My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Ease the Pain"a collection of my poetry
53 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
Wow a duodec-liner poem To be honest I have never heard of this poetry form and you have taken on the challenge to write in this style admirably well done Patty and thanks for sharing.
dip
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Wow a duodec-liner poem To be honest I have never heard of this poetry form and you have taken on the challenge to write in this style admirably well done Patty and thanks for sharing.
dip
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi dip; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I found this form here on FanStory a few weeks back. It was created for a contest, and I thought I would try one just for fun,
~patty~
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you did really well
Comment from royowen
I've just read your recent trip to see your son, the pain that is a constant in your life, and knowing he still loves you, (he's a fine boy). But he doesn't know how to fill the hole he will have if he stops "using" beautifully written. The desire to look after one's chil, even though they're grown up is very strong, I understand, Patty, I had a brief 2 year period knowing "separation" but that passed. Letting go is tough. But like a bird set free, they will return to that gracious love. It's beautifully written Patty, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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I've just read your recent trip to see your son, the pain that is a constant in your life, and knowing he still loves you, (he's a fine boy). But he doesn't know how to fill the hole he will have if he stops "using" beautifully written. The desire to look after one's chil, even though they're grown up is very strong, I understand, Patty, I had a brief 2 year period knowing "separation" but that passed. Letting go is tough. But like a bird set free, they will return to that gracious love. It's beautifully written Patty, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Roy; thank you so much for your loving and warm review of this piece. It was a great deal of leftover emotion that led me to write this poem. I appreciate your understanding,
~patty~
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Most welcome, you're a good mum
Comment from Hitcher
I have not came across this style of poetry thus far, the duodec-liner poem looks like it could be tricky but fun. Asking and answering, rhyming and not... a challenge indeed and one you have risen to friend. Witnessing the suffering of friends or family is extremely hard but being there for them does help ease their pain...definitely! Nice!
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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I have not came across this style of poetry thus far, the duodec-liner poem looks like it could be tricky but fun. Asking and answering, rhyming and not... a challenge indeed and one you have risen to friend. Witnessing the suffering of friends or family is extremely hard but being there for them does help ease their pain...definitely! Nice!
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi there; thank you for reading and reviewing this interesting poetic form. It was a fun and a challenge to write. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~
Comment from Asem.inspirations
You have me in tears. After reading your two part story of your visit with your son, this is the appropriate poem to read and it does not disappoint but tugs at the heart strings. I feel your displeasure, disappointment, impatience and pain, my friend. I know it all too well...It's like they say, "you could be standing on the platform watching the train coming to hit your loved one but you cannot pull them out in time. If they don't climb out or reach for your hand they will suffer the outcome and you will feel as helpless and hopeless as you do while standing there, watching that train coming closer and closer."
I pray for a success story for you, Patty. Thank you for this poem.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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You have me in tears. After reading your two part story of your visit with your son, this is the appropriate poem to read and it does not disappoint but tugs at the heart strings. I feel your displeasure, disappointment, impatience and pain, my friend. I know it all too well...It's like they say, "you could be standing on the platform watching the train coming to hit your loved one but you cannot pull them out in time. If they don't climb out or reach for your hand they will suffer the outcome and you will feel as helpless and hopeless as you do while standing there, watching that train coming closer and closer."
I pray for a success story for you, Patty. Thank you for this poem.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Tier; thank you for reading and reviewing this poem. I think I have a lot of leftover emotion after last week, and this poem was a good outlet. Your words are a great comfort to me,
~patty~
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Beautiful poem, though inspired by a sad topic. I think any one of us would prefer to suffer pain ourselves rather than see a loved one go thru it.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Beautiful poem, though inspired by a sad topic. I think any one of us would prefer to suffer pain ourselves rather than see a loved one go thru it.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Phyllis; you are so right. It would be much easier to take on this pain myself than to have to watch my baby go through this. I can only pray for an answer. Thanks for reading,
~patty~
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Love and devotion and being there for someone and supporting them is the only way to really show true love, action speaks louder than the word they say, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Love and devotion and being there for someone and supporting them is the only way to really show true love, action speaks louder than the word they say, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Dolly; I do believe you are so right - it is only through our actions that we can show our love and help to ease the pain,
~patty~
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. This is an interesting variation on the Etheree poem. The Duodec-liner is a form I have not tried. It appears you offer a good example here. Have you found the answer to your question? Is it ever enough? Does it really help? I believe these are universal questions.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Thank you for sharing. This is an interesting variation on the Etheree poem. The Duodec-liner is a form I have not tried. It appears you offer a good example here. Have you found the answer to your question? Is it ever enough? Does it really help? I believe these are universal questions.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review this poem. The poetic form is one that was created here on FanStory - it has a few more requirements than the Etheree. It was a fun challenge.
And no - I don't think there are answers to these questions - unless you look to the stars,
~patty~
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Duodec-liner poem. When a child is big enough to make their own decisions, we can tell them about the consequences of their decisions. If we are lucky and they listen to us and makr better choices, we can thank God, if they still choose wrong, we can just pray that God will protect them and see what they do is wrong.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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A very well-written Duodec-liner poem. When a child is big enough to make their own decisions, we can tell them about the consequences of their decisions. If we are lucky and they listen to us and makr better choices, we can thank God, if they still choose wrong, we can just pray that God will protect them and see what they do is wrong.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Sandra; thank you so much for reading and commenting on this piece. I was a bit intimidated by this poetic form, and I appreciate you telling me that it was well written.
~patty~
Comment from Ulla
Hi Patty, this is a great poem that gave food for thought. I thought it was an etheree, until I realised it was not. It's a mother's true love that shines through here. Well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Patty, this is a great poem that gave food for thought. I thought it was an etheree, until I realised it was not. It's a mother's true love that shines through here. Well done. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Ulla; thank you so much for your thoughtful review of this heartfelt piece.
~patty~
Comment from lyenochka
I was pleasantly surprised by the rhymes thinking it was an etheree and then found it wasn't. Great use of this form and I really feel your mother's heart in this. Some children need much more time and prayers.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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I was pleasantly surprised by the rhymes thinking it was an etheree and then found it wasn't. Great use of this form and I really feel your mother's heart in this. Some children need much more time and prayers.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words and your time to read and review,
~patty~
