My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Solitary"a collection of my poetry
62 total reviews
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your poem "Serenity". You kept to the rules for your lines and syllables. You chose a very appropriate photo - suggesting loneliness and your last line suggesting hope.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem "Serenity". You kept to the rules for your lines and syllables. You chose a very appropriate photo - suggesting loneliness and your last line suggesting hope.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I think you did fine with the form and I totally get it... there is being alone and there is being lonely. I live alone and for the most part it suits me fine but I do get lonely at times. Good job, my friend.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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I think you did fine with the form and I totally get it... there is being alone and there is being lonely. I live alone and for the most part it suits me fine but I do get lonely at times. Good job, my friend.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. I agree with you - being alone can be a good thing at times, but too much can be a negative,
~patty~
Comment from royowen
Some great philosophical arguments held within you Pleiades poem, a great responsive work, that draws thought from your reader, to coontemplate the value of waiting...for what? Well done, some good alliteration and language, excellent, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Some great philosophical arguments held within you Pleiades poem, a great responsive work, that draws thought from your reader, to coontemplate the value of waiting...for what? Well done, some good alliteration and language, excellent, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Hi Roy; Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
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Most welcome
Comment from mbroyles2
I think you did a marvelous job with this style.
You definitely portrayed a solitude lifestyle with a great image and crisp words.
Wonderful work!
Michael
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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I think you did a marvelous job with this style.
You definitely portrayed a solitude lifestyle with a great image and crisp words.
Wonderful work!
Michael
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2017
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Hi Michael; Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
Comment from AnnaLinda
Patty,
I think you did a fantastic job on your
Pleiades poem. You have wonderful
alliteration in this line: "Silence surrounds the room."
and you overall theme is very thought provoking.
Well done...the form seems challenging,
Linda
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Patty,
I think you did a fantastic job on your
Pleiades poem. You have wonderful
alliteration in this line: "Silence surrounds the room."
and you overall theme is very thought provoking.
Well done...the form seems challenging,
Linda
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Linda; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement about this poem. It was an interesting writing process,
~patty~
Comment from mermaids
The Pleiades form is one of my favorite poetic forms. Your use of the letter "S" adds to your theme of solitude. Feelings and emotions come through clearly. "Serenity awaits" is a perfect last line.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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The Pleiades form is one of my favorite poetic forms. Your use of the letter "S" adds to your theme of solitude. Feelings and emotions come through clearly. "Serenity awaits" is a perfect last line.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate the stars and your encouraging remarks,
~patty~
Comment from Hitcher
That is a place I hope I never end up... Alone, I can remember writing a couple of these Pleiades back in the day, my first tour of FS : ) They are a tad trickier than they look.You have presented a very good example of the form friend, I loved the last to lines !!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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That is a place I hope I never end up... Alone, I can remember writing a couple of these Pleiades back in the day, my first tour of FS : ) They are a tad trickier than they look.You have presented a very good example of the form friend, I loved the last to lines !!
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate the stars and your encouraging remarks,
~patty~
Comment from hammy45
You truly get a sense of loneliness. Simple but strong message projected by the words and the repeated use of the S at the start of each line has an almost snake-like feel to it, but for the right reasons. Love it.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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You truly get a sense of loneliness. Simple but strong message projected by the words and the repeated use of the S at the start of each line has an almost snake-like feel to it, but for the right reasons. Love it.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. Your words of encouragement are appreciated,
~patty~
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Patty,
I enjoyed your Pleiades poem. You did a great job with its style. All lines are in good order. Your words paint a good, but, sad, picture of one who has shut themselves off to the world. The picture is perfect. How sad is that people do this & many aren't aware of how to help & some don't care.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Patty,
I enjoyed your Pleiades poem. You did a great job with its style. All lines are in good order. Your words paint a good, but, sad, picture of one who has shut themselves off to the world. The picture is perfect. How sad is that people do this & many aren't aware of how to help & some don't care.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Jan; thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind and encouraging comments,
~patty~
Comment from Pantygynt
Oh dear me, it seems you have been infected by the Pleiades bug. It is a very difficult infection to through off. I have just got over a bad attack of Pleiadisease I picked up in ancient Greece. You have used this one to put over a serious problem agoraphobia. Perhaps serenity awaits but you will never find out unless you go through that door.
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Oh dear me, it seems you have been infected by the Pleiades bug. It is a very difficult infection to through off. I have just got over a bad attack of Pleiadisease I picked up in ancient Greece. You have used this one to put over a serious problem agoraphobia. Perhaps serenity awaits but you will never find out unless you go through that door.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017
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Hi Jim; it is you and your writing that acquainted me with this poetic form. After the effort put into this poem, I'm not entirely sure how you managed to do so many. Thank you for stopping by to read and review,
~patty~
