My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Nightly Chatter"a collection of my poetry
44 total reviews
Comment from Irish Rain
Ha ha...Obviously the first is the woman, and the second is Archie Bunker, just wanting his beer! Love this!! Very original, and clever, blessings...
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Ha ha...Obviously the first is the woman, and the second is Archie Bunker, just wanting his beer! Love this!! Very original, and clever, blessings...
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. I'm glad the poem was amusing to you.
~patty~
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I haven't written these, but have read several and this looks good to me. Looks like you have done your research, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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I haven't written these, but have read several and this looks good to me. Looks like you have done your research, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. I'm glad the poem was amusing to you.
~patty~
Comment from alvina224224
Well, there's another valuable lesson I've learned. My only knowledge of Japanese poetry was the Haiku, and I had no idea there were so many other forms. Thank you for the information, Mustangpatty. My partner, who is 90 this year, is a fanatic about seduko (far beyond me because it is all about figures.) Words are my passion, so I can boast now that I (think) I know how to write sedoka. Thank you for the lesson, my friend.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Well, there's another valuable lesson I've learned. My only knowledge of Japanese poetry was the Haiku, and I had no idea there were so many other forms. Thank you for the information, Mustangpatty. My partner, who is 90 this year, is a fanatic about seduko (far beyond me because it is all about figures.) Words are my passion, so I can boast now that I (think) I know how to write sedoka. Thank you for the lesson, my friend.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. I'm glad the poem was amusing to you.
~patty~
Comment from Hitcher
An interesting style of poetry when you see it side by side like this. I noticed a distinct lack of passion from both parties in the above mentioned love affair, don't think they will go the distance, ha ha
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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An interesting style of poetry when you see it side by side like this. I noticed a distinct lack of passion from both parties in the above mentioned love affair, don't think they will go the distance, ha ha
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. I'm glad the poem was amusing to you.
~patty~
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for your notes to remind about the basis for the sedoka. You certainly communicated disparate viewpoints in this love-affair conversation. I liked your reinforcing the point with differing fonts as well. Smiles- Joan
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Thank you for your notes to remind about the basis for the sedoka. You certainly communicated disparate viewpoints in this love-affair conversation. I liked your reinforcing the point with differing fonts as well. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
Comment from Bill O'Bier
This is an interesting format and a creative piece. The teddy bear motif in the artwork is an interesting twist. The Teddy bear symbolism reminds us that we need to open our hearts to being gentle and caring and understanding with the situation or question. There could be someone in your life that may need your loving kindness, rather than your judgment. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Bill~
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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This is an interesting format and a creative piece. The teddy bear motif in the artwork is an interesting twist. The Teddy bear symbolism reminds us that we need to open our hearts to being gentle and caring and understanding with the situation or question. There could be someone in your life that may need your loving kindness, rather than your judgment. Thanks for sharing this piece.
Bill~
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent sedoka poem. This is a form I have not tried but I think you did a nice job with it. The message that we each have different needs and each one needs to be mindful of the other is good for everyone.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Excellent sedoka poem. This is a form I have not tried but I think you did a nice job with it. The message that we each have different needs and each one needs to be mindful of the other is good for everyone.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Sedoka between modern time lovers, the one just need some attention from her lover and asks him about his day, he offers his paycheck to her and mentions he thought a little bit of her.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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A very well-written Sedoka between modern time lovers, the one just need some attention from her lover and asks him about his day, he offers his paycheck to her and mentions he thought a little bit of her.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
Comment from kiwisteveh
Wow! what a contradiction in attitudes and feelings. The (presumably) male response to his partner's greeting is so brusque it's like having a bucket of iced water thrown over you.
You probably saw my recent tanka suite 'Hunger and Delight' which used the message/reply between lovers format.
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Wow! what a contradiction in attitudes and feelings. The (presumably) male response to his partner's greeting is so brusque it's like having a bucket of iced water thrown over you.
You probably saw my recent tanka suite 'Hunger and Delight' which used the message/reply between lovers format.
Steve
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
Comment from tfawcus
I get pretty confused by all these variations of the form of Japanese poetry. However, this one, set as a conversation has great scope, which you have made full use of to illustrate the Mars and Venus theme! Different perspectives indeed!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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I get pretty confused by all these variations of the form of Japanese poetry. However, this one, set as a conversation has great scope, which you have made full use of to illustrate the Mars and Venus theme! Different perspectives indeed!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~
