My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "The Good News"a collection of my poetry
56 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a nicely constructed loop faith poem that rhymes well. Flow is easy. My one suggestion would be to go back in and edit the contrast of the font. The gray font is too similar to the background color which makes it hard to read. The poem itself is wonderful. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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This is a nicely constructed loop faith poem that rhymes well. Flow is easy. My one suggestion would be to go back in and edit the contrast of the font. The gray font is too similar to the background color which makes it hard to read. The poem itself is wonderful. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Marilyn; I went and adjusted the font so it should be easier to read. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~
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Oh, that is much better. Marilyn
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Comment from mbroyles2
An excellent devotional filled with praise and a deep message of forgiveness.
Great pace and clear imagery.
We must give praise lest the rocks cry out.
Wonderful
Michael
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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An excellent devotional filled with praise and a deep message of forgiveness.
Great pace and clear imagery.
We must give praise lest the rocks cry out.
Wonderful
Michael
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Michael; I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. It was an inspired write and one I'm very proud of. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from Neonewman
Absolute truth throughout this masterfully crafted piece you have given to your reviewing fans my friend. Jesus, the ultimate love story. What a sacrifice he made for us all.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Absolute truth throughout this masterfully crafted piece you have given to your reviewing fans my friend. Jesus, the ultimate love story. What a sacrifice he made for us all.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Steve; thank you so much for the warm and glowing review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~
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Certainly my pleasure Patty!
Comment from Pantygynt
Your loop is as described but I always feel that the form should go further and link not onle one stanza to the next but the last line back to the first the maintain an unbroken chain that loops right around, but that's just me and you have carried out the instructions to the letter and added your own creativity to boot.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Your loop is as described but I always feel that the form should go further and link not onle one stanza to the next but the last line back to the first the maintain an unbroken chain that loops right around, but that's just me and you have carried out the instructions to the letter and added your own creativity to boot.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Jim; thank you for dropping by. I can agree with you about maintaining the loop throughout the poem, and maybe the next one I will try that. Have a great day,
~patty~
Comment from padumachitta
hi...good luck in the loop poetry contest...you certainly followed the rules.
Your faith and committment come through in this poem, with simple words so much is said.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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hi...good luck in the loop poetry contest...you certainly followed the rules.
Your faith and committment come through in this poem, with simple words so much is said.
padumachitta
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and I appreciate your warm comments,
~patty~
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Patty, a lovely poem and a great entry to the contest. Each stanza reads well, makes sense and does not sound contrived to meet the requirements of this form of poetry. Rhyming in order throughout. I have never done a loop poem so I am no expert. One thing I wondered - does the loop not have to continue throughout the poem. That is, does the last word in a stanza not have to be the first word of the next stanza? I have not read the guidelines as you have done, so you must be right. Good luck in the contest with this lovely poem. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Patty, a lovely poem and a great entry to the contest. Each stanza reads well, makes sense and does not sound contrived to meet the requirements of this form of poetry. Rhyming in order throughout. I have never done a loop poem so I am no expert. One thing I wondered - does the loop not have to continue throughout the poem. That is, does the last word in a stanza not have to be the first word of the next stanza? I have not read the guidelines as you have done, so you must be right. Good luck in the contest with this lovely poem. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Dorothy; thank you for your thoughtful review. When I went to shadowpoetry.com and looked at their directions, it talked about four line stanzas, and it didn't appear that the loop had to continue throughout the poem - just within the stanza.
~patty~
Comment from dragonpoet
This form works well for this message. Today is another day to become closer to Jesus. He did so much for us. This seems like it would be a hard form to write in.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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This form works well for this message. Today is another day to become closer to Jesus. He did so much for us. This seems like it would be a hard form to write in.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for dropping by. I appreciate your warm words of encouragement, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, ~patty~
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No problem, Patty.
Joan
Comment from Cmelton
I love the message and the rhyming scheme. I like the choice of words and the picture is wonderful. I understand exactly what you are trying to say and completely agree with your message.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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I love the message and the rhyming scheme. I like the choice of words and the picture is wonderful. I understand exactly what you are trying to say and completely agree with your message.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for your kind and lovely review. I'm glad you were able to relate to the message of this poem,
~patty~
Comment from MelB
Hi Patty, what a beautiful picture and those eyes are mesmerizing! You did a great job with this loop poem. The lines flow well. Wonderful descriptions of His love.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Patty, what a beautiful picture and those eyes are mesmerizing! You did a great job with this loop poem. The lines flow well. Wonderful descriptions of His love.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Mel; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and understood the message coming through,
~patty~
Comment from wondertwin
Wonderful words and message to share... The great commission indeed! You worked the rhyming in perfectly. I'm impressed you added an extra challenging aspect to this competition. Way to go :)
The 2nd to last line stuck out a little to me in terms of sentence structure. I played around with it a bit. I see your challenge, given that it has to stay at 7 syllables... so maybe, if you like it, [Embrace His love, given free]. Of course I could've just been reading it off & it's perfect just the way it is :) It is a terrific poem & I really enjoyed your writing style!!! Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Wonderful words and message to share... The great commission indeed! You worked the rhyming in perfectly. I'm impressed you added an extra challenging aspect to this competition. Way to go :)
The 2nd to last line stuck out a little to me in terms of sentence structure. I played around with it a bit. I see your challenge, given that it has to stay at 7 syllables... so maybe, if you like it, [Embrace His love, given free]. Of course I could've just been reading it off & it's perfect just the way it is :) It is a terrific poem & I really enjoyed your writing style!!! Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi AmyJo; I am so glad you liked this poem. I went and looked at the second to last line. I may change it. I like your phrase. Your thoughtful review was thorough and concise, and I appreciate it.
~patty~
