The Road to Utopia
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
"Whether he is wealthy or poor, the Utopian is captain of his ship and master of his fate because he has broken the chains of society's repressive conditioning and opinions. He has formed himself by embracing all the colors of the rainbow, emerging from the dark and formless roots of his unconscious past and growing wings to fly into the sky. His very way of being is rebellious - not because he is fighting against anybody or anything, but because he has discovered his own true nature and is determined to live in accordance with it. The eagle is his spirit animal, a messenger between earth and sky.
"The Utopian challenges all people to be courageous enough to take responsibility for who and what we are and to live according to truth and truth alone."
Fascinating writing. You remind me of the great modern writers such as Orwell, pure brilliance and virtual six. Love Meia x
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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"Whether he is wealthy or poor, the Utopian is captain of his ship and master of his fate because he has broken the chains of society's repressive conditioning and opinions. He has formed himself by embracing all the colors of the rainbow, emerging from the dark and formless roots of his unconscious past and growing wings to fly into the sky. His very way of being is rebellious - not because he is fighting against anybody or anything, but because he has discovered his own true nature and is determined to live in accordance with it. The eagle is his spirit animal, a messenger between earth and sky.
"The Utopian challenges all people to be courageous enough to take responsibility for who and what we are and to live according to truth and truth alone."
Fascinating writing. You remind me of the great modern writers such as Orwell, pure brilliance and virtual six. Love Meia x
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the very kind words and review...John
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
John, it's a pleasure to read work so well presented,
making it so much easier to follow.
Your vivid imagination shines through your work - a rather
unique story with some interesting characters, stirring the
imagination.
Margaret
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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John, it's a pleasure to read work so well presented,
making it so much easier to follow.
Your vivid imagination shines through your work - a rather
unique story with some interesting characters, stirring the
imagination.
Margaret
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Many thanks...John
Comment from mmonaghan777
Well written with a creative flow. The description of Utopia is believable to the point of anticipating the next chapter. What is perfect in one person's mind can be perceived very differently in another's.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Well written with a creative flow. The description of Utopia is believable to the point of anticipating the next chapter. What is perfect in one person's mind can be perceived very differently in another's.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you much...John
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
...waked by the crowing of a rooster. Got a chuckle from me. The rest was interesting enough, and well written. What is going through the author's mind is always something the reader is curious about and I am no exception. Thanks for posting.
GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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...waked by the crowing of a rooster. Got a chuckle from me. The rest was interesting enough, and well written. What is going through the author's mind is always something the reader is curious about and I am no exception. Thanks for posting.
GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your review...John
Comment from Neonewman
If only there was such a world as the one you have so masterfully crafted my friend. I enjoyed the smooth flow of this read and the fantasy that it brought forth.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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If only there was such a world as the one you have so masterfully crafted my friend. I enjoyed the smooth flow of this read and the fantasy that it brought forth.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Many thanks for the kind words and review...John
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My pleasure John!
Comment from Sanku
How i wish this society existed .Like Thoreau"s Walden Pond this idealistic society may spring some surprises after all. that is being cynical i know. i agree with many things Walter said - about collective consciousness, supernatural things ,globalisation....About time and lack of calendars, that was a bit surprising.
all the best for the rest
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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How i wish this society existed .Like Thoreau"s Walden Pond this idealistic society may spring some surprises after all. that is being cynical i know. i agree with many things Walter said - about collective consciousness, supernatural things ,globalisation....About time and lack of calendars, that was a bit surprising.
all the best for the rest
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind words and review...John
Comment from Rasmine
This is a cool little world you have created. It does sound cultish, wonder what will happen next. I'll see you here at least once a week, I guess. I have to promote mine this weekend.
Have a good day.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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This is a cool little world you have created. It does sound cultish, wonder what will happen next. I'll see you here at least once a week, I guess. I have to promote mine this weekend.
Have a good day.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Previous chapters have relevance...John
Comment from SeanFox16
Great read. Very nicely written. I wonder if there really is such a thing as Utopia? Although if there is, I'm pretty sure my neighbour is a Utopian because he is always freakin' happy. :-) I found your storyline fascinating, and I really look forward to where it goes from here. The possibilities are endless.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Great read. Very nicely written. I wonder if there really is such a thing as Utopia? Although if there is, I'm pretty sure my neighbour is a Utopian because he is always freakin' happy. :-) I found your storyline fascinating, and I really look forward to where it goes from here. The possibilities are endless.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Thanks for the encouraging words...John
Comment from dweigt
Interesting, and well written. You set the stage well, and the reader can easily imagine themselves in the scene.
Running Bear: "Walter has been here for nearly four years now. -- This is more of a script format, and the usual "Running Bear says" would probably be better.
From a story standpoint, I wish more happened in this section. Basically they woke up, had breakfast, and Walter gives a long lecture. I would prefer reading about Joy and Adam experiencing this Utopia, and their adventures illustrating the points Walter is trying to share. Personally, I want to see what happens when "Mom" instructs them to do some task and they ignore the directive. You also have a lot of potential conflicts with the outer world that could be explored for dramatic effect.
I'm interested in where you take this.
Keep writing!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Interesting, and well written. You set the stage well, and the reader can easily imagine themselves in the scene.
Running Bear: "Walter has been here for nearly four years now. -- This is more of a script format, and the usual "Running Bear says" would probably be better.
From a story standpoint, I wish more happened in this section. Basically they woke up, had breakfast, and Walter gives a long lecture. I would prefer reading about Joy and Adam experiencing this Utopia, and their adventures illustrating the points Walter is trying to share. Personally, I want to see what happens when "Mom" instructs them to do some task and they ignore the directive. You also have a lot of potential conflicts with the outer world that could be explored for dramatic effect.
I'm interested in where you take this.
Keep writing!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Thanks. Much more to come...John
Comment from DLBoo
Nicely done. Good flow to your chapter. Something tells me everything may not be as wonderful as it seems to be in your Utopia. I guess I will just have to wait and see; my mind started to branch this off in several directions. I can't wait to see where you take it.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Nicely done. Good flow to your chapter. Something tells me everything may not be as wonderful as it seems to be in your Utopia. I guess I will just have to wait and see; my mind started to branch this off in several directions. I can't wait to see where you take it.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Thank you. Will develop further...John
