My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "The Good News"a collection of my poetry
56 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a well composed "Loop Poem", Patty (the alliteration there just now was completely unintentional), with a decidedly religious theme.
It seems more suited for Easter to me. However, reviewers often tell me that the majority of my poems seem more suited to post during the Halloween season, so... there is that.
However, there is really no right or wrong time of year to proclaim--poetically or otherwise--the Lord's blessings in our lives.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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This is a well composed "Loop Poem", Patty (the alliteration there just now was completely unintentional), with a decidedly religious theme.
It seems more suited for Easter to me. However, reviewers often tell me that the majority of my poems seem more suited to post during the Halloween season, so... there is that.
However, there is really no right or wrong time of year to proclaim--poetically or otherwise--the Lord's blessings in our lives.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Dean; thank you so much for stopping by. Your review means a great deal to me. I hope the committee likes this one. I appreciate your kind words,
~patty~
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your loop poem "The Good News". As you said, you followed all the rules for this style of poem and you chose a most beautiful picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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I enjoyed reading your loop poem "The Good News". As you said, you followed all the rules for this style of poem and you chose a most beautiful picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and I appreciate your well wishes,
~patty~
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Patty:**** great witness and loops. I like the shoot and speak and praise Him!
We raise our hands - we need to teach people to do this. I get excited!
Well done with rhymes. Stars for you. ***** flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Patty:**** great witness and loops. I like the shoot and speak and praise Him!
We raise our hands - we need to teach people to do this. I get excited!
Well done with rhymes. Stars for you. ***** flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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thank you SO much for your kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and could related to its message. The shiny six stars are just a bonus,
~patty~
Comment from Janet Foor
Very nice loop poem. I have never tried on of these and it looks like a challenge but maybe a fun one.
I thought you expressed the Good News beautifully.
Well done.
blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Very nice loop poem. I have never tried on of these and it looks like a challenge but maybe a fun one.
I thought you expressed the Good News beautifully.
Well done.
blessings
Janet
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Janet, thank you so much for your review. I appreciate your kind words. You should try the Loop form - it was a wonderful challenge,
~patty~
Comment from Thal1959
Very nice, Patty. This form is more easily understood. I might try one someday. In fact, I wrote a poem that incorporates a kind of double word usage, but within each line, not from the end of one line to the start of the next line. As an example -
"But soaring is blighted, by a half-hearted soar,
as amore is slighted; leaves us wanting for more."
Soaring/soar in the first line, and then amore/more in the second.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Very nice, Patty. This form is more easily understood. I might try one someday. In fact, I wrote a poem that incorporates a kind of double word usage, but within each line, not from the end of one line to the start of the next line. As an example -
"But soaring is blighted, by a half-hearted soar,
as amore is slighted; leaves us wanting for more."
Soaring/soar in the first line, and then amore/more in the second.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for your kind review. I'm glad you like the poetic form. Your described poetic form sounds like it would be quite a challenge. Have a good day,
~patty~
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You're welcome, Patty.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well done loop poem, my friend. The repetition is not obvious which shows that you have done it well. Wonderful message, my friend and good customized guidelines as well~Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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A very well done loop poem, my friend. The repetition is not obvious which shows that you have done it well. Wonderful message, my friend and good customized guidelines as well~Debbie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Debbie; thank you so much for your lovely review. I appreciate your kind words about me using this poetic form. Have a good day,
~patty~
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Patty,
You followed the rules for the contest well. Nice poem about, Jesus, I like the picture. I went to catholic school when I was little. I loved to listen to Jesus's stories. Well written.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hello, Patty,
You followed the rules for the contest well. Nice poem about, Jesus, I like the picture. I went to catholic school when I was little. I loved to listen to Jesus's stories. Well written.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Gypsy; thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks so much for the additional info on the "loop poem." I like how you made it into stanzas so that you didn't have to loop all the way through. Good message starting with the need to spread the gospel, then how to do it and finally why to do it, because of His character.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much for the additional info on the "loop poem." I like how you made it into stanzas so that you didn't have to loop all the way through. Good message starting with the need to spread the gospel, then how to do it and finally why to do it, because of His character.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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thank you for your kind review of this piece. I appreciate your kind words and understanding of how I constructed the poem. Have a good day,
~patty~
Comment from patcelaw
Patty, this is a lovely loop poem. I like how you have a set meter of seven syllable on each line. Nicely done and good luck in the contest. Patricia
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Patty, this is a lovely loop poem. I like how you have a set meter of seven syllable on each line. Nicely done and good luck in the contest. Patricia
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Patricia; thank you so much for your kind words in reviewing this piece. I appreciate your well wishes in the contest,
~patty~
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon, Patty
One can feel the warmth, the love, the joy in your words. As a product of a Catholic School education, I can appreciate your feelings towards Jesus.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Good afternoon, Patty
One can feel the warmth, the love, the joy in your words. As a product of a Catholic School education, I can appreciate your feelings towards Jesus.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Ray; thank you so much for your warm review of my work. I'm glad the love and joy shone through,
~patty~
