Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Karyn,

A sweet and simple story about a child's love for his mom. I don't know how much more touching you can get than this. *smile* I know it's hard to get anything powerful into 50 words, but this is special. Good luck!

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017

Thanks for your review for my micro story, Robyn. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the mini story. and thamk you for your wonderfully kind encouragement.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Indy. Hi. I can only give you 5 stars for your story because I'm not a premium member. Five is the top allowed.

Consider it a virtual 6! Heck make it a 10.

Great story with a surprise, heartfelt ending!

Awesome... john

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017

Thanks so much, John! I'm so pleased you liked this micro mini story, and thanks for the ten! LOL I'll take it! It's always such a challenge to write these tiny stories, so I truly appreciate your support.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Good dribble entry. I wish you luck in the contest.

I found a typo: She hugged him tight, and he smiled, thinking he'd gotten the best gift. Do your own research, also, but I don't think there should be any commas.

Good luck in the contest--go get 'em!

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Rasmine, and I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your feedback. Thanks for your editing suggestions, too. Several people told me I needed a comma after smiled, so I added it.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes my friend this is well written and reads well sometimes it is the small gift that makes us smile making memories well done sorry for the late review regards Jill

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Jill, and I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed this micro mini story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Karyn, This is a very well written Dribble Flash Fiction you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words and the art work. Best wishes in the contest! love, Teri

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Teri, and I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed this micro mini story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from MissMerri

Exceptional

This is such a neat little story Karyn. I think the contrast between Jeremy's little gift to mom and the one he received from her is a great ending to this story. You handled this so well and I know how difficult it is to tell a story with only fifty words. I loved this! Good luck in the Dribble Flash Fiction contest.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017

Thanks, MM, for your awesome review, generous rating, and kind comments for my micro story. You're right...it's quite a challenge to tell a story with details enough to describe a scene and have it contain some emotion, using only 50 words. I appreciate your encouragement!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Karyn,
Wow! You did it... 50 words exactly, by my count. Two images presented, Jeremy wrapping his gift in newspaper, and his mother giving him a tremendous hug from her hospital bed.
But there's a lot of reading to be done between the lines. It's up to the reader as he/she enters the story.
First, how old is Jeremy? Is he a young child, or a grown man?
Why is he wrapping his gift in newspaper? Is he an inventive youngster, or is he a homeless vet?
What is wrong with his mother? Why is she in the hospital? All we know is that she has been ill for a few weeks. It must be serious if she's stuck in a hospital bed.
Yet, she was able to give him a big hug. So she had some strength. She's not too far gone. He remembered her on Mother's Day, when most mothers want to be remembered with some special greeting, an expression of love, sincere wishes.
He figured he received the best gift... a hug from his mother.
One receives love by giving love.
Good Luck in the contest, Karyn! This is a wonderful entry.
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

You're so right, Kimbob! The secret to these micro mini stories is giving enough info so the reader can get the basics, but be able to use their imagination to fill in the blanks. Thanks for recognizing that, and I always appreciate your time to read and share your thoughts for my writing. Thanks for your comments, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed the little story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Karyn,

I like this piece and I hope it does well in the competition. It is simple, yet profound at the same time. There is a great double meaning in the end line which adds to the piece.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks, G. Having just fifty words to capture a mood and tell a story is a huge challenge for someone so wordy like me. Thanks for taking the time to write a review. Impleased you liked this micro.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from apky

Excellent

How sweet.
And he was right to smile and think he got
the biggest gift. I bet mom thought she got
the biggest gift too.
Both got th gift of LOVE.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review for my micro story, apky. I appreciate your comments, and thanks for your encouraging response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi IndianaIrish,

I loved reading your what you wrote for the Dribble Flash Fiction contest entry.
I always look forward to seeing your work as you are great at writing them.
So keep writing and I'll keep reading them.

Kt

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review for my micro story, Kat. I appreciate your comments, and thanks for your encouraging response. You're always so kind with your reviews.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by MizKat on 20-Apr-2017

You're very welcome, Karyn. I love to read the things that you write. Kat