The Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "Bitter Pill"Poems that are Sonnet Variations
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Comment from Nottoway
This a great poem on the similarity of a "bitter pill" with the bitterness of deception.
Excellent imagery which reinforces the words written.
One question I will ask:
Line 3: Should it read "The details are quite HARD to comprehend....." instead of The details are QUIET hard to comprehend....."
Should the intent have been to use "quiet", enlighten me because I learn so much from you.
This poem really speaks volumes.
Leroy
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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This a great poem on the similarity of a "bitter pill" with the bitterness of deception.
Excellent imagery which reinforces the words written.
One question I will ask:
Line 3: Should it read "The details are quite HARD to comprehend....." instead of The details are QUIET hard to comprehend....."
Should the intent have been to use "quiet", enlighten me because I learn so much from you.
This poem really speaks volumes.
Leroy
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thanks Leroy. Quiet was a typo. I should be quite, as you noted.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing an example of a Terrell Sonnet. I admired your rhymes and the lesson learned--I hope. Your parallel photograph and use of "claws" are very effective. Smiles- Joan, from Havana, Cuba
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Thank you for sharing an example of a Terrell Sonnet. I admired your rhymes and the lesson learned--I hope. Your parallel photograph and use of "claws" are very effective. Smiles- Joan, from Havana, Cuba
Comment Written 14-May-2017
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Thank you Joan.
Comment from His Grayness
My sincere thanks for introduction to this new poetic style and for the delight in reading this fine work. Given that this style is now new to me, it would be unfair for me to rate this poem any further than to say that I enjoyed it and that it appears to be a perfect example of the intended style. Many thanks! HIS GRAYNESS ...Vance
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My sincere thanks for introduction to this new poetic style and for the delight in reading this fine work. Given that this style is now new to me, it would be unfair for me to rate this poem any further than to say that I enjoyed it and that it appears to be a perfect example of the intended style. Many thanks! HIS GRAYNESS ...Vance
Comment Written 14-May-2017
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Thank you Vance. I do have a typo that was pointed out. Quiet should be quite.
Comment from Janilou
"Where problems are most likely to repeat
Rejection is a bitter pill to eat."
I know little about poetry forms, but these particular words were great in your poem. Food for thought indeed.
I didn't find anything to suggest or correct. Hope things look up soon.
Jan
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"Where problems are most likely to repeat
Rejection is a bitter pill to eat."
I know little about poetry forms, but these particular words were great in your poem. Food for thought indeed.
I didn't find anything to suggest or correct. Hope things look up soon.
Jan
Comment Written 14-May-2017
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Thank yo, Janilou. I'm sure they will, eventually.
Comment from RGstar
My first six this week. I don't know the problem, but it seems a s proof that this kind of thing is never one sided.
Apart from that, my friend, this is nicely written, again, despite the subject matter.
Good aura and good word choices.
My best wishes. Stay strong.
RG
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My first six this week. I don't know the problem, but it seems a s proof that this kind of thing is never one sided.
Apart from that, my friend, this is nicely written, again, despite the subject matter.
Good aura and good word choices.
My best wishes. Stay strong.
RG
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you so much RG. Just going through a divorce right now. Seems to be coloring my mood. Glad it hasn't effected my poetic ability.
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Sorry to hear that big fella. You know when you had thought of giving up on FS years ago, we spoke, and you have always remained special to me in your climb and excellence in writing, where I am in awe of you with your knowledge of forms, so now is the time to once again embrace your strength and see this through with dignity and acceptance that, sometimes, this has to be the way, and you will not fold, but go on gently into the night, for there is a day dawning, and happiness will find you once more.
Right here my friend.
Best wishes.
RG
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a fascinating sonnet form and one well worth of the name of sonnet. This one also has a volta that comes in at line ten, the second tercet. The final couplet weorks similarly to a pantoum where the ending inverts the original lines to end with the last line as the first and the penultimate as the second.
Until the volta chimes in the development of gradually increasing detail is not at all unlike the development of a Shakespearean sonnet. I really did find this form fascinatingly rewarding to read.
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This is a fascinating sonnet form and one well worth of the name of sonnet. This one also has a volta that comes in at line ten, the second tercet. The final couplet weorks similarly to a pantoum where the ending inverts the original lines to end with the last line as the first and the penultimate as the second.
Until the volta chimes in the development of gradually increasing detail is not at all unlike the development of a Shakespearean sonnet. I really did find this form fascinatingly rewarding to read.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
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Thank you Pantygynt. I appreciate the input as well as that high ranking.
Comment from MaggieF
Great picture, compliments your poem. The poem flows well with good rhyming and rhythm. We all regret some decisions we made in our life but hopefully we only make them once. MaggieF
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Great picture, compliments your poem. The poem flows well with good rhyming and rhythm. We all regret some decisions we made in our life but hopefully we only make them once. MaggieF
Comment Written 14-May-2017
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Thank you MaggieF. So true.
Comment from pbomar1115
Yes, rejection is always a bitter pill, especially when you have expectations. People have been changing their mind about me so much all my life that bitter pill now does not have the effect it once had. Yes, rejection is hard but part of life.
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Yes, rejection is always a bitter pill, especially when you have expectations. People have been changing their mind about me so much all my life that bitter pill now does not have the effect it once had. Yes, rejection is hard but part of life.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
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Thank you pbomar. Wisely spoken.
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Sure.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tirrell Sonnet. When we are taken for a fool to believe another's lies and games the play. When we finally see the truth it is hard to believe we could be fooledlike that.
possible typo I think you mean quite not quiet.
The details are quiet(quite)hard to comprehend.
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A very well-written Tirrell Sonnet. When we are taken for a fool to believe another's lies and games the play. When we finally see the truth it is hard to believe we could be fooledlike that.
possible typo I think you mean quite not quiet.
The details are quiet(quite)hard to comprehend.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, that is a typo. I appreciate you pointing it out.
