Caged
Holding onto love too tightly10 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your entry in the Found Poem contest. Your references give us the background of your words, but the words themselves tell us a tale of love lost. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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thank you for sharing your entry in the Found Poem contest. Your references give us the background of your words, but the words themselves tell us a tale of love lost. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Thank you so much!
Comment from lyenochka
Artfully done! I like the use of the "cage" imagery of holding a loved one too tightly within the confines what the lover wants instead of letting the beloved be all he or she is meant to be.
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Artfully done! I like the use of the "cage" imagery of holding a loved one too tightly within the confines what the lover wants instead of letting the beloved be all he or she is meant to be.
Comment Written 03-May-2017
reply by the author on 03-May-2017
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Thank you for your insights!
Comment from DR DIP
This is a poem though short does say a lot. Love in a cage can be interpreted as that she has felt imprisoned in a relationship and her release vents all her anger. But now she has new challenges and fears in an outside world. Well that's my take on your poem lol Probably way out.
good luck in the contest
dip
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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This is a poem though short does say a lot. Love in a cage can be interpreted as that she has felt imprisoned in a relationship and her release vents all her anger. But now she has new challenges and fears in an outside world. Well that's my take on your poem lol Probably way out.
good luck in the contest
dip
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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It could go either way - which is what makes it fun. Different perspectives. He could have felt suffocated and left - leaving her metaphorically caged by her fears of being alone. Or, she could be the one who felt trapped, etc. Thanks for taking the time to read and review, Dip.
Comment from emptypage
Ah... second time I've run across you today.
This poem relates a desperate truth. Any love caged isn't love at all, but a false sense of that best thing humans can experience. Caged is controlled. Love doesn't control. Remember that saying/poem, "If you love something, set it free. If it comes back, it is yours. If it doesn't, it never was." Your poem says this very thing.
It says it beautifully.
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Ah... second time I've run across you today.
This poem relates a desperate truth. Any love caged isn't love at all, but a false sense of that best thing humans can experience. Caged is controlled. Love doesn't control. Remember that saying/poem, "If you love something, set it free. If it comes back, it is yours. If it doesn't, it never was." Your poem says this very thing.
It says it beautifully.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Thank you again for stopping by. I was actually thinking of that very same saying when I saw the artwork. Love shouldn't suffocate. Rather it should liberate. Thanks again for your feedback.
Comment from patcelaw
There is a wonderful truth here in this poem. I have seen examples of parents hold too tightly to their children, then having the children rebel. And on the other hand we must hold our children with a hand that will allow them to fly with the time is ideal for a healthy adult child. Patricia
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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There is a wonderful truth here in this poem. I have seen examples of parents hold too tightly to their children, then having the children rebel. And on the other hand we must hold our children with a hand that will allow them to fly with the time is ideal for a healthy adult child. Patricia
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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So true. We need to give them wings to fly, but roots to grow. Delicate balance that is challenging for parents. Thank you for your insights on
Comment from donette1914
very well written and it is so true if you hang on to love to tightly it does feel like your in a cage with no way out. very creative and i like the artwork and it was a pleasure to read your work
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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very well written and it is so true if you hang on to love to tightly it does feel like your in a cage with no way out. very creative and i like the artwork and it was a pleasure to read your work
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Appreciate your positive feedback!
Comment from MaggieF
Great appropriate picture. This type of poem must make you think...a lot, I'm sure it's much harder than it looks. The more we hold on to love the more the person wants to be free.Jealously is very distructive. I like 'enclosed by her own panorama fear'. MaggieF
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Great appropriate picture. This type of poem must make you think...a lot, I'm sure it's much harder than it looks. The more we hold on to love the more the person wants to be free.Jealously is very distructive. I like 'enclosed by her own panorama fear'. MaggieF
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Thank you for your insights!
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
I like the title, 'Caged'.
Very nice poem.
--I kept saying 'paranoia of fear'- My bad!
Great artwork: The image shown fits the poem. The background and font colors blend in well with the drawing.
The author's notes are appreciated.- Thank you!
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Found Poem.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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I like the title, 'Caged'.
Very nice poem.
--I kept saying 'paranoia of fear'- My bad!
Great artwork: The image shown fits the poem. The background and font colors blend in well with the drawing.
The author's notes are appreciated.- Thank you!
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Found Poem.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Appreciate your positive feedback!
Comment from robyn corum
love kept in a cage
does fly away in a rage
leaving me gazing
silently, enclosed by my
own panorama of fear
June,
I don't imagine that writing a Found Poem is easy. *smile* But I applaud your efforts here. I think you've started something remarkable. Really!
BUT - I have to tell you that after the first two lines (which I ADORED!) I am a little lost on the meaning of the poem. Here's why:
1.) love kept in a cage
does fly away in a rage
--> This is a general statement, a truth. It is brilliant and beautiful and highly poetic.
2.) leaving me gazing silently,
--> now you introduce a character. Is this person really representing YOU, or just the public at large? Are you gazing silently at the empty cage?
3.) enclosed by my own panorama of fear
--> where does the fear come from? You've switched 'cages', it seems. From the love that was in the cage to a caged version of yourself, perhaps?
--> but why the fear? Is it of being alone once love has flown?
I have several unanswered questions after reading this poem. It seems to need a bit of clarification -- to me, at least. Something to consider?
Much good luck in the contest, however~ I do love your idea! Thanks!
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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love kept in a cage
does fly away in a rage
leaving me gazing
silently, enclosed by my
own panorama of fear
June,
I don't imagine that writing a Found Poem is easy. *smile* But I applaud your efforts here. I think you've started something remarkable. Really!
BUT - I have to tell you that after the first two lines (which I ADORED!) I am a little lost on the meaning of the poem. Here's why:
1.) love kept in a cage
does fly away in a rage
--> This is a general statement, a truth. It is brilliant and beautiful and highly poetic.
2.) leaving me gazing silently,
--> now you introduce a character. Is this person really representing YOU, or just the public at large? Are you gazing silently at the empty cage?
3.) enclosed by my own panorama of fear
--> where does the fear come from? You've switched 'cages', it seems. From the love that was in the cage to a caged version of yourself, perhaps?
--> but why the fear? Is it of being alone once love has flown?
I have several unanswered questions after reading this poem. It seems to need a bit of clarification -- to me, at least. Something to consider?
Much good luck in the contest, however~ I do love your idea! Thanks!
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Points well taken. Have a few days to tweak this. Appreciate the honest review.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, this is a great found poem using words from other poems on FanStory. I love how you wove them together to tell a compelling story of imprisoned love . . .love imprisoned by fear. You used some nice rhymes and a near rhyme in your first three lines to create a smooth read:
love kept in a cage
does fly away in a rage
leaving me gazing
Last line hints that it is a person's own panorama of fear that imprisons and not an outside source.
Thank you for sharing your talent. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Wow, this is a great found poem using words from other poems on FanStory. I love how you wove them together to tell a compelling story of imprisoned love . . .love imprisoned by fear. You used some nice rhymes and a near rhyme in your first three lines to create a smooth read:
love kept in a cage
does fly away in a rage
leaving me gazing
Last line hints that it is a person's own panorama of fear that imprisons and not an outside source.
Thank you for sharing your talent. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2017
reply by the author on 02-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging words!
