It Began Poorly
The first impression sometimes is an alert20 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Poet raises a point of view about the first impression of a person is rather the last impression and warns that we should be cautious about other's first impression as it helps taking a stand for keeping or growing a relation; I liked the view and enjoyed the read.
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Poet raises a point of view about the first impression of a person is rather the last impression and warns that we should be cautious about other's first impression as it helps taking a stand for keeping or growing a relation; I liked the view and enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Funny piece. I enjoyed the bounce through this morning and had lots of laughs.I hope this isn't totally biographical. If it is, remember that a piece of paper can't stop a bullet. The closing couplet is delightful indeed. - Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Funny piece. I enjoyed the bounce through this morning and had lots of laughs.I hope this isn't totally biographical. If it is, remember that a piece of paper can't stop a bullet. The closing couplet is delightful indeed. - Wendy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Wendy. I'm glad you had a few chuckles. Not "totally" biographical, and not at all biographical. It was inspired by a revelation from a friend. The contest prompt gave me free rein to let it rip, so to speak - "...you can just make it up or PRETEND like you're making it up."
Hugs,
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Comment from Sasha
Too often we ignore what I call 'gut instinct' and later pay the price. Sound like the date from hell. What is it with people that have been told the other is no longer interested in perusing the relationship, just don't get the message. If someone told me they didn't want to see me again, I make an effort to avoid them. Great poem, filled with fun lines and a borderline scary situation.
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Too often we ignore what I call 'gut instinct' and later pay the price. Sound like the date from hell. What is it with people that have been told the other is no longer interested in perusing the relationship, just don't get the message. If someone told me they didn't want to see me again, I make an effort to avoid them. Great poem, filled with fun lines and a borderline scary situation.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
Comment from BeasPeas
Well, well! I think our "gut" knows whether something will "fly" before our brain does. We have to learn to trust our gut. Good rhyming in this cleverly worded and rhymed piece. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Well, well! I think our "gut" knows whether something will "fly" before our brain does. We have to learn to trust our gut. Good rhyming in this cleverly worded and rhymed piece. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Marilyn. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
LOL oh dear, you pulled this one off and fulfilled the rules of the contest very well. I had to laugh at the progression of this unwanted love and the trials to get rid of her. Very cute
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LOL oh dear, you pulled this one off and fulfilled the rules of the contest very well. I had to laugh at the progression of this unwanted love and the trials to get rid of her. Very cute
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Don, this certainly is a fun entry for the Love You? HaHaHa! contest. I inwardly chuckled and even though the meter is slightly off there are some clever rhymes to pull this piece together. Well done and on the 'girlfriend' front - dump her. First impressions count. ~DD
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Don, this certainly is a fun entry for the Love You? HaHaHa! contest. I inwardly chuckled and even though the meter is slightly off there are some clever rhymes to pull this piece together. Well done and on the 'girlfriend' front - dump her. First impressions count. ~DD
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
Comment from aryr
Oh my goodness, this was so hilarious that I laughed with tears and had to wait a few minutes to type a review. It was easy to read and follow and presented a great rhyme pattern. The picture was ideal for the words. Those words created a distinctive visual. And carried a truth that first impressions are 99.9% right. Great job Don, thanks.
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Oh my goodness, this was so hilarious that I laughed with tears and had to wait a few minutes to type a review. It was easy to read and follow and presented a great rhyme pattern. The picture was ideal for the words. Those words created a distinctive visual. And carried a truth that first impressions are 99.9% right. Great job Don, thanks.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
Comment from RodG
What makes this poem entertaining is that your tone is ambiguous. All the details listed suggest she was anything but a "keeper," yet the READER is amused and I feel that enough time has passed that you are intentionally droll.
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What makes this poem entertaining is that your tone is ambiguous. All the details listed suggest she was anything but a "keeper," yet the READER is amused and I feel that enough time has passed that you are intentionally droll.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hahaha. This is a wonderful entry for the "Love You - haha" contest. A love that needs to be stopped by a restraining order can never be a good thing. Yes, the fart was definitely a warning,
~patty~
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Hahaha. This is a wonderful entry for the "Love You - haha" contest. A love that needs to be stopped by a restraining order can never be a good thing. Yes, the fart was definitely a warning,
~patty~
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
Comment from Poisonandperfume
This is amusing. But hey, ladies fart. Maybe not on the first date though.
This flows well and has a good rythem to it. You rhyme "her" with "her" a couple of times which annoys me but not enough to make the poem less entertaining.
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This is amusing. But hey, ladies fart. Maybe not on the first date though.
This flows well and has a good rythem to it. You rhyme "her" with "her" a couple of times which annoys me but not enough to make the poem less entertaining.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
