My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Solitary"a collection of my poetry
62 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
You did a wonderful job of describing what must be a lonely life but ending in a hopeful line, "serenity awaits".
Also, this Pleiades form Poem is spot on. The artwork is perfect to set the tone.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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You did a wonderful job of describing what must be a lonely life but ending in a hopeful line, "serenity awaits".
Also, this Pleiades form Poem is spot on. The artwork is perfect to set the tone.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Janet; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I truly appreciate your positive feedback,
~patty~
Comment from dmt1967
The empty room and the words of the poem paint a picture of loneliness. I suffer from a mental illness and feel shut in an empty room with no doors and windows most of the time. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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The empty room and the words of the poem paint a picture of loneliness. I suffer from a mental illness and feel shut in an empty room with no doors and windows most of the time. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I, too, suffer from mental illness that keeps me from exploring the world outside my door. Within the last five minutes, I walked outside to put some mail in the outgoing box. For those brief moments, I felt exposed to the world. Please know that you are in my prayers as we navigate together,
~patty~
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend you have accomplished this form well you used descriptive strong words describing the feeling of being isolated shut in well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Yes my friend you have accomplished this form well you used descriptive strong words describing the feeling of being isolated shut in well done regards Jill
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Jill; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your thoughtful words of encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from Dean Kuch
I think you've captured the feelings of loneliness and solitude quite well in your Pleiades poem, Patty (so sorry about the wanton alliteration there).
To read it, your poem flows very smoothly and reads very well aloud.
So much so in fact that you cannot tell you struggled at all in writing this.
Well done...
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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I think you've captured the feelings of loneliness and solitude quite well in your Pleiades poem, Patty (so sorry about the wanton alliteration there).
To read it, your poem flows very smoothly and reads very well aloud.
So much so in fact that you cannot tell you struggled at all in writing this.
Well done...
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Dean; thank you for your wonderful review. I always feel honored when you give my writing a compliment,
~patty~
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As I do when you decide to do the same for me, Patty.
You're welcome.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Patty
Great images. My guess is that an individual wonders if their loneliness will end by what awaits them on the other side of the door. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Good morning, Patty
Great images. My guess is that an individual wonders if their loneliness will end by what awaits them on the other side of the door. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Ray; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Poetry doesn't come as easy as a short story or novella, so I appreciate your stars and kind words,
~patty~
Comment from RGstar
Beautifully done, beautifully said where the image plays much of a part. The block outside beds well for the prism the antagonist is in. The grey gives that feel of being closed in, whilst the bright colours inside echo calm in an effort to create well being , yet, resigned to solitude .
A lovely write.
Best wishes.
RGstar
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Beautifully done, beautifully said where the image plays much of a part. The block outside beds well for the prism the antagonist is in. The grey gives that feel of being closed in, whilst the bright colours inside echo calm in an effort to create well being , yet, resigned to solitude .
A lovely write.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Poetry doesn't come as easy as a short story or novella, so I appreciate your stars and kind words,
~patty~
Comment from Sis Cat
A profound poem about being trapped inside by fear and habit. You make effective use of S alliteration as the character goes from
"Stuck on this couch alone,
to
"Simply walk to the door.
Suppose for a moment,
Serenity awaits."
Your poem is well structured and carries a positive message about getting off the couch and going out.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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A profound poem about being trapped inside by fear and habit. You make effective use of S alliteration as the character goes from
"Stuck on this couch alone,
to
"Simply walk to the door.
Suppose for a moment,
Serenity awaits."
Your poem is well structured and carries a positive message about getting off the couch and going out.
Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Poetry doesn't come as easy as a short story or novella, so I appreciate your stars and kind words,
~patty~
Comment from sue133
This is really good. The format, in itself, is tricky but you have pulled it off so well. Your poem seems to talk of being alone. Maybe a loved one has gone and one is left all alone. It's a fear many have, including me, and your poem has expressed it simply yet meaningfully. Congratulations. Susan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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This is really good. The format, in itself, is tricky but you have pulled it off so well. Your poem seems to talk of being alone. Maybe a loved one has gone and one is left all alone. It's a fear many have, including me, and your poem has expressed it simply yet meaningfully. Congratulations. Susan
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Poetry doesn't come as easy as a short story or novella, so I appreciate your stars and kind words,
~patty~
Comment from Thal1959
This is very nicely done, Patty. Oddly enough, a lot of people dread that time in their old age when they may be alone. I, personally, am looking forward to the peace and quiet.
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This is very nicely done, Patty. Oddly enough, a lot of people dread that time in their old age when they may be alone. I, personally, am looking forward to the peace and quiet.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Poetry doesn't come as easy as a short story or novella, so I appreciate your stars and kind words,
~patty~
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You're welcome - it's my pleasure, Patty.
Comment from MelB
Hi Patty, you did a great job on this form. Excellent line and syllable count. You portrayed the silence and the loneliness of a self imposed shut-in well.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Patty, you did a great job on this form. Excellent line and syllable count. You portrayed the silence and the loneliness of a self imposed shut-in well.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Poetry doesn't come as easy as a short story or novella, so I appreciate your stars and kind words,
~patty~
