Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Queen of Haiku, I would love to have some of those red vines...LOL...and where did you find the picture of me???...LOL...love your poem you...and love this picture...very nicely written...love ya Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you very much for reading, Linda. Love you :) May your day be filled with laughter and joy.

namaste,


Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<

reply by l.raven on 09-Apr-2017

you are so welcome sweet angel...smiling back at you...and have a wonderful evening...love ya xxoo

Comment from sandy montgomery

Excellent

I love your presentation. The art is perfect for your verse. I like the way you used color here and your clever word play. This piece is memorable and could be used with other photos or art interchanably yet the art you chose is perfect. Thank you for sharing your work.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017

Thank you very much for reading, my friend :) May your day be filled with laughter and joy.

namaste,


Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for defining the renso form and clarifying the use of metaphors and similes in contemporary haiku. I liked your jealous "lover" simile and perfectly parallel artwork. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

You are welcome and thank you for reading, my friend :)

namaste,


Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

You have a great third line, Gypsy, stunning picture and a great haiku overall.I haven't had much to do with modern haiku, but I found a surprisingly humanistic influence in this one. But it quite grabbed me. Brevity is still present, and I found your notes helpful, Giddy

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2017

thank you for reading, my friend :)

namaste,


Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Ay ay ay, Gitana, eso si que me ha gustado. This is a veryyy good haiku with a vivid imagery. I loved it. The satori line is faboulous. It's a great addition to the book. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Gracias Guapa :) besitos,

Gypsy

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this lovely haiku. The presentation was well done, and the words of your poem met the requirements of the renso technique. The two ideas are very clear - red vines and green envy.
~patty~

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thank you, my friend,

Namaste,

Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Haiku Teacher
Haiku Society of America Member
a new haiku class every month
April- Haiku 201
Mary- Haiga Art

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Your use of the colors red and green really work well. Red shows the passion, and green, the envy. The artwork fits the poem really well. The vines wrapping around suggest a choking, a feeling of captivity. Interesting work with the subject. It really creates a mood of speculation about whether it's the plants envying the subject's beauty. judi

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thank you, my friend, good haiku analysis :)

Namaste,

Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Haiku Teacher
Haiku Society of America Member
a new haiku class every month
April- Haiku 201
Mary- Haiga Art

reply by judiverse on 06-Apr-2017

You're welcome. Glad I got it! judi

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Your poem is really nice and also great to read. The picture that you put with it is perfect too. You are great at writing this kind of poetry
and I love reading them. Kat

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Your review is really nice and also great to read. You are great at writing this kind of copy and paste reviews.

reply by MizKat on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks a lot. Kat

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Oh, wee! Now this haiku definitely tickles the senses and makes an old man remember when. When a young man could imagine being a gentle vine, and ever so slowly, inch by inch, cuddled and caressed the lovely damsel with no reason for distress. Thanks for sharing another fine haiku. :-)

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thank you very much, my dear friend, I love your review and I am so happy that my haiku reminded you of that happy time.

namaste,


Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Gypsy,
Beautiful poem! The photo is perfect! Maybe some music to set the tone. I don't know how jealousy sounds, though.
I hope you will be teaching a course in November--I get Rental Rebate in October and can take classes at that time. I can't wait--fun!! :P

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thank you very much, my dear friend,

namaste,


Gypsy Haijin Sensei
Fanstory Instructor and poet
Member of the Haiku Society of America
~*~ a new haiku class every month ~*~
<>o<> Haiku 201 starts on April 5th<>o<>
~<>o<> Haiga starts on May 1st <>o<>~