Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

His voice speaks soft and gentle,
Gentle is His warm embrace,
Embrace love He gives for free,
Free from sin, without a trace.'
such a beautiful poem for the loop contest you have dine so well congratulations Jesus will be proud of you for writing such a wonderful testament to your faith and his everlasting kindness, kindest regards, Meia x

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Meia; thank you so much for your lovely review of this work. I certainly hope that Jesus is proud - He was the inspiration,
~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Jesus promises to be with us always. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an inspirational read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

thank you so much for your wonderful review of this piece. I'm glad you found it inspirational,
~patty~

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Today, just another day,
Day one to spread the good news,

A very good poem. It's good to remember we don't need Easter or a special day to remember Jesus.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Thomas; I'm glad you liked the poem and felt the love coming through its word. We certainly don't need to only write about Christ's love at only Christmas and Easter,
~patty~

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

You seem to have followed the rules for the contest Patty. Nice poem about our Savior, Jesus, Wow! What a picture. Just look at those eyes. In the next to the last line, should it say> "Embrace [the] love He gives for free."? Well done Good Luck. Nancy

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Nancy; thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I did go in and change the second to the last line. I made it fit the seven syllable requirement, and it looks better - thank you for the suggestion,
~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written loop poem with a great message. The message fro. Heaven is always good news and we can spread the news with gladness and joy to e eryone on earth.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Sandra; thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review. Have a good day,
~patty~

Comment from MaggieF

Excellent

Great picture. Such a positive poem. Your faith jumps out from the page in this poem. I do enjoy this type of poem, it scans very well. I loved 'streets that wear out your new shoes'. MaggieF

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review of this piece. I'm glad you enjoyed,
~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Exceptional

Oh yes my friend this is well written and there is no stronger message that you could have shared it is a meaningful loop poem that I truly enjoyed well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Jill; thank you so much for the kind review AND for the shiny six star rating. I'm glad you liked the piece,
~patty~

Comment from apky

Excellent

One of these days, my friend, you'll have to teach me
how to get a word in on the outskirts of poems and
poetry. You write so well, whatever you chose to write
about: pets, yourself, God and the world.
I guess that's what they call True Talent.
Alway,
Apky

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Apky; what a wonderful compliment! If I truly understood the process I use to write, I'd love to share it with you. I usually look at the requirements of the poetic form, and build a framework. From there, I fill in the words. I love it when the rhymes are in the right place, and then the cohesive story needs to be told. See, I really don't know how I do it,
~patty~

Comment from dovemarie

Exceptional

Dear patty, Excellent religious loop poem! I loved your rhymes and the rhythm of your stanzas. And I recognized it as a loop poem even before I saw the word Loop Poem contest entry. I'm getting to be familiar with the different styles I've been learning! Dove

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Dove; thank you so much for the lovely review. Isn't it wonderful when you realize you can recognize the different types of poetry? Trying out the different poetic forms I find within the works of fellow FanStorians and from the website, shadowpoetry, I'm have a lot of fun,
~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Loop poetry isn't the easiest of styles, but you've
made a good job of this, Patty - the words, and both
rhythm and rhyme flowing well throughout.

Good luck with the contest, my friend.

Margaret

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Hi Margaret; thank you so much for the lovely review and the well wishes in the contest,
~patty~