Simon and Bella
A Diamante about two babies.56 total reviews
Comment from XGoneX
Hi Rhonda,
I'm sorry for your loss. I lost babies, too, but not at this stage. This is a very difficult poetry format to write. Your chose the right words to make the poem beautiful and heartfelt. I liked the contrast between the two babies, one meant to live, the other to become a angel.
Tiny, Exquisite
Bella -- perfect ending
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Hi Rhonda,
I'm sorry for your loss. I lost babies, too, but not at this stage. This is a very difficult poetry format to write. Your chose the right words to make the poem beautiful and heartfelt. I liked the contrast between the two babies, one meant to live, the other to become a angel.
Tiny, Exquisite
Bella -- perfect ending
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for the wonderful and compassionate review. It's funny, but I tried several times to write both of them an appropriate poem, but it seemed to work better when I chose a poetic form that allowed just a few words at a time. It also allowed me to unite the kids, at least in my heart.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a wonderful poem. I am so sorry of your loss, it's absolutely heartbreaking, I can't even imagine the pain. My heart reaches out to you dear friend. ~Kerry~
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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This is a wonderful poem. I am so sorry of your loss, it's absolutely heartbreaking, I can't even imagine the pain. My heart reaches out to you dear friend. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Kerry, though the one who lived has really helped dampen the loss of the other.
Thanks for the review and comments,
Rhonda
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Your welcome and again I'm so so for your loss Rhonda
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm so sorry, Rhonda. how sad. It's understandable to not be able to write about it. I had the same difficulty after my dad died. It takes a while to get through the grieving process. We each wade through at our own pace. I'm sure this poem helped you share the news with your friends and fellow writers. We're here for you.
Sincerely,
Joy xx
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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I'm so sorry, Rhonda. how sad. It's understandable to not be able to write about it. I had the same difficulty after my dad died. It takes a while to get through the grieving process. We each wade through at our own pace. I'm sure this poem helped you share the news with your friends and fellow writers. We're here for you.
Sincerely,
Joy xx
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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You're right, Joy! It was a way to share the births. I wanted to write a sweet poem about Simon and how much he is loved, but just couldn't do it without writing one for Bella. Just because she didn't live long, was no reason to deny her a poem, herself. I just didn't have the heart to write it. I decided to go for putting the two together, then I was able to do it.
Thanks so much,
Rhonda
Comment from fafa
Wonderfull poem. In this poem you open your feelings of impeccable form, show the connection that it joins and you demonstrate a rewarded art, greetings and blessings
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Wonderfull poem. In this poem you open your feelings of impeccable form, show the connection that it joins and you demonstrate a rewarded art, greetings and blessings
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thank you!
Comment from tfawcus
As you say, this is the perfect poetic form with which to unite the memories of these two babies. Such grief and such joy can scarcely be comprehended. Your poem balances the two most beautifully to make a fitting tribute to both of the grandchildren.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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As you say, this is the perfect poetic form with which to unite the memories of these two babies. Such grief and such joy can scarcely be comprehended. Your poem balances the two most beautifully to make a fitting tribute to both of the grandchildren.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much. You caught my purpose perfectly. I was trying to give both babies their rightful place, separate but together.
I appreciate your insight and comments,
Rhonda
Comment from Mustang Patty
This must have been very difficult to write. My heart goes out to you. I'm glad you were able to express your feelings through your writing. The poetic form does work well to contrast the two lives. Bella will be with you always - and protect you from Heaven,
~patty~
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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This must have been very difficult to write. My heart goes out to you. I'm glad you were able to express your feelings through your writing. The poetic form does work well to contrast the two lives. Bella will be with you always - and protect you from Heaven,
~patty~
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Awww, how sweet, Patty!
I kept trying to think of a way to showcase each child, but every time I tried, I would give up. I couldn't write about the death of Bella for the pain it caused, and didn't feel right about writing one for Simon and not acknowledging the birth and life of Bella. In the end, as you can see, the diamante came to mind. I was able to write one poem for both.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
What a sad Diamante, Rhonda. Well written with correct syllable count but the words must have been difficult to write. So sad that one baby had to die, but you chose the best poetry form. As you say it ties the two babies together. I can imagine how this event must have made you feel. My sympathy to you and your family. Wrm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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What a sad Diamante, Rhonda. Well written with correct syllable count but the words must have been difficult to write. So sad that one baby had to die, but you chose the best poetry form. As you say it ties the two babies together. I can imagine how this event must have made you feel. My sympathy to you and your family. Wrm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful and heartfelt review, Dorothy. Yes, it was difficult, but taking a specific poetic form and plugging in words took some of the sting out of it.
It was hard, and something no grandmother should ever have to do. I accompanied my son and daughter-in-law to the funeral home to identify the body. They gave us some time alone with her. I wasn't able to get to the hospital the night before in time to see her. She only lived 25 minutes, but she was still my granddaughter, and I still told her I loved her.
On the flip side of the coin, I was able to fly to Maryland for a week to see Simon. And then I cried again when I left there. I just can't get past those tears. I do have a 5 year old grandson (big brother of Bella) I took for the weekend, just this past week. Got all the warm fuzzy feelings I needed.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Hi Rhonda, these things do take time and crying is a normal thing to do. That's what tears are for. Warm regards Dorothy xx
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Aww, that is so sweet. It is what they are for, isn't it? Oh, and to manipulate daddy's, haha.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Always tough to lose a child for whatever reason it may be.
You handled this poem well in a tribute to both.
Sure their parents will appreciate your efforts.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Always tough to lose a child for whatever reason it may be.
You handled this poem well in a tribute to both.
Sure their parents will appreciate your efforts.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Brett, for you sweet review, and for noticing the value for both children.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Nan Beeson
Dear Rhonda..
I read your poem about your two precious grand babies Simon and Bella when you first posted it -- but after reading your author's notes, I was in no condition to reply.
The upside about these two adorable babies is that they are both where God wanted them...
One thriving and living here on earth..... and the other in Heaven with Father God.
The upside is that when one dies, it is written in Ecclesiastes 12:6-7, that to be absent from the body is to be present with the Lord.
What a comforting thought.... and dear precious Rhonda, please know you and both babies are in my Prayers and MY HEART GOES GOES OUT TO YOU.. Please forgive any misspelled words, but am unable to say any more....
I love you, Rhonda.... Nan:))
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Dear Rhonda..
I read your poem about your two precious grand babies Simon and Bella when you first posted it -- but after reading your author's notes, I was in no condition to reply.
The upside about these two adorable babies is that they are both where God wanted them...
One thriving and living here on earth..... and the other in Heaven with Father God.
The upside is that when one dies, it is written in Ecclesiastes 12:6-7, that to be absent from the body is to be present with the Lord.
What a comforting thought.... and dear precious Rhonda, please know you and both babies are in my Prayers and MY HEART GOES GOES OUT TO YOU.. Please forgive any misspelled words, but am unable to say any more....
I love you, Rhonda.... Nan:))
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Awwww, Nan, you are so sweet. I was hoping you would read it since it was a poem, but am sorry it made you so sad.
I knew I needed to write them a poem, and wanted to do a separate on for each, but somehow, I kept coming back to the diamante poem that unites them.
I am comforted by your words about them both being where God wants them. I hadn't thought of it that way at first. And you're right about Bella being immediately with our Heavenly Father. Such comfort. Thank you.
Thank you, as well for the wonderful six stars to grace the babies.
Love you much,
Rhonda
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Good morning, my precious sweet, kind loving Rhonda....
I am so pleased my review about your two grand babies gave you a bit of comfort..
It was all Biblical, and I think you definitely made the right choice by writing your poem in the diamante form.
I say this because of the law of opposites on the earth plane... especially the fact of being male and female.... and that the higher power of God Almighty supersedes them and is able to have His children return to Him when the silver cord is broken.
I love you much Rhonda, and hope that it comforts you that you will continue to be in my thoughts and Prayers.... Nan:)).
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It does give me comfort, and I thank you for it.
One more bit of symbolism is the order I put them in. The living child is on the top of the diamond, and the one who passed away is on the bottom, as though beneath the earth.
Love you
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How clever Rhonda! It is so true, and I so love the the way you separated Light from Heaven for the Immortal body, and dark for the mortal perishable body.
The glory of being in Heaven and expectancy to go there at our alotted time is a treasred thought and reality.
. I do not recall reading that in your author's notes, but my tears might have been in the way...
I pray that yours are beng wiped away and turning into tears of joy -- knowing you will all be together on that glorious day we are all looking forward to
I love you..... Nan:))
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You are so sweet, and I'm lucky to have your friendship and love, my friend!
I didn't put all that in the author's notes. I figured the ones who were looking deep would figure it out, and for the others, they could just read the poem for the surface. You and I always look deeper, don't we??
Love you,
Rhonda
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You always give me more credit than I desesrve, dear Soul.... It is so wonderful to be of like mind and be able to share.... I love and cherish your friendship.
Oodles of love and a great big hyg....Nan:))
Comment from MelB
I'm so sorry for your loss, Rhonda. You did a good job of describing the tragedy in this poem. My thoughts and prayers go out to you and your family.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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I'm so sorry for your loss, Rhonda. You did a good job of describing the tragedy in this poem. My thoughts and prayers go out to you and your family.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much, Melissa. It was a tragedy for one family, and the greatest joy for the other. I had hoped for another grandchild down the road a bit, but God had his reasons for giving them both to me in one week. They will both be special to me.
Thank you for your kind review.
Rhonda
