haiku (sultry sun)
sunset haiku contest7 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Nice haiku with a clear mental image of a sunset. I like the word, sultry. Your form is good less than 17, 3 lines, as brief as possible, and an insightful satori.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
Hello, my friend,
Nice haiku with a clear mental image of a sunset. I like the word, sultry. Your form is good less than 17, 3 lines, as brief as possible, and an insightful satori.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017
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Thank you for you very well thought out review, at least you understand haiku unlike so many.
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, yes, yes! Sky explodes! I have spent the last two weeks in Puerto Vallarta, Mexico and the sky does explode in colors after the sun sets. Your poem is everything I have seen:
sultry sun
melts into dark blue waves
sky explodes
Thank you for sharing and celebrating. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
Yes, yes, yes! Sky explodes! I have spent the last two weeks in Puerto Vallarta, Mexico and the sky does explode in colors after the sun sets. Your poem is everything I have seen:
sultry sun
melts into dark blue waves
sky explodes
Thank you for sharing and celebrating. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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I'm so glad you "got" my haiku! Thank you so much for the lovely review. I live on the West Coast by the water, and the sky does truly "explode" on those evenings.
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Yes, I live near Oakland, too!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent example of Haiku. You have chosen a beautiful picture which perfectly illustrates your writing. This is a terrific contest entry.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
This is an excellent example of Haiku. You have chosen a beautiful picture which perfectly illustrates your writing. This is a terrific contest entry.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for this lovely review and good wishes.
Comment from l.raven
this is so beautiful....I lived in Florida twenty one years...and the sun rise and sunset are what I miss...very nicely written...and I love your picture...xxoo love Linda
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
this is so beautiful....I lived in Florida twenty one years...and the sun rise and sunset are what I miss...very nicely written...and I love your picture...xxoo love Linda
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much Linda for this lovely review.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
'Sultry Sun' is a great Sunset Haiku.
It consists of three lines.
Each line has a syllable count: 3-6-3
Total syllable count: 12
Beautiful artwork: The image is a perfect fit for this poem.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Sunset Haiku.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
'Sultry Sun' is a great Sunset Haiku.
It consists of three lines.
Each line has a syllable count: 3-6-3
Total syllable count: 12
Beautiful artwork: The image is a perfect fit for this poem.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Sunset Haiku.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Wabigoon
Well, I have to say I like this. Your last line. I don't think "surrender," of course, is really involved, but that's dependent upon point of view, eh?
Nice job, anyway.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
Well, I have to say I like this. Your last line. I don't think "surrender," of course, is really involved, but that's dependent upon point of view, eh?
Nice job, anyway.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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You totally get my point of view. All life is about procreation, in fact the day and night do exactly that. Thank you for this "exceptional" - it means the world to me. But I did have to change the last line - "no personification" is a rule. But I believe this has the same impact.
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
Great imagery and nature element in this poem. I could feel and see it. Great word choice. Beautiful words filled with colour and peace.
sultry sun
sweet surrender -- fantastic alliteration.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
Hi,
Great imagery and nature element in this poem. I could feel and see it. Great word choice. Beautiful words filled with colour and peace.
sultry sun
sweet surrender -- fantastic alliteration.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the lovely review.