The Tap Dancer
Free verse within a Pantoum structure35 total reviews
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
I'd be careful not to trip on the rails as you tap dance your way through this one. I had trouble when I tried to reconcile it as a Pantoum. When I let go of that I enjoyed it far more. I think I would forget Pantoum and think song structure in the wording. Think Fred Astaire tapping to Ella scatting - repetition but a great deal of freedom to move within the framework. No assigned notes, just as long as you compliment the melody line or the chord structure. - Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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I'd be careful not to trip on the rails as you tap dance your way through this one. I had trouble when I tried to reconcile it as a Pantoum. When I let go of that I enjoyed it far more. I think I would forget Pantoum and think song structure in the wording. Think Fred Astaire tapping to Ella scatting - repetition but a great deal of freedom to move within the framework. No assigned notes, just as long as you compliment the melody line or the chord structure. - Wendy
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Wendy - just playing about with the form as part of pantygynt's free verse course. I think there may be a better tap-dancing poem in there somewhere without the constraints of Pantoum repetition.
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Perhaps a Waltz with Fred for the Pantoum. Oh, wait, I already did that.
Comment from krys123
Hello Tony;
-what truly and totally enjoyable read where I was intensely immersed In the rhythmic joy of this poem. With cacophonous words like clickety clack and the reference and relevancy to the Tap Dance And with a picture that was suitable and very relevant to the conceptual theme.
-This Pantoum Structured free verse was written so very well And put me into a dreamlike state as I was either watching or participating in this dance,
- Hmmm! I was a lucky devil to be the one to read such a enjoyable piece of poetry.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one and thank you for a lovely author's notes.
Alex
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hello Tony;
-what truly and totally enjoyable read where I was intensely immersed In the rhythmic joy of this poem. With cacophonous words like clickety clack and the reference and relevancy to the Tap Dance And with a picture that was suitable and very relevant to the conceptual theme.
-This Pantoum Structured free verse was written so very well And put me into a dreamlike state as I was either watching or participating in this dance,
- Hmmm! I was a lucky devil to be the one to read such a enjoyable piece of poetry.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one and thank you for a lovely author's notes.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Thanks very much for your review, Alex, and for the six stars. I appreciate your kind words. You have a good one, too. Tony
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You're very welcome Tony and take care of yourself along with all those that you love and care for.
Alex
Comment from rspoet
I think I'll call this Free Fawcus!
which is a combination of freewheeling and faultless
Tap, tappety tap
A tunnel that leads to tap-dance heaven
Lucky devil
got to heaven with nary a map
I think you have the essence of the form
and the repeats done very well
and they read smoothly
Must be one of those new trains on air
where the clackety clacks are all in the mind
Your poem is like dancing with an angel
Lucky devil, indeed
RS
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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I think I'll call this Free Fawcus!
which is a combination of freewheeling and faultless
Tap, tappety tap
A tunnel that leads to tap-dance heaven
Lucky devil
got to heaven with nary a map
I think you have the essence of the form
and the repeats done very well
and they read smoothly
Must be one of those new trains on air
where the clackety clacks are all in the mind
Your poem is like dancing with an angel
Lucky devil, indeed
RS
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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A review to bring a smile to the face and six stars to widen it to a grin! Thanks! Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-The image choice is very good.
-Good author notes for Pantygynt's class, too, Tony.
-What a dancer Fred Astaire was.
-I like the creative nature of your poem;
I think your repetitions of phrases
like "Clack, clackety clack!" can
be a representation of Fred's dancin' feet
as well as the thoughts going "round and round."
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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-The image choice is very good.
-Good author notes for Pantygynt's class, too, Tony.
-What a dancer Fred Astaire was.
-I like the creative nature of your poem;
I think your repetitions of phrases
like "Clack, clackety clack!" can
be a representation of Fred's dancin' feet
as well as the thoughts going "round and round."
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Many thanks, Pam. Kind of you to award this one six stars and much appreciated! I'm a bit of a fan of Fred Astaire, too! Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony. Hard not to like Fred Astaire.
Comment from BeasPeas
I think your experiment is a success. I haven't written one in a while, and I'm no expert on that form, but I do admire your originality and this fun poem with photo of Fred Astaire. "Daddy Long Legs" -- great film. Marilyn
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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I think your experiment is a success. I haven't written one in a while, and I'm no expert on that form, but I do admire your originality and this fun poem with photo of Fred Astaire. "Daddy Long Legs" -- great film. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Marilyn. Glad you enjoyed it! Congratulations on your continued outpouring of April poems. Tony
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Thank you, Tony.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your little adventure with words and a shape poem. It worked for me. This poem was fun to read and I am sure it was fun to write. LOL
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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I enjoyed reading your little adventure with words and a shape poem. It worked for me. This poem was fun to read and I am sure it was fun to write. LOL
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Many thanks, Barbara. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, it was fun to have a go at adapting the form. Tony
Comment from Asem.inspirations
This poem is full of fun and humor. Thank you for the smiles and the photo is an excellent match for your great poem. It does feel like a song. I will try to write a happy poem about dancing. I will challenge myself. Nice...
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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This poem is full of fun and humor. Thank you for the smiles and the photo is an excellent match for your great poem. It does feel like a song. I will try to write a happy poem about dancing. I will challenge myself. Nice...
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Very many thanks, Tier. Glad you enjoyed the fun and humor! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes my friend I like the creativity of this poem it reads very well love the repeats and yes it made me smile well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Oh yes my friend I like the creativity of this poem it reads very well love the repeats and yes it made me smile well done regards Jill
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks very much, Jill. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Bucketlist
Swirling and twirling went my brain in this one. Pantoum- what the heck, heckity, heck is that..Free verse ? I've never paid for one! This is a brilliant marriage of an odd couple. Tap, tappity, tap with clack, clackity, clack. Train with dance-
Loved the lines "a train of chugging thought" and " blank, blankety,blank" when it changes over into dance , and the oxymoron of "Dear angel......You lucky devil" Great humor, Tony. I loved it
Trisha
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Swirling and twirling went my brain in this one. Pantoum- what the heck, heckity, heck is that..Free verse ? I've never paid for one! This is a brilliant marriage of an odd couple. Tap, tappity, tap with clack, clackity, clack. Train with dance-
Loved the lines "a train of chugging thought" and " blank, blankety,blank" when it changes over into dance , and the oxymoron of "Dear angel......You lucky devil" Great humor, Tony. I loved it
Trisha
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks very much, Trisha. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes, Tony
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Anytime
Comment from sunao
Your poem was excellent! I liked the usage and selection of the words that you used such as whir, chug, and clackety. I hope that you continue to write more poems like this. These kinds of poems make me want to really delve into learning the different kinds of poems that there are! I hope that you have a brilliant day. God bless you!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Your poem was excellent! I liked the usage and selection of the words that you used such as whir, chug, and clackety. I hope that you continue to write more poems like this. These kinds of poems make me want to really delve into learning the different kinds of poems that there are! I hope that you have a brilliant day. God bless you!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thanks very much, Sunao. Glad you enjoyed it! and gained a little inspiration to extend the reach of your own poetry. Best wishes, Tony
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Your welcome!
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Your welcome!
