Act of Endurance
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Comment from lyenochka
It's not completely clear to me what the poem is saying but here's my interpretation. The poem takes us on a journey of a raindrops as they join in with others into puddles and ultimately a brook and they help support life of other creatures. Close?
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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It's not completely clear to me what the poem is saying but here's my interpretation. The poem takes us on a journey of a raindrops as they join in with others into puddles and ultimately a brook and they help support life of other creatures. Close?
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
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Nice thought, new revisions done could clear up more, like your basic, intents more profound in nature. Thanking you for your generous rate, dispute my lacks in grammar to express well, and welcomed comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The flow of life is a bit of mix of reality and fantasy as it is evident adventure gives a fair knock to the stand of struggles for living; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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The flow of life is a bit of mix of reality and fantasy as it is evident adventure gives a fair knock to the stand of struggles for living; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Loved living deep in the woods as young child, making friends with the environment having no one my age to play with, enlighten by the interests exchanged by parties. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from beizanten
A very well written beginning with great imaginary. A well written second paragraph. A great third paragraph. A well written and very good imaginary overall
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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A very well written beginning with great imaginary. A well written second paragraph. A great third paragraph. A well written and very good imaginary overall
Comment Written 17-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2019
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Not often recieving your stated accomplishment for my writes, consistently efforts correcting flaws, wishing like hell you are right. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Raul1
I like this poem because it's easy to read and understand. A well thought out written poem. I find it interesting. You structured this piece well. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I like this poem because it's easy to read and understand. A well thought out written poem. I find it interesting. You structured this piece well. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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Not many agree with you, feeling glad aspects in this particular write were captivating to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Earl Corp
The picture you used is great, very beautiful and serene. Your title was a good attention grabber, it pulled me in. I had a hard time following the poem itself and didn't get a rapids vibe from your words.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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The picture you used is great, very beautiful and serene. Your title was a good attention grabber, it pulled me in. I had a hard time following the poem itself and didn't get a rapids vibe from your words.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2019
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I hear your thoughts, acknowledging my writes haven lacks, appreciating dispute those flaws some interesting aspects in its read. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Randa Dayle
b.... e.... a.... u.... t.... i.... f.... u.... l...
I really enjoyed the imagery of this poem. I feel that you have a love of the world. I see that you are interested in exsistence. I find this interesting because I am writing a novel about the beginning of our exsistence. Just thought that was interesting.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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b.... e.... a.... u.... t.... i.... f.... u.... l...
I really enjoyed the imagery of this poem. I feel that you have a love of the world. I see that you are interested in exsistence. I find this interesting because I am writing a novel about the beginning of our exsistence. Just thought that was interesting.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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I hold many biblical notes I studied, discovering a common bond between stories among cultures. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Liberty Justice
What great visual descriptions of these waterfalls. You use fascinating words with metaphors, similes and alliterations describing the beauty of these water falls and woods. Seems you are comparing these to someone. AWESOME. Read my writings, also. lolol liberty justice
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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What great visual descriptions of these waterfalls. You use fascinating words with metaphors, similes and alliterations describing the beauty of these water falls and woods. Seems you are comparing these to someone. AWESOME. Read my writings, also. lolol liberty justice
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2019
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I'm glad you define what I wrote, needing such a statement to understand my writes. Thanking you for those thoughts and generous rate.
Comment from 24chas
I always enjoy reading your work, TPAC. You've got such a unique, creative, and quirky voice that I look forward to reading. This one certainly fits that bill. A great piece with awesome imagery. Good job.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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I always enjoy reading your work, TPAC. You've got such a unique, creative, and quirky voice that I look forward to reading. This one certainly fits that bill. A great piece with awesome imagery. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2019
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Hope I can maintain that interests, finding myself pleased with the thought of one appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from C.D. Unmack
Although this piece certainly evokes the feel of unrelenting rapids, I had trouble w/the cadence and language (example: "unfriendly never as hops mopes land." = I have no real idea what this means, although it feels somewhat intense). A good effort, but I'm not sure I was a good example of the intended audience to read this. Cheers! -cdu
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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Although this piece certainly evokes the feel of unrelenting rapids, I had trouble w/the cadence and language (example: "unfriendly never as hops mopes land." = I have no real idea what this means, although it feels somewhat intense). A good effort, but I'm not sure I was a good example of the intended audience to read this. Cheers! -cdu
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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You are a perfect pick for this effort, finding my endeavors lack of obtaining all my reviewers praise, given delight by low rates that encourage my revisions. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from kiwijenny
I have to read and reread . Sometimes the meaning isn't clear and it seems disjointed.
hides features alive gleams a shy song..... song is sound...gleam is sight..
Droplets go slopes to fall in a small sea,
searching hopes in rarely discourteous,
unfriendly never as hops mopes of land. ...droplets go slopes? hops mopes of land....??
What does it mean?
God bless
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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I have to read and reread . Sometimes the meaning isn't clear and it seems disjointed.
hides features alive gleams a shy song..... song is sound...gleam is sight..
Droplets go slopes to fall in a small sea,
searching hopes in rarely discourteous,
unfriendly never as hops mopes of land. ...droplets go slopes? hops mopes of land....??
What does it mean?
God bless
Comment Written 05-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019
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My defining of flowing rain, needing to address my intent with reader's comprehension, given delights by the challenge with new revisions. Thanking you dispite flaws, given generous rate, and welcomed comments.
