The Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 53 "Darkest Depression"Poems that are Sonnet Variations
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Comment from Joan E.
Here I am back from Cuba and trying to catch up, and I see you have been prolific in my absence! Seriously, thank you for sharing another sonnet form and your mesmerizing photograph. Your alliteration of "d's" adds to the intensity of the message. Here's to a pleasant Sunday- Joan
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Here I am back from Cuba and trying to catch up, and I see you have been prolific in my absence! Seriously, thank you for sharing another sonnet form and your mesmerizing photograph. Your alliteration of "d's" adds to the intensity of the message. Here's to a pleasant Sunday- Joan
Comment Written 21-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Joan, my intrepid traveling friend. Leave it to you to be one of the early trips into Cuba. Thanks for the wonderful review. You are always very perceptive.
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We wanted to go before Cuba became filled with KFC's and Burger Kings! Many thanks for finding me perceptive. Smiles- Joan
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Just how do I shake this darkest depression
that just keeps gnawing at my wounded soul,
A question that many of us ask far too often. If you ever find the answer please let me know.
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Just how do I shake this darkest depression
that just keeps gnawing at my wounded soul,
A question that many of us ask far too often. If you ever find the answer please let me know.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank You Thomas. I certainly will.
Comment from His Grayness
Thanks so much to this excellent author for this meaningful and valuable lesson on another poetic dimension in style. I appreciate this very much. As to the content itself, it wounds me personally to know this brilliant and gifted thinker and writer is unsettled with depression when there is so much (from my perspective) to be grateful for in consideration of his brain power alone. This is a gift given to very few and lays the finest tools of creation upon the table of challenge with the promise of gifts, joy, and appreciation from God Almighty! I can say this, having benefit from much joy and contemplation, yielding joy and visions beyond my quiet soul alone. Please accept my prayers for your further enlightenment and celebration in joy for the awesome power of creation that you have been blessed with and keep sharing it with others of lessor gifts, in the glory of God who has blessed you so bountifully! Blessings and Love! Your friend always! Vance
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thanks so much to this excellent author for this meaningful and valuable lesson on another poetic dimension in style. I appreciate this very much. As to the content itself, it wounds me personally to know this brilliant and gifted thinker and writer is unsettled with depression when there is so much (from my perspective) to be grateful for in consideration of his brain power alone. This is a gift given to very few and lays the finest tools of creation upon the table of challenge with the promise of gifts, joy, and appreciation from God Almighty! I can say this, having benefit from much joy and contemplation, yielding joy and visions beyond my quiet soul alone. Please accept my prayers for your further enlightenment and celebration in joy for the awesome power of creation that you have been blessed with and keep sharing it with others of lessor gifts, in the glory of God who has blessed you so bountifully! Blessings and Love! Your friend always! Vance
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you so much Vance, for this wonderful and very uplifting message. I appreciate your prayers in trying times, and am sure I'll get through it with encouragement from such help.
Comment from RGstar
The master of forms. Good to see you back, my friend, despite the subject matter.
I had a look at your book site ...impressive, so keep that head up and keep doing what you do. I am not even an eighth through what you have done. Hope all goes well for you.
Nice ly written here...and of course there is always an element of new compositions to learn when you present.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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The master of forms. Good to see you back, my friend, despite the subject matter.
I had a look at your book site ...impressive, so keep that head up and keep doing what you do. I am not even an eighth through what you have done. Hope all goes well for you.
Nice ly written here...and of course there is always an element of new compositions to learn when you present.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you RG. I am encouraged by your words and encouragement.
Comment from Pantygynt
I think the one factor that raises this one above the run-of-the-mill variations of the sonnet form is not in the somewhat convoluted layout with the couplet at the centre of things not in the set rhyme scheme but your own addition of the feminie ending to the a rhyme. That I do find fascinating.
I have to say though that of the two posted today i find the tirrell sonnet preferable to this.
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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I think the one factor that raises this one above the run-of-the-mill variations of the sonnet form is not in the somewhat convoluted layout with the couplet at the centre of things not in the set rhyme scheme but your own addition of the feminie ending to the a rhyme. That I do find fascinating.
I have to say though that of the two posted today i find the tirrell sonnet preferable to this.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you Pantygynt. Few would notice that detail. That's why I cherish your input so much. I've got a Tory Hexatet Sonnet already in the hopper for tomorrow, and a Dante's variation yet to write.
Comment from Janilou
This is a powerful poem. I was pulled right in to the mood of the poem with your two opening lines.
I don't profess to know anything about poetry but I do want to mention something aboutthe one line that caused me to "trip" up when reading the line outloud. It may just be me, but I thought it was worth mentioning.
"These thoughts are such as to create impressions"
It was the smaller words "as to" in the middle that caused me the mental stumbling!
My brain wanted to read "Thoughts such as these...."
However this would not work with your rhyme scheme of
abcabc dd aeaeae.
Even with stumbling over this line, I still loved the poem.
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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This is a powerful poem. I was pulled right in to the mood of the poem with your two opening lines.
I don't profess to know anything about poetry but I do want to mention something aboutthe one line that caused me to "trip" up when reading the line outloud. It may just be me, but I thought it was worth mentioning.
"These thoughts are such as to create impressions"
It was the smaller words "as to" in the middle that caused me the mental stumbling!
My brain wanted to read "Thoughts such as these...."
However this would not work with your rhyme scheme of
abcabc dd aeaeae.
Even with stumbling over this line, I still loved the poem.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you Janilou. A valid point. Poetry is rife with such examples, even Shakespeare.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Alfred Dorn sonnet. It seems there are more sonnets than the ones I already know about. There is always something be to learn about every day.
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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A very well-written Alfred Dorn sonnet. It seems there are more sonnets than the ones I already know about. There is always something be to learn about every day.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, I am publishing a book identifying 67 variations of the Sonnet.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I do have to wonder at the poet's ability with such structured pieces. I tend to write from the heart without form per se, but how others manage to infuse formats with that level of feeling and emotion is a real skill.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Hi there,
I do have to wonder at the poet's ability with such structured pieces. I tend to write from the heart without form per se, but how others manage to infuse formats with that level of feeling and emotion is a real skill.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you GMG. I enjoy taking a concept and then letting structure and rhyme scheme help mold the outcome. I often become amazed.
