Perennials of War
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Comment from robyn corum
Barbara,
Another interesting chapter. It seems that this group is steadily working toward answers. Perhaps they'll get things figured out. *smile*
One tiny note:
1.) Philip tapped the pen against the pad(.)
Thanks!
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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Barbara,
Another interesting chapter. It seems that this group is steadily working toward answers. Perhaps they'll get things figured out. *smile*
One tiny note:
1.) Philip tapped the pen against the pad(.)
Thanks!
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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I have made the correction. Thank you.
Comment from Heidi M
I definitely don't trust the curator now. No way should she have been made to wait for an hour-and-a-half and then receive no information.
I enjoyed this chapter because it felt like you have picked up the pace and we are making progress in the mystery of who might want the painting.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I definitely don't trust the curator now. No way should she have been made to wait for an hour-and-a-half and then receive no information.
I enjoyed this chapter because it felt like you have picked up the pace and we are making progress in the mystery of who might want the painting.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Excellent continuation. So both the intrigue and uncertainty both fueled by speculation continues to increase regarding the Russian. Is he a assassin or just another individual who migrated to the States? Enjoyed
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Good morning, Barbara
Excellent continuation. So both the intrigue and uncertainty both fueled by speculation continues to increase regarding the Russian. Is he a assassin or just another individual who migrated to the States? Enjoyed
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from apky
>>"Everything leads to the painting. I wonder if the curator is involved. Maybe Kuznetsov is innocent. We never considered the curator. We need to check him out." Anderson dialed his cell phone. "I'll have a background check done on him." When he finished his call, he added, "Jeremy will be here shortly. Let's finish our list." <<
I found myself wondering about who, exactly, Anderson had called for the background check. I felt the reader should be made to know who, or else Anderson should leave the room to call in private - makes him more mysterious/suspicious.
But these are my own thoughts and subjective.
Thanks for another great chapter.
Apky
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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>>"Everything leads to the painting. I wonder if the curator is involved. Maybe Kuznetsov is innocent. We never considered the curator. We need to check him out." Anderson dialed his cell phone. "I'll have a background check done on him." When he finished his call, he added, "Jeremy will be here shortly. Let's finish our list." <<
I found myself wondering about who, exactly, Anderson had called for the background check. I felt the reader should be made to know who, or else Anderson should leave the room to call in private - makes him more mysterious/suspicious.
But these are my own thoughts and subjective.
Thanks for another great chapter.
Apky
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rasmine
Cool, maybe the curator.
Congratulations to your grandson for graduating. Now he will go to new and better things. Enjoy your family and have a great time at the graduation. Good luck with correcting and grading everyone at the end of the year. (I remember thinking, when I was a student, the teachers give a lot of work. Then I became a teacher, and I saw what they have to do--lot more than what one student has to accomplish.
TC :)
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Cool, maybe the curator.
Congratulations to your grandson for graduating. Now he will go to new and better things. Enjoy your family and have a great time at the graduation. Good luck with correcting and grading everyone at the end of the year. (I remember thinking, when I was a student, the teachers give a lot of work. Then I became a teacher, and I saw what they have to do--lot more than what one student has to accomplish.
TC :)
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you for the well wishes and the kind review.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
Interesting read.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Great dialogue.
Nice artwork: The image shown supports the story.
The author's notes are very much appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Interesting read.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Great dialogue.
Nice artwork: The image shown supports the story.
The author's notes are very much appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sis Cat
The curator? Now that's an interesting lead, and a good one because people on the inside of a the art world are known to steal paintings. I am still apprehensive about researching Ivan Kuznetsov, but he may prove to be a false lead.
Your story engages me because it is well written and keeps me guessing. I am still awaiting for more romance to blossom between Shana and Anderson, but that will come in time. Now the focus is on Who-Done-It?
The only SPAG I found is that you should use a comma instead of a semicolon here:
. . . but," Shana stopped to think(,) "about three months . . .
Thank you, Barbara, for sharing another thrilling chapter.
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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The curator? Now that's an interesting lead, and a good one because people on the inside of a the art world are known to steal paintings. I am still apprehensive about researching Ivan Kuznetsov, but he may prove to be a false lead.
Your story engages me because it is well written and keeps me guessing. I am still awaiting for more romance to blossom between Shana and Anderson, but that will come in time. Now the focus is on Who-Done-It?
The only SPAG I found is that you should use a comma instead of a semicolon here:
. . . but," Shana stopped to think(,) "about three months . . .
Thank you, Barbara, for sharing another thrilling chapter.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 15-May-2017
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Maybe after we solve the who-done-it. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
There are thousands of pieces of stolen art work that are still missing. This id very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
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There are thousands of pieces of stolen art work that are still missing. This id very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 07-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Lots of info in this chapter... good summary of story so far. Since Shana had the paperwork to prove she owned the painting, why didnt they give it to her? Sure sounds like the museum is in on the theft.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Lots of info in this chapter... good summary of story so far. Since Shana had the paperwork to prove she owned the painting, why didnt they give it to her? Sure sounds like the museum is in on the theft.
Comment Written 07-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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It takes decades for these people to get their artwork back. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. At last, I thik we are making some headway in this adventure. For a little while we seemed to be getting stalled for some reason. Well written chapter here for most part.
Suggestions: ""Don't you have some place to go?" Anderson glanced at Philip." I think for more clarity you should switch these two sentences around. "anderson glanced at Phillip. "don't you have someplace to go?" (In your recap notes)
And: "After he sat, he held up the pen. "Give me something to write." (He took a seat, and held up the pen."
Also: Again here. You need to put the action first so switch these teo sentences around: ""He could be an innocent bystander in all of this." Shana tilted her head."
And: "I guess exactly who is Ivan Kuznetsov? " Just "Who is Ivan Kunznetsov?" would be adequate and sound better.
Good job, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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Hi, Barbara. At last, I thik we are making some headway in this adventure. For a little while we seemed to be getting stalled for some reason. Well written chapter here for most part.
Suggestions: ""Don't you have some place to go?" Anderson glanced at Philip." I think for more clarity you should switch these two sentences around. "anderson glanced at Phillip. "don't you have someplace to go?" (In your recap notes)
And: "After he sat, he held up the pen. "Give me something to write." (He took a seat, and held up the pen."
Also: Again here. You need to put the action first so switch these teo sentences around: ""He could be an innocent bystander in all of this." Shana tilted her head."
And: "I guess exactly who is Ivan Kuznetsov? " Just "Who is Ivan Kunznetsov?" would be adequate and sound better.
Good job, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 07-May-2017
reply by the author on 07-May-2017
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I think I have all the corrections made. I hope I do anyway. Thank you for the time it takes to edit.
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:) Bob
