My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Ease the Pain"a collection of my poetry
53 total reviews
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your poem "Ease the Pain", although I have not come across this form before. You followed all the rules and you chose an appropriate picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem "Ease the Pain", although I have not come across this form before. You followed all the rules and you chose an appropriate picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading and reviewing 'Ease the Pain.' It was a fun write to work with this poetic form. I found it here on FanStory a few weeks back. Someone created the format for a contest. I just wanted to see if I could write within the constraints. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from godlucifer
love is complicated in its own way,it can either help or be in a state of suffering. helping others who is in the state of suffering can be complicated as love will show. love will show us that its complicated but in the end love is the answer to all questions. your poem was written effortlessly and the meaning was well paragraph. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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love is complicated in its own way,it can either help or be in a state of suffering. helping others who is in the state of suffering can be complicated as love will show. love will show us that its complicated but in the end love is the answer to all questions. your poem was written effortlessly and the meaning was well paragraph. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Hello; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you saw the insight of this piece and understood its deeper meaning.
~patty~
Comment from pbomar1115
A woman expression of love to her child is easy. When he grows, she has to develop other ways to express it. If she plans to show love one what, will it be enough? Or maybe not show love at all, will that work? She uses the sure way every mother knows. Serve a good meal. Her heart would be filled.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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A woman expression of love to her child is easy. When he grows, she has to develop other ways to express it. If she plans to show love one what, will it be enough? Or maybe not show love at all, will that work? She uses the sure way every mother knows. Serve a good meal. Her heart would be filled.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this poem. As an Italian American, it is my nature to 'feed a problem.' I appreciate you catching that reference. Not many readers saw the metaphor,
~patty~
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You're welcome.
Comment from TPAC
Sweet conveyance, touching to the heart statements, plowing into its reader conscious. A step inside the real of had feelings. I found these aspects pleasing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Sweet conveyance, touching to the heart statements, plowing into its reader conscious. A step inside the real of had feelings. I found these aspects pleasing.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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thank you so much for reading and reviewing this piece. I so appreciate your warm words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from Oatmeal
Mustangpatty,
Very nicely written work. Perfectly arranged and your formatting is well done. Good flow. Very understandable. Well chosen words, colorful arrangement and wonderfully decorated thoughts.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Mustangpatty,
Very nicely written work. Perfectly arranged and your formatting is well done. Good flow. Very understandable. Well chosen words, colorful arrangement and wonderfully decorated thoughts.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Hi Camille; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. If you're interested, I have posted the story dealing with my visit to see my son.
~patty~
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend,
The poem is well written and presented. It's very good of you to help your family in need. Good job with this Poem. I enjoyed it.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Hello my friend,
The poem is well written and presented. It's very good of you to help your family in need. Good job with this Poem. I enjoyed it.
Gypsy
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy; I'm always glad when you stop by to read and review one of my poems. I appreciate your comments and words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This is a first time read of a piece like this. According to the notes of the Duodec, you followed the pattern and used the past line to pull all together and explaining love is still the answer to everything
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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This is a first time read of a piece like this. According to the notes of the Duodec, you followed the pattern and used the past line to pull all together and explaining love is still the answer to everything
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Barb; I found this poetic form on the site a few weeks back. Someone created it and made it a challenge as a contest. I saved the format and decided I would try it on a day when I needed a challenge - it was, and it did help me sort through my emotions,
~patty~
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Patty,
I like how you asked the question how can love another person who is in pain (help)
by you using a difficult format as the a duodec-liner
Gert
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hello Patty,
I like how you asked the question how can love another person who is in pain (help)
by you using a difficult format as the a duodec-liner
Gert
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Gert; thank you so much for your time to read and review. I enjoyed working with the construct of this poetic form. It was a challenge and it helped me to channel my emotions,
~patty~
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Hi Patty you are welcome
Gert
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hmmm, I've never heard of nor read a Duodec poem before now, Patty.
You're right, it is very much like an Etheree in may ways, with the exception of a couple of additional lines.
All of the syllable counts increase exponentially with each line, just as the Etheree and Nonet form does.
Not only that, but what you've written about and included as your topic--helping others--is one I hope many readers here will be able to relate to.
Good work!
~Dean
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hmmm, I've never heard of nor read a Duodec poem before now, Patty.
You're right, it is very much like an Etheree in may ways, with the exception of a couple of additional lines.
All of the syllable counts increase exponentially with each line, just as the Etheree and Nonet form does.
Not only that, but what you've written about and included as your topic--helping others--is one I hope many readers here will be able to relate to.
Good work!
~Dean
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Dean; I found this poetic form right here on FanStory a few weeks back. Someone created it for a contest - I kept the format and did one today - just for fun. Thank you so much for your time to read and review. I'm glad you liked it,
~patty~
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Patty, I love this Duodec-liner poem, nice style of the Etheree. Very powerful unconditional love you've proposed wonderfully in this write. Good luck, ~Kerry
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Patty, I love this Duodec-liner poem, nice style of the Etheree. Very powerful unconditional love you've proposed wonderfully in this write. Good luck, ~Kerry
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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Hi Kerry; thank you so much for your time to read and review this poem. I had a good time with the construction - it is a bit tricky. I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
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your welcome
