that one wants. I, personally, kept waiting for a very long time, very long, and it was a struggle as your poem so expertly depicts. Finally, at long last we will be together. It was worth the wait. While waiting I have done other things, had other "adventures". Your poem speaks of a very deep love. Well done.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from planetjanet
I'm not sure this is in the right category, it feels like spiritual poetry, because I can't decide whether the theme is God or regret.
You have some strong literal imagery that grips me, "resounds and permeates my soul" - great word choice, it provides rhythm with syllable accents, rolling and then coming to a concise end.
I love the alliterations, especially at the end, "please give me grace to grow and share" though it almost sounds like a part of a succinct serenity prayer, it nurtures familiarity in a comforting way.
Overall, it has good form and flow, rhythm and rhyme. This is the second poem I've read this week which references "others flee-ing" - pure coincidence, but it raises my curiosity.
You capitalize Your in the final line, which leads me to believe that this is a spiritual poem, but confusing. You (the speaker) are asking for grace to be granted from the person(s) you are addressing in the context, and also requesting the addressee to accept their own love that's meant for you in the same sentence. To summarize the dialogue, one might say "Dear God, please help me to grow. God, also you need to accept that your love is meant for me." So, are you scolding God to come to accept some almighty truth? (Forgive the monotone text, I'm really giggling about explaining my confusion over here.) Is your word choice not quite worked out yet? Maybe you could explain what you mean here and in so doing, work out a more satisfying closure.
Obviously, you don't have to explain anything, and please don't take offense to my confusion. I only want to share my reaction, and hopefully help you improve this piece any way you see fit.
Thank you for sharing, it really makes me feel like a part of something when I share exactly the feelings expressed. I'm not alone in festering in the pain of my broken heart.
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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I'm not sure this is in the right category, it feels like spiritual poetry, because I can't decide whether the theme is God or regret.
You have some strong literal imagery that grips me, "resounds and permeates my soul" - great word choice, it provides rhythm with syllable accents, rolling and then coming to a concise end.
I love the alliterations, especially at the end, "please give me grace to grow and share" though it almost sounds like a part of a succinct serenity prayer, it nurtures familiarity in a comforting way.
Overall, it has good form and flow, rhythm and rhyme. This is the second poem I've read this week which references "others flee-ing" - pure coincidence, but it raises my curiosity.
You capitalize Your in the final line, which leads me to believe that this is a spiritual poem, but confusing. You (the speaker) are asking for grace to be granted from the person(s) you are addressing in the context, and also requesting the addressee to accept their own love that's meant for you in the same sentence. To summarize the dialogue, one might say "Dear God, please help me to grow. God, also you need to accept that your love is meant for me." So, are you scolding God to come to accept some almighty truth? (Forgive the monotone text, I'm really giggling about explaining my confusion over here.) Is your word choice not quite worked out yet? Maybe you could explain what you mean here and in so doing, work out a more satisfying closure.
Obviously, you don't have to explain anything, and please don't take offense to my confusion. I only want to share my reaction, and hopefully help you improve this piece any way you see fit.
Thank you for sharing, it really makes me feel like a part of something when I share exactly the feelings expressed. I'm not alone in festering in the pain of my broken heart.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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Thank you for your thorough and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments and suggestion. I will definitely look at that line again.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
The hardest thing that I've found is reaching out to God when it feels like the world is crumbling around you. Reaching out to Him when you feel like that takes true faith and strength. Great job and I hope you're okay
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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The hardest thing that I've found is reaching out to God when it feels like the world is crumbling around you. Reaching out to Him when you feel like that takes true faith and strength. Great job and I hope you're okay
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
I'm doing well, thank you for asking. God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Just leave it to me. Give me the guys name. I know people if yo know what I mean. I'll see that he gets a beat-down. Nobody hurts my girl.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Just leave it to me. Give me the guys name. I know people if yo know what I mean. I'll see that he gets a beat-down. Nobody hurts my girl.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you Thomas. Your review made my day. I loved your comments and it is tempting.
But, God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from MissMerri
This is a strong poem, written with deep and relatable emotion. It describes so beautifully the torn feelings of loss and yearning and the deep understanding that God is the only solid foundation on which to build hope. Too often, people disappoint, break our hearts, leave us to struggle alone. I liked how you describe the heartbreak but bring the thoughts back to God, the "author and finisher of our faith." This is wonderfully real and beautifully written.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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This is a strong poem, written with deep and relatable emotion. It describes so beautifully the torn feelings of loss and yearning and the deep understanding that God is the only solid foundation on which to build hope. Too often, people disappoint, break our hearts, leave us to struggle alone. I liked how you describe the heartbreak but bring the thoughts back to God, the "author and finisher of our faith." This is wonderfully real and beautifully written.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments and your most generous rating.
God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from Cedar
This is one of the best spiritual and also emotional poems that I have read in a very long time. It really touched my old heart.
I guess it's because I can relate to your words so much. Life can be a struggle in so many ways, but I think it was meant to be that way. I think God does that on purpose, as a test of our faith.
I also believe that we can't afford to let our guard down, even for a moment. We must remain strong and keep a strong faith at all times.
I wish you the best of everything and remember that one day we will be in Paradise, where there is no worries and sorrows, only happiness...
Please check the first word in your last sentence. This truly does deserve an exceptional rating, even more. May God bless you my friend and remain strong...Bill
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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This is one of the best spiritual and also emotional poems that I have read in a very long time. It really touched my old heart.
I guess it's because I can relate to your words so much. Life can be a struggle in so many ways, but I think it was meant to be that way. I think God does that on purpose, as a test of our faith.
I also believe that we can't afford to let our guard down, even for a moment. We must remain strong and keep a strong faith at all times.
I wish you the best of everything and remember that one day we will be in Paradise, where there is no worries and sorrows, only happiness...
Please check the first word in your last sentence. This truly does deserve an exceptional rating, even more. May God bless you my friend and remain strong...Bill
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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Thank you Bill for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments and your most generous rating.
Yes, one day we will be in Paradise where there are no worries or sorrows...only happiness. Amen
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Beckelet
I can fully relate to this poem! I've been there. I love the rhyme and rhythm. It's a lovely piece of inspirational verse.
One suggestion: "a choice I've been remiss to choose" bothered me because it seems redundant (I don't think we usually say "choose a choice") and confusing. You may like it because of the alliteration. But I think the usage of "remiss" is a little awkward. One would be remiss by not choosing this path, not by choosing it. Something that keeps the rhythm would be, "An option I've been slow to choose," or something like that.
I really enjoyed this poem and found it inspirational. Bless you!
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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I can fully relate to this poem! I've been there. I love the rhyme and rhythm. It's a lovely piece of inspirational verse.
One suggestion: "a choice I've been remiss to choose" bothered me because it seems redundant (I don't think we usually say "choose a choice") and confusing. You may like it because of the alliteration. But I think the usage of "remiss" is a little awkward. One would be remiss by not choosing this path, not by choosing it. Something that keeps the rhythm would be, "An option I've been slow to choose," or something like that.
I really enjoyed this poem and found it inspirational. Bless you!
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments and suggestion. I actually had ""slow" instead of "remiss" and then changed it.
God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
Comment from Emily888
This is deep and really resounded with me. I love your use of descriptive words to make the reader feel more completely instead of just telling them what you're feeling. Great work!
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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This is deep and really resounded with me. I love your use of descriptive words to make the reader feel more completely instead of just telling them what you're feeling. Great work!
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging and thoughtful review. I greatly appreciate your comments.
God always draws me back and lifts me up. After all, in the end, we only answer to Him
Thank you again for your kindness.
Blessings
Janet.
