Comment from alvina224224

Exceptional

Oh, that brings back memories, IndianaIrish. And these memories are about 80 years old! Simple things please simple minds. Oh blow, my partner has just turned all the lights off and left me with just the light from my laptop. Talk about simple minds, but I am used to it now, so I don't say anything. He will have forgotten by tomorrow. Thank you for the memory xx

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Alvina, I'm so honored and thrilled with your wonderful review, generous extra star, and kind words. Thamk you for taking the time to read and share your comments. Saying the poem brought some cherished memories to mind, is the best compliment this poem can receive. Thamk you.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

A very good poem. This would make a good contest entry. I checked but didn't find a contest for this. I always look before I post.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thanks for your review, Thomas. No contest for this, just written with hopes it might be chosen by the committee to be selected to be included in a haiku book they plan on publishing. Thanks for your comments.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

Yes, we used to play the same game. No point, really,
I mean who doesn't like butter? Parkay, I guess.
Thanks for bringing up a fond memory.
I have no idea how this competition works.
How are the winners decided?
The Potlatch stuff baffles me, too.
I guess I'm an outsider. Suits me.

Good luck, Indy.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review and extra gold star for my haiku, hw. There is a committee of 6 or 7 members who select the haiku they will include in the book they plan on publishing this summer. So far, there has been 17 chapters or topics for the poem. I've been fortunate enough to have 10 selected so far. Potlatch offers a topic and poem/prose format each week. No prizes, just to try new forms and for fun. You can be an outsider if you keep writing the stuff you do.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Hehe I have never heard of this game before. Sounds fun for a child. I really think a picture would have enhanced your haiku. Your authors notes sums the game up perfectly. Thanks for sharing

dip

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thanks for your kind review for my haiku, dip. I don't use a photo unless I think many readers might need one to picture the scene. I figured most people know what a buttercup looks like. I really like letting readers to use their own imagination or memories to put the words into images. Thanks so much for your response!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi IndianaIrish - this is a good haiku in perfect form. Based on the old act that seems to be universal - hold a buttercup under the chin to see if you like butter. It has made a good haiku, capturing a moment. This is a good addition to the book. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thank you for your very kind review and comments for my haiku, Dorothy. I appreciate your response, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from marybell1

Good

I loved your haiku "Child holds Buttercup" All your lines and syllables were correct. I prefer the 5-7-5 style, don"t you?
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

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 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

You loved my haiku, and wrote the lines and Syllables are correct. Do you think the poem needs improvement? Haiku does not have to be 5-7-5 Syllables. It is now accepted to have 17 or less Syllables. I use a syllable count that conveys the image and moment in time I want to share with the reader. Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

reply by marybell1 on 05-Apr-2017

I can not see how to improve it as haiku is not my strong point. When I first learnt it was 5-7-5 so I still have trouble accepting something that has been altered. To me it is like dancing to 4/4 music and calling it a waltz.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017

Fair enough. Then 4-stars it is.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Karyn, This is very interesting. I have not heard that before today. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with your words. I enjoyed reading and reviewing! love, Teri

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thank you for your very kind review and comments for my haiku, Teri. I appreciate your response, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

Oh the butter cups! How many times we let our Mother trick us into smelling them so she could dab them on our noses. Wonderfully crafted piece you have presented my friend.
God bless!
Steve

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thank you for your very kind review and comments for my haiku, Steve. I appreciate your response, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem. I'm also glad it brought some fond memories to mind for you.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

reply by Neonewman on 05-Apr-2017

My pleasure!

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-Author notes are appreciated.
-Haiku is written well.
-Very nice imagery in line two
with "gold luster."
-Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thank you for your very kind review and comments for my haiku, Pam. I appreciate your response, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem. Thanks for mentioning the imagery.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

The is a fine haiku for the challenge
And an interesting choice of flower in the buttercup
Excellent imagery and connection, plus alliteration
and a solid satori line (or maybe soft... butter)
Nice choice of color for the background
Well done

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thanks for this great review for my flower haiku, rspoet. I appreciate your feedback about the poem's format, and thanks for your encouraging comments.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)