Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This tells evidently the state of uncomfortable love affairs at this point and how one tries to bring in the matter normal; sharing of mistaken state is for resolution.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Such a cute picture for such a sad story. This seems like a relationship that should end. Sounds like the answer to the questions in the first stanza are no. It doesn't seem like much love making happens in this couple.

I think you did well.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

reply by dragonpoet on 02-Apr-2017

No problem, Patty.

Joan

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

This was wonderful Patty, always brave to try new formats and both are excellent.
The first a need we all crave ....reassurance.
The second the routine of everyday mature relationships.
Perfectly executed in the 5-7-7 format.
Have a lovely evening

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

Comment from Bichon

Excellent

Such a great sedoka, haven't read something like this before but I really liked it. I love the layout, can easily distinguish the conversation from the next, hope you'll do more like this!

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 Comment Written 01-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~