The Road to Utopia
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Breakfast at Utopia"Creating a Sane Society
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
They are in misery, but they are accustomed to the misery and anyone who is not as miserable as they are looks like a stranger. <-- A truth few understand.
Most people do not really want freedom, because freedom involves responsibility, and most people are frightened of responsibility. <-- SO true. It's what holds society back and disallows happiness.
Plenty of wisdom here. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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They are in misery, but they are accustomed to the misery and anyone who is not as miserable as they are looks like a stranger. <-- A truth few understand.
Most people do not really want freedom, because freedom involves responsibility, and most people are frightened of responsibility. <-- SO true. It's what holds society back and disallows happiness.
Plenty of wisdom here. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you much...John
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, an interesting concept you're raising here. A concept that's been discussed throughout mankind, but never really been adopted. Very well written. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi there, an interesting concept you're raising here. A concept that's been discussed throughout mankind, but never really been adopted. Very well written. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the review and kind words...John
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Cogitator:
There is a lot of merit in what you say about the Utopian society, however, if all are answering to the one entity, 'Mom,' they aren't truly free to do as they wish. I do realize that freedom always carries responsibility, but in this instance it sounds like Joy and Adam are merely trading one yoke for another.
What did I miss?
Kim
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi Cogitator:
There is a lot of merit in what you say about the Utopian society, however, if all are answering to the one entity, 'Mom,' they aren't truly free to do as they wish. I do realize that freedom always carries responsibility, but in this instance it sounds like Joy and Adam are merely trading one yoke for another.
What did I miss?
Kim
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Mom is a helpmate (like Siri), not a dictator. She will be fleshed out (pun intended) in future chapters. Thanks...John
Comment from Mustang Patty
It would really be lovely if this Utopian society existed. There is much to be said about a world without clocks or calendars. You have done a wonderful job in continuing to define this world. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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It would really be lovely if this Utopian society existed. There is much to be said about a world without clocks or calendars. You have done a wonderful job in continuing to define this world. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the encouragement...John
Comment from c_lucas
Man cannot live without small conflicts. Perfection is not part of his life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Man cannot live without small conflicts. Perfection is not part of his life. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks, Charlie...John
Comment from apky
I loved this, and wished humans could learn from it:
>>There are some basic rules all Utopians are expected to follow. To live in an egalitarian society, we have to realize that no one person is better than, nor worse than, any other member. We are all born with talents and abilities that will differ, but that with proper communication, cooperation and collaboration, we can achieve any goal as a group. <<
Overall an incredible story that we all should read.
Keep it up Cogitator.
Best,
Apky
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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I loved this, and wished humans could learn from it:
>>There are some basic rules all Utopians are expected to follow. To live in an egalitarian society, we have to realize that no one person is better than, nor worse than, any other member. We are all born with talents and abilities that will differ, but that with proper communication, cooperation and collaboration, we can achieve any goal as a group. <<
Overall an incredible story that we all should read.
Keep it up Cogitator.
Best,
Apky
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for the kind words and review...John
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well-written piece dealing with an interesting concept. idealism in its true form, one that man seems highly resistant to undertake.
"Adam! Good morning - do you really need the exclamation mark here? What will you use if something particularly noteworthy occurs? The sentence would lose nothing by omitting it. You do this for some innocuous phrasing in other areas of dialogue too. These should be used very sparingly.
we can achieve any goal as a group.
The community provides food - if starting a new paragraph in dialogue, there should be opening speech marks although the closing ones are reserved only for the final piece of dialogue.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Hi there,
Well-written piece dealing with an interesting concept. idealism in its true form, one that man seems highly resistant to undertake.
"Adam! Good morning - do you really need the exclamation mark here? What will you use if something particularly noteworthy occurs? The sentence would lose nothing by omitting it. You do this for some innocuous phrasing in other areas of dialogue too. These should be used very sparingly.
we can achieve any goal as a group.
The community provides food - if starting a new paragraph in dialogue, there should be opening speech marks although the closing ones are reserved only for the final piece of dialogue.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Your review prompted me to read The Slasher and I am very pleased that I did. My future chapters will improve in style and delivery because of you. Thanks...John
Comment from MsPetra
This is an excellent and informative read. I think it is very well written. The characters are believable, and the story is believable. I read through to the end because I wanted to see where you were going with it. I was not disappointed.
There isn't anything I would do differently.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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This is an excellent and informative read. I think it is very well written. The characters are believable, and the story is believable. I read through to the end because I wanted to see where you were going with it. I was not disappointed.
There isn't anything I would do differently.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thanks you very much...John
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Breakfast at Utopia' is a GOOD READ!
Well-written chapter.
Nicely polished.
Good dialogue.
Free of grammatical errors! (As far as I can see)
Great artwork: The image fits the story perfectly.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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'Breakfast at Utopia' is a GOOD READ!
Well-written chapter.
Nicely polished.
Good dialogue.
Free of grammatical errors! (As far as I can see)
Great artwork: The image fits the story perfectly.
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind words and review...John
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written article. I have gotten rid of my TV and most of my clocks. Holidays really don't mean much to me anymore. It is living and enjoying the here and know that really matters. Great write, my friend~Debbie
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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A very well written article. I have gotten rid of my TV and most of my clocks. Holidays really don't mean much to me anymore. It is living and enjoying the here and know that really matters. Great write, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Many thanks for the kind words. I am sifting much of my previous works to present ideas that make better sense in a fictional setting...John
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I do think more people will relate to having it written this way, however I enjoyed the other wa just as much, my friend~Debbie
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This method makes me think about being in an actual conversation - makes me more careful about choice of words...Thanks
