2017 JAPANESE POETRY
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Linked Tanka (Mom's letter to us)"A collection of Japanese poetry
28 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
It seems this mother saved her children form abuse before she died by poisoning dinner and warning the children not to eat it. But now the children will be orphans.
Keep writing and collaborating.
Joan
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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It seems this mother saved her children form abuse before she died by poisoning dinner and warning the children not to eat it. But now the children will be orphans.
Keep writing and collaborating.
Joan
Comment Written 10-May-2017
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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Yes, sometimes is better to be orphan than to live with an abusive father. Thank you very much for reading my poem. Your kindness is appreciated, my friend.
Gypsy
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from Rasmine
Cool! I love horror. Good poem. I hope the mother didn't eat the stew, though. Well, we will all find out!
Gypsy, I will probably pop into the club sometime, but I don't know when. Last night I had an emergency with my cat again, then when she was all set I watched Ghost Whisperer until I was too tired to stay awake. I missed all of one episode.
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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Cool! I love horror. Good poem. I hope the mother didn't eat the stew, though. Well, we will all find out!
Gypsy, I will probably pop into the club sometime, but I don't know when. Last night I had an emergency with my cat again, then when she was all set I watched Ghost Whisperer until I was too tired to stay awake. I missed all of one episode.
Comment Written 10-May-2017
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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Okay, Rasmine. Douglas and I may be at the club early afternoon. Thank you very much for reading my poem. Your kindness is appreciated, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Sis Cat
I am so glad you posted so I can award you my last six star review for the week for your renga collaboration with Hitcher. I remember the joy and the challenge I had writing Atomic Renga with Dean. Your passion and craft show in your poem. It is filled with drama, murder, and mayhem. Of course, Mom warns the children not to eat supper because she poisoned it with arsenic to kill her husband. I enjoy your haiku portion because it is fresh and creates a picture and a mood.
Thank you very much for sharing your project. It thrilled me to give you my last six star review of a week. You are a talented poet and a compassionate person.
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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I am so glad you posted so I can award you my last six star review for the week for your renga collaboration with Hitcher. I remember the joy and the challenge I had writing Atomic Renga with Dean. Your passion and craft show in your poem. It is filled with drama, murder, and mayhem. Of course, Mom warns the children not to eat supper because she poisoned it with arsenic to kill her husband. I enjoy your haiku portion because it is fresh and creates a picture and a mood.
Thank you very much for sharing your project. It thrilled me to give you my last six star review of a week. You are a talented poet and a compassionate person.
Comment Written 10-May-2017
reply by the author on 10-May-2017
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Thank you, honey, it is always good to hear from you and read your insightful and kind words. Thank you for the six stars. :)
Gypsy
Comment from DR DIP
And here's me thinking a renga is a person with red hair! or is that ranga.?
There's is a bit of reading between the lines here. Is pa out to poison them Or are they poising Pa who is obviously violent toward them or mentally abuses them many scenarios in just 3 lines
dip
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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And here's me thinking a renga is a person with red hair! or is that ranga.?
There's is a bit of reading between the lines here. Is pa out to poison them Or are they poising Pa who is obviously violent toward them or mentally abuses them many scenarios in just 3 lines
dip
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the review.
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Gypsy
How interesting between you Hitcher taking turns to write a continuous that looks like a drastic story in
Renga a genre of Japanese collaborative poetry.
Gert
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Hello Gypsy
How interesting between you Hitcher taking turns to write a continuous that looks like a drastic story in
Renga a genre of Japanese collaborative poetry.
Gert
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the review.
Gypsy
Comment from Dean Kuch
I knew it, I just KNEW IT!
Momma slipped a mickey in on Poppa and poisoned his supper.
Well, you know what they often say?
One; if you can't stand the heat stay outta the kitchen, and, two:
"Heaven has no rage, like love to hatred turned,
Nor hell a fury, like a woman scorned." ~ William Congreve.
Nicely done (so sorry I'm all out of sixes!)
~Dean
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I knew it, I just KNEW IT!
Momma slipped a mickey in on Poppa and poisoned his supper.
Well, you know what they often say?
One; if you can't stand the heat stay outta the kitchen, and, two:
"Heaven has no rage, like love to hatred turned,
Nor hell a fury, like a woman scorned." ~ William Congreve.
Nicely done (so sorry I'm all out of sixes!)
~Dean
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words, Dean.
Gypsy
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
I liked your short little poem. You are great at writing all kinds of things.
I have a terrible time writing. I don't remember what things I've written
and I may write them over again. I guess I'll have to leave here.
Kat
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
I liked your short little poem. You are great at writing all kinds of things.
I have a terrible time writing. I don't remember what things I've written
and I may write them over again. I guess I'll have to leave here.
Kat
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the review.
Gypsy
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You're very welcome. Kat
Comment from robyn corum
Gypsy,
This is clever and I have enjoyed watching you two come up with this distinctive and meaningful poem. *smile* Y'all are doing a great job.
The only renga, though, that I know, has rules to be followed. Have you read about that? I'm providing the following link for some info...
http://simplyhaiku.com/SHv5n1/features/Arntzen.html
Thanks!
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Gypsy,
This is clever and I have enjoyed watching you two come up with this distinctive and meaningful poem. *smile* Y'all are doing a great job.
The only renga, though, that I know, has rules to be followed. Have you read about that? I'm providing the following link for some info...
http://simplyhaiku.com/SHv5n1/features/Arntzen.html
Thanks!
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Yeah, traditional renga has very strict rules, what we are writing is more like linked tanka. Thank you for reading.
gypsy
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Cool
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I have read the others and this is an excellent addition to the pieces already done. With her dead on the floor and him poisoned with the stew, now they live if they don't eat supper
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I have read the others and this is an excellent addition to the pieces already done. With her dead on the floor and him poisoned with the stew, now they live if they don't eat supper
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind review.
Gypsy
Comment from apky
Mom's letter to us
was brief, "Don't eat supper!"
Pa won't touch us again
~ well, I need a little educating here, kids.
Who'll start: Gypsy or Hitcher?
Apky
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Mom's letter to us
was brief, "Don't eat supper!"
Pa won't touch us again
~ well, I need a little educating here, kids.
Who'll start: Gypsy or Hitcher?
Apky
Comment Written 09-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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I started. I write three lines and Hitcher follows with two and I follow him with three... and on and on. Thank you very much for the kind review.
Gypsy
