Lamentations of a Lost Laddy
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Comment from wondertwin
Nice background with your family tree. You may have caught it already, but do a quick edit with spell check-a couple of words got the letters mixed up. Also, The last stanza with Lori got cut out. I probably never said I used to work in Sacramento on the ambulance. I was there from 2004-20011. I lived in Jackson though, not in the city.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Nice background with your family tree. You may have caught it already, but do a quick edit with spell check-a couple of words got the letters mixed up. Also, The last stanza with Lori got cut out. I probably never said I used to work in Sacramento on the ambulance. I was there from 2004-20011. I lived in Jackson though, not in the city.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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My apologies, as this is a work in progress. I saved it in"preview" mode, but when I edited, I accidentally released it.
I will let you know when it is complete.
I really appreciate your feedback, nonetheless. It is awesome of of to give me such a kind review on an unfinished Chapter*
Thank-you so much for helping me with the spelling!
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
I enjoyed reading about your family. wow, your cousin had seven husbands :)
Then, when I turned 18, my father and mother seperated (separated)
Together, they bore Corey Farrish McCintyre, who was born in and died tragically in (something missing here?)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Hi,
I enjoyed reading about your family. wow, your cousin had seven husbands :)
Then, when I turned 18, my father and mother seperated (separated)
Together, they bore Corey Farrish McCintyre, who was born in and died tragically in (something missing here?)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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My apologies, as this is a work in progress. I saved it in"preview" mode, but when I edited, I accidentally released it.
I will let you know when it is complete.
I really appreciate your feedback, nonetheless. It is awesome of of to give me such a kind review on an unfinished Chapter*
Blessings,
Brother Badger
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Good luck in completing this chapter.
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Ty, you will be notified
Comment from Janilou
It's an informative chapter. The only thing I would suggest, is adding some more identifying information about the people you list, to stop the names from running together for someone who doesn't know them.
Found one typo here:
Lisa and I are the same age, but Chuck, who is no longer with us, and I are the ones that really connected, being the youngest of three boys of sisters, AND being the addict/alcoholic/touble making black (sheeop) of the family.
sheep
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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It's an informative chapter. The only thing I would suggest, is adding some more identifying information about the people you list, to stop the names from running together for someone who doesn't know them.
Found one typo here:
Lisa and I are the same age, but Chuck, who is no longer with us, and I are the ones that really connected, being the youngest of three boys of sisters, AND being the addict/alcoholic/touble making black (sheeop) of the family.
sheep
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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My apologies, as this is a work in progress. I saved it in"preview" mode, but when I edited, I accidentally released it.
I will let you know when it is complete.
I really appreciate your feedback, nonetheless. It is awesome of of to give me such a kind review on an unfinished Chapter*
Thank-you so much for helping me with the spelling!
Blessings,
Brother Badger
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Oh, I have done that myself! It's so frustrating, isn't it? Good luck with the continued work. :-)
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Ty, you will be notified.
Darren
