Comment from Badger_29

Excellent

This is a sad and melancholy read, but ends on a positive note. "Like a Bird From it's cage has flown, I'll fly away" Reminds me of one of my very favorite gospel songs. Well written, good intro, middle, and ending. The picture is captivating.
Blessings,
Brother Badger

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks Badger for a wonderful review I appreciate it. Mary

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

You have written an excellent poem. The sentiment that it expresses is tremendous. Too often all the hard years that someone puts into life and giving to others is neglected. Thank you for reminding us.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks Thomas for the excellent review and for your comments. Mary

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

One day we will all leave this world. We need to have things in our lives in order so our children and family will be at peace with our life and our death. Blessing, Mary have a good day. Patricia

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks Patricia, I appreciate your review. Mary

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This has clarity of thoughts (theme), plot, imagination and expression; easy to relate; I liked and enjoyed the read, brevity and expressibility with a resolution.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for your excellent review and great comments. Mary

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written dribble flash fiction. When we grow older, the children start their own lives and their time is limited to once a week phone call to check if mom is still alive, to get through the day, we do little things that don't really matter.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks Sandra I agree with your comments, Mary

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Love the artwork you've chosen Mary for this emotional story of this grand old lady who had such a full life, but now alone, just her and her bird-watching. Great ending that she wants to 'fly away and leave this world behind'
Good luck in the contest,
cheers
valda

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks Valda for your excellent review and great comments. Mary

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

You did a great job embuing this short piece with emotional depth. It flows well and the short word count is used to good effect.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks for your great review, I really appreciate it, Mary

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

Weary yes, but the stories and experiences lock away in that mature mind, we can all learn a thing or two from listening to our oldies. A very good story for the contest friend. Good luck!! Parents should never have to be old and lonely when they have children still breathing...

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thanks Hitcher, I thoroughly agree with your comments, I appreciate your review. Mary

Comment from chcbeck

Excellent

A great contest entry. In such few words I felt a real sadness for this woman. I was affected by your writing. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck.

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 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for the wonderful review and the great comments. Mary