My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Over one thing"a collection of my poetry
69 total reviews
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Precious poem and total layout is excellent, of course. It makes for a perfection. I am learning these different form of poetry from you. The nonet is amazing to me. I love the way you shape the words on the page. I will do my research on Nonet poems and on day I will try this also. Perhaps in my next book I will use the forms of poetry that I am learning from Fan Story.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Precious poem and total layout is excellent, of course. It makes for a perfection. I am learning these different form of poetry from you. The nonet is amazing to me. I love the way you shape the words on the page. I will do my research on Nonet poems and on day I will try this also. Perhaps in my next book I will use the forms of poetry that I am learning from Fan Story.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Tier, thank you so much for your review. I find shadowpoetry.com a good source for different types of poetry and the requirements of each poetic form. I'm glad you are enjoying my poems, along with all the others on Fan Story.
~patty~
Comment from c_lucas
I cannot read your poem because there is not enough contrast. I tried different methods, but could not lighting the test. If you can make it brighter I will be happy to review it.
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I was unable to high light the original, but I succeeded in highlighting the revise. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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I cannot read your poem because there is not enough contrast. I tried different methods, but could not lighting the test. If you can make it brighter I will be happy to review it.
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I was unable to high light the original, but I succeeded in highlighting the revise. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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I adjusted the background color - hopefully this will help you read the poem. One way is to simply highlight the text with your cursor. Thank you for trying,
~patty~
Comment from pbomar1115
Persuading someone to return because they were once there is believable to me. For some reason, I think I heard it. Of course, that was in my younger days. Never mind, but women have the power to charm a man anything she pleases. She will get him with this word. I like it this written work.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Persuading someone to return because they were once there is believable to me. For some reason, I think I heard it. Of course, that was in my younger days. Never mind, but women have the power to charm a man anything she pleases. She will get him with this word. I like it this written work.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you felt the emotion behind her words, and think she could convince a man to come back,
~patty~
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You're welcome.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Hi Patty, Your nonet is absolutely spot on with the syllable count. The presentation is lovely and the message soulful. Well done my friend. Nancy
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Patty, Your nonet is absolutely spot on with the syllable count. The presentation is lovely and the message soulful. Well done my friend. Nancy
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Nancy; thank you so much for your warm review of this nonet poem. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~
Comment from Sanku
the world is truly a scary place.
well written nonet .sad too for she is asking for a second chance .
must have made some mistake . mainly because of her principles.The presentation also is very good with a cute fairy sitting on a heart.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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the world is truly a scary place.
well written nonet .sad too for she is asking for a second chance .
must have made some mistake . mainly because of her principles.The presentation also is very good with a cute fairy sitting on a heart.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from Irish Rain
Such a cute picture, such a sad little nonet. I believe one more chance for this cute little fairy should be mandatory! Love your nonet! Blessings....
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Such a cute picture, such a sad little nonet. I believe one more chance for this cute little fairy should be mandatory! Love your nonet! Blessings....
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Karyn; thank you so much for the lovely review of this piece. I was so glad when I found the picture - it went with the words so well - your kind words are greatly appreciated,
~patty~
Comment from Oatmeal
Mustangpatty1029,
This is a nice reading. The style was very good. The arrangement is formatted very well. Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive. Comprehensible and very well written.
It's a very clean piece. I saw no typos or SPAG. (also, I like the art)
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Mustangpatty1029,
This is a nice reading. The style was very good. The arrangement is formatted very well. Chosen explanations are made very clear and descriptive. Comprehensible and very well written.
It's a very clean piece. I saw no typos or SPAG. (also, I like the art)
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Camille! Thank you for your very kind review. I'm glad you liked this piece,
~patty~
Comment from TPAC
Get off your knees. The next time hit them with a stick. This fact might clear some of those clouds, sometimes best to appreciate what you have. All in my held view of this particular work.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Get off your knees. The next time hit them with a stick. This fact might clear some of those clouds, sometimes best to appreciate what you have. All in my held view of this particular work.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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LOL! thank you for stopping by to read and review this work - which isn't autobiographical in the least. (I'm so glad about that.)
~patty~
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Nonet poem. The world is quite a scary place to live in these days. Everyone wants to be in charge while no one is really qualified to take control.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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A very well-written Nonet poem. The world is quite a scary place to live in these days. Everyone wants to be in charge while no one is really qualified to take control.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Sandra; thank you so much for your time to read and review. I appreciate your comments,
~patty~
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Still standing on principle
I'm numb and unafraid
Tho' I wish you'd stayed
Can't you come back?
Give me just
One more
chance.' I totally get your meaning here, this is fantastic and very intereting, kind regards and well done on an excellent write, Meia x
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Still standing on principle
I'm numb and unafraid
Tho' I wish you'd stayed
Can't you come back?
Give me just
One more
chance.' I totally get your meaning here, this is fantastic and very intereting, kind regards and well done on an excellent write, Meia x
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Hi Meia; thank you so much for your wonderful review. I'm glad you liked this one,
~patty~ xoxox
