Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

O-h-h-h-hhhhh...
A horror/thriller poem; how delightfully decadent.
Let's see what you're made of...

"Ah, they walk, umbrellas their cover,
I need no protection, one soon will discover.
For, I am the invincible one,
Dark traveler, I'm a loaded gun. ...An ominous enough character, to be sure, JoAnn. But who are these ubiquitous they you've written about? City dwellers? Girls of the evening? Or just your average, everyday Joe walkin' the streets at dark? A family man, perhaps--with a wife and children...

"[They]" Most called me evil, dubbed me vile,
My victims could be an adult, or child.
I'm a force of nature, a curse--a god!
I laugh aloud when people call me odd.
I laugh when fools claim that I'm odd." ... A few edits made for meter's sake...

I particularly enjoyed the ending best of all. It leaves room for a sequel as "The Black Cloak" hints at being reborn once more to terrorize the streets of the fair city.

Very nice, JoAnn.
You do darkness pretty proud!

Five out of Five Skulls


~Dean

 Comment Written 08-May-2017

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

That is definitely a compliment from you my friend!. Much appreciate you reading, the great suggestions and the kind words too! JoAnn

reply by Dean Kuch on 08-May-2017

My pleasure, nice work!
~Dean ;}

Comment from RodG

Excellent

You definitely capture the MOOD of this picture in this piece of noir. I am impressed by how fully-characterized your psychopath is in this poetic narrative and how you are able to tell the entire story in only 8 stanzas. I'll never be a fan of AABB rhyming, but that's beside the point. Nice job! Rod

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

Thanks so much. I am terrible as I love the simple rhyming types. I must admit, I'm intimidated by some of the harder ones. I so appreciate your comments.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Exceptional

Excellent writing. A crime drama disguised as a poem, not unlike your villain, in disguise. There should be a contest for this. You would win.

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

I thank you so much for this kind review and the fabulous 6 stars. I thought he should be caught in the end, lest people think me too evil-haha.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem and great interpretation of 'the picture this' challenge about the mysterious man walking in the rain , revealing is evil plans and sole purpose.

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

Thanks so much for your great comments.

Comment from Shawgins

Excellent

Man this was pretty good especially for coming up with it just from looking at a picture. I was glad the guy was caught because I was thinking it was beginning to get pretty dark lol.

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 Comment Written 08-May-2017

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

I know, I thought I better have him captured or there would be those who thought I was a little too evil-haha. Much appreciate your review.

Comment from lalajovanoski

Excellent

I found this piece to be an excellent write with good construction. Full of depth and a lot of emotions are felt. thanks for sharing this

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 Comment Written 08-May-2017

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reply by the author on 08-May-2017

Thanks so much. Your reading and review are truly appreciated.