Comment from Grasshopper2

Excellent

IndianaIrish,
Well penned, fun haiku that deserves the win instead of the third place in the contest. I like your satori and the pink background. This was a fun read.

Michael

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017

Thank you so much, Michael, for this great review for my watermelon haiku. I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem, and I truly appreciate your mentioning the satori. Thanks, too, for thinking it was fun!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

These words give a strong image of a game at a school picnic.

I like the color choices. The background watermelon pink and the black words the seeds.

Congrats on placing in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2017

Thank you so much, dragonpoet, for your kind review for my watermelon haiku, and I truly appreciate your congratulations for the contest. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by dragonpoet on 24-Apr-2017

You are so very welcome, Karyn.

Joan

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

I agree, but there are haiku Nazi's out there who don't lol. With that being said, what a wonderfully crafted haiku you have delivered my friend. Love the idea behind it.
God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017

Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Steve. I appreciate your encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017

Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Steve. I appreciate your encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017

Thanks for your great review for my micro story, Steve. I appreciate your encouraging response, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by Neonewman on 23-Apr-2017

certainly my pleasure

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

I like the image this presents, Karyn. I took part in seed-spitting contests as a boy. So much fun! I like the added excitement of a teacher who joins in the fun. Your haiku doesn't need artwork, and good haiku poems don't. You tell the tale in three short lines of 5-8-4 syllables, 17 in all, where the first two lines are connected in theme, and the final line reflects the first two. I can hear the laughter, sheer glee on a summer afternoon. Who needs seedless watermelon?
This is a terrific entry for the contest... Good Luck!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017

Thanks so much for your great review for my watermelon haiku, Kimbob. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and your kind words are appreciated...as always. I feel bad kids these days have mostly seedless watermelons. They were a great chance to spit without getting into trouble.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Is this what teachers are doing these days? Ah well I suppose they call it fun, but I never let them go in my mouth in the first place! An unusual write and I wish you good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Dolly. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts and good luck wish for the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This tells about kids watermelon seed-spitting fun match at school, it has game spirit, so interesting that school teachers join in; I liked, enjoyed.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, ALD. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

Interesting Haiku! I love watermelon but the seeds are like little teeth I don't like them at all and always end up swallow a good deal of them. great work as ever enjoyed very much kind regards Meia x

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Meia. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Indianairish: wow! What a fun time with the students and the teacher.
Spit those seeds and chill outside. Tastes so good on a hot day. Creating
memories is terrific! Kids here have another month. flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, flylikeaneagle. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem. I love your, "Wow!"
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from artemis53

Excellent

Yep. That would be it and it sounds just about right. I wonder why after all of those years I never aspirated a single one. I read it forwards and backwards and you delivered the same message. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Artemis. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Laurie Clayton

Excellent

Firstly, thank you for your author notes, they help to clarify and educate.

Secondly, I loved how you managed to get so much imagery and sense of fun crammed into such a short snapshot of work.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and comments for my watermelon haiku, Laurie. I appreciate your taking the time to share your thoughts, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the imagery in the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)