Get Up and Dance!
Never challenge an old dancin' fool.74 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
I like how you divided groosmen into 2 lines.
I wish you well in the story poem contest but I really hope you do well in the dancing poetry contest!
teresa
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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I like how you divided groosmen into 2 lines.
I wish you well in the story poem contest but I really hope you do well in the dancing poetry contest!
teresa
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, Teresa, I hope I do well in both contests but especially the Dancing Poetry Contest. Splitting groomsmen was inspired. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
This poem tells the tale of way too many wallflowers. They sit and 'chair dance,' but when offers come to take the floor, they staunchly refuse. You've captured the beat and rhythm of the dance with your words. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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This poem tells the tale of way too many wallflowers. They sit and 'chair dance,' but when offers come to take the floor, they staunchly refuse. You've captured the beat and rhythm of the dance with your words. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, Patty, I was a chair-dancing wallflower, but once I got on the dance floor, I did not want to leave. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Oatmeal
Sis cat,
The descriptive words are well chosen. The flow is great. The words you chose were very professional. The rhyming was well-done. This poem was arranged very well. The theme flowed well all through your poem.
I did locate one typo. Nothing to worry about at all. It will be a quick fix.
Can't stand no (wallflower)
whose head bobs for (hours.)
I guess that I wanted to tell you that if two words rhyme and then you add an S to one of them then they no longer rhyme. This means that some of your lines do not rhyme. I am very sorry. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Sis cat,
The descriptive words are well chosen. The flow is great. The words you chose were very professional. The rhyming was well-done. This poem was arranged very well. The theme flowed well all through your poem.
I did locate one typo. Nothing to worry about at all. It will be a quick fix.
Can't stand no (wallflower)
whose head bobs for (hours.)
I guess that I wanted to tell you that if two words rhyme and then you add an S to one of them then they no longer rhyme. This means that some of your lines do not rhyme. I am very sorry. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Oatmeal, for your review and comment on "hours" but I will retain it as to keep the beat and keep it fun. Cheers!
Comment from Louise Michelle
What fun, what fun. This is filled with joy and was a pleasure to read from top to bottom.
I hate to put a damper on this fun-filled posting, but I have a girlfriend who got out on the floor and did dance too much - her back did go out of whack, haha.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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What fun, what fun. This is filled with joy and was a pleasure to read from top to bottom.
I hate to put a damper on this fun-filled posting, but I have a girlfriend who got out on the floor and did dance too much - her back did go out of whack, haha.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Sorry, Louise, about your friend. Whatever you do, don't show her my poem and tell her to get up and dance!
My number one rule while crafting this poem was to keep it fun. I am glad it showed.
Comment from robyn corum
Andre,
I wish you the very best of luck. I think a poem like this - encouraging people to get up and dance -- would be a super topic choice for a dancing poem contest! Good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Andre,
I wish you the very best of luck. I think a poem like this - encouraging people to get up and dance -- would be a super topic choice for a dancing poem contest! Good luck!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, Robyn, I hope it does better at the Dancing Poetry Contest. I take comfort in knowing that it is a lot better than the poem I wrote and submitted about the California drought several years ago. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Rasmine
SisCat,
This sounds like a song--and a lively disco song at that! Did you have fun dancing at the wedding? It's good exercise. I get up and flail around trying to get some aerobics. It hurts at times, but it's fun and fit!
Good luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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SisCat,
This sounds like a song--and a lively disco song at that! Did you have fun dancing at the wedding? It's good exercise. I get up and flail around trying to get some aerobics. It hurts at times, but it's fun and fit!
Good luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Rasmine, I had a lot of fun dancing at the wedding, as you can see by my poem. Thank you for your review of my"lively disco song" and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from dmt1967
This made me giggle as my hips started to wiggle lol. I love dancing or used to. Nowadays, my heart is willing but my body says, "hell, no" lol. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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This made me giggle as my hips started to wiggle lol. I love dancing or used to. Nowadays, my heart is willing but my body says, "hell, no" lol. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you for giggling and wiggling to my poem. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contests.
Comment from CD Richards
Glad to hear this is based upon a true story. I can relate the the bobbing head and snapping fingers part, but it takes more than a little persuasion to get me to go any further than that. You've done a fine job with this - it fairly dances along. Best of luck both here and in SF. Craig
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Glad to hear this is based upon a true story. I can relate the the bobbing head and snapping fingers part, but it takes more than a little persuasion to get me to go any further than that. You've done a fine job with this - it fairly dances along. Best of luck both here and in SF. Craig
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Oh, thank you, Craig, for your review and wishing me the best "both here and in SF." I was going to skip both contests until I recalled I had danced and danced and danced at a wedding last February. I used my true story to anchor my poem, making it easy for finger snapping, head-bobbing reviewers to relate.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well done you for getting up to dance and then out-lasting Cousin Carolyn. Great story you portray I this fast moving, fun read, and I love the chorus lines, goes well.Great picture, they do look like they're enjoying themselves.
cheers and good luck with it in the Dancing Poetry Contest.
valda
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Well done you for getting up to dance and then out-lasting Cousin Carolyn. Great story you portray I this fast moving, fun read, and I love the chorus lines, goes well.Great picture, they do look like they're enjoying themselves.
cheers and good luck with it in the Dancing Poetry Contest.
valda
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Valda, for your review and for wishing me success in the contest with "this fast moving, fun read."
Comment from Thal1959
Very well written, Andre... though it strikes me as if it was intended to become a song rather than stay a poem. But that's just me - I can't dance a lick!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Very well written, Andre... though it strikes me as if it was intended to become a song rather than stay a poem. But that's just me - I can't dance a lick!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017
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Yes, I intended it to be a song that will have dancers and a band if it wins one of three Grand Finalists prizes at the Dancing Poetry Contest in San Francisco. What this organization does is merge dancing and poetry together as an art form. If I win, I read my poem on stage before a thousand people as costumed and choreographed dancers dance to it while a band plays. It is San Francisco's most prestigious poetry prize. No, it isn't just you. If I win, I will perform. Thank you for your review.
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I'm glad to hear it. better you than me, Andre - I just posted a poem about the sinking of the Hood and Bismarck. If they enacted that on stage while I read it --- there may be casualties!
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Ha! Wear your life preserver!
