Hit Me
a different kind of assassin19 total reviews
Comment from jusylee72
Very interesting method of murder , poisoning while gambling away money. Clever and well written with a great illustration. There are so many good ones in this contest. I wish you well
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Very interesting method of murder , poisoning while gambling away money. Clever and well written with a great illustration. There are so many good ones in this contest. I wish you well
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind praise of the story and your best wishes.
Comment from DLBoo
Nicely done, nicely done. Kudos for knowing about the cameras watching not only the patterns of the casinos, but also each and every employee. This is an excellent beginning for a thriller. Well done. Good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Nicely done, nicely done. Kudos for knowing about the cameras watching not only the patterns of the casinos, but also each and every employee. This is an excellent beginning for a thriller. Well done. Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for the most encouraging review and the six bright stars. I am especially pleased you think this story could be expanded into a novel.
Comment from fafa
Your history flows well and generates good adequacy to the context of the contest, it is of hoping that you should be fine in this type of situation, it makes me happy that you have shared it, a big one embraced and congratulations.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Your history flows well and generates good adequacy to the context of the contest, it is of hoping that you should be fine in this type of situation, it makes me happy that you have shared it, a big one embraced and congratulations.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, fafa, for sharing my story and your comments.
Comment from frogbook
This is definitely one of the best stories. Very original and well written. Great surprise method of death. I.aginitive and unique. Best of luck in the vote.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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This is definitely one of the best stories. Very original and well written. Great surprise method of death. I.aginitive and unique. Best of luck in the vote.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my story and thought it was original and well-written.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This was definitely an unusual and deft way to assassinate something. It would be rather hard to figure out, if I were the police after the body had been found. Good job. Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This was definitely an unusual and deft way to assassinate something. It would be rather hard to figure out, if I were the police after the body had been found. Good job. Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed the story and appreciate your kind praise.
Comment from giraffmang
Mine is unique--the fascinating ways I can use my hands. - in what way is this fascinating? Using cards isn't unique, Gambit does it in X-men. Also, she's really poisoning him, not killing using her hands, really. I felt a little let down by the actual method following this statement. lol
him a tight smile as i swept his short - as I swept.
The smearing of blood not being noticed seemed a little unlikely, considering how much even a paper cut stings and bleeds... Also, there are ways of poisoning the paper / card that don't require a cut. Can be done topically.
I love the ending though.
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Mine is unique--the fascinating ways I can use my hands. - in what way is this fascinating? Using cards isn't unique, Gambit does it in X-men. Also, she's really poisoning him, not killing using her hands, really. I felt a little let down by the actual method following this statement. lol
him a tight smile as i swept his short - as I swept.
The smearing of blood not being noticed seemed a little unlikely, considering how much even a paper cut stings and bleeds... Also, there are ways of poisoning the paper / card that don't require a cut. Can be done topically.
I love the ending though.
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Obviously I need to watch more of the popular super hero movies. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the plot.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Superb story, well written, and enjoyable. I like the method of killing. Never would have thought of that. And the victim goes away happy, no less. :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Superb story, well written, and enjoyable. I like the method of killing. Never would have thought of that. And the victim goes away happy, no less. :)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Phyllis, for your very kind praise of my story.
Comment from kahpot
Very ingenious plot a really well thought out story and the words keeping threader going non-stop very well done indeed thanks for sharing and have a happy easter****kahpot
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Very ingenious plot a really well thought out story and the words keeping threader going non-stop very well done indeed thanks for sharing and have a happy easter****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed this short story and thought the plot was "ingenious."
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This was pure genius!
Assassinating at the black jack table. Well done!
'Hit Me'- When I first read the title, I automatically assumed someone was going to be getting hit. Either by fist or vehicle, the two words just stood out and caught my attention.
Great artwork: The image of the dealer dealing cards to the players is a perfect match for this material.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Thanks for sharing it.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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This was pure genius!
Assassinating at the black jack table. Well done!
'Hit Me'- When I first read the title, I automatically assumed someone was going to be getting hit. Either by fist or vehicle, the two words just stood out and caught my attention.
Great artwork: The image of the dealer dealing cards to the players is a perfect match for this material.
Best of luck to you in the contest!
Thanks for sharing it.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much, Nicole, for your high praise of my story.
