Comment from Nan Beeson

Excellent

What a darling poem.... The picture made it even more precious. The dialogue sounded like it was a common one... Ha....I especially loved your two lines....

"Here is my paycheck
I thought of you once or twice"

Ha! It was a very fun read... Thank you for sharing it as well as the informative author's notes.

 Comment Written 05-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2017

Hi Nan; thank you for stopping by to read and review. This was a fun little write, and I appreciate your stars and words of encouragement,
~patty~

reply by Nan Beeson on 05-Apr-2017

You are welcome, patty.....Nan::))

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

Patty, this is an adorable write, I sure do love the interesting style. It fit with your words perfectly. Well done, my friend. ~Kerry~

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Hi Kerry; thank you for your kind review. I'm basically going through the different poetic forms I find while I'm reading and trying them one by one. I'm glad you liked this,
~patty~

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 04-Apr-2017

lol, I'm trying different too, why don't you try and do the potlatch poetry. It's a new style every week. I just started last week. anyone can do it.

Comment from ameen786

Excellent

Hello Patty, this is a creative verse penned in a question/answer format and maintaining the poetic form as well; above all, the theme of a conversation between two lovers is creative; thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

Comment from Oatmeal

Excellent

Mustangpatty1029,

I read your notes but I liked this format and that is how it is. Your arrangement here is very creative. Your feelings are expressed well. Very nicely written. Your flow is good.

There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.

You wrote this one very well.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Hi Camille; Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
xoxoxo~patty~

Comment from sue133

Excellent

This is an innovative poem which is a change from the norm. I really liked it and I think it has worked. I am learning so much about new poetry forms and this one really captured my attention. Keep exploring and writing new ones. Susan

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

Comment from Rasmine

Good

I like it, but it kind of reads like prose a little bit. I'm not good at poetry at all, I try but fail at times. Please, don't take this personally, but maybe just some tightening up. I never heard of a katauta so I may be way out in left field, LOL.
Take care

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 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

Hi; I just followed the prescribed method in the notes I could find about the poetic form. Rhyming isn't necessary, so I experimented with the syllable count and use of two different voices. I don't take your review personally at all. Poems are so subjective and if the piece didn't speak to you - it just didn't.
~patty~

Comment from Ogden

Excellent

Hi Patty. I like what you did very much. The poem is clever, and the form, that is explained well in your notes, sounds like an excellent idea. If it is your own innovation, maybe you should name it after yourself, like Pattykatauta?

Don

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

LOL! No, I think this is form made by someone else. My research didn't say who the creator was, but I simply kept drilling down to get the definitions of the other terms used. I'm glad you enjoyed the fruit of my labors,
~patty~

reply by Ogden on 05-Apr-2017

Keep harvesting, Patty!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I love this 'question' and 'answer' routine! Innocent questions with reality answers brings one down to earth! Best regards Dolly x

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

Hi Dolly; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. This was a fun piece to write and a way to experiment with a new poetic form,
~patty~

Comment from Thal1959

Excellent

Very nicely done, Patty. Though I am not personally partial to the brief poetic forms - especially when there are a handful of them being experimented with... too confusing to keep up with. But that's just me.

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~

reply by Thal1959 on 03-Apr-2017

You're welcome - it was my pleasure.

Comment from Dan-C

Excellent

I like your poem. Your words ring so true, Unfortunately that's the state of many married couples. I like the picture the bears and coffee are a wonderful choice
Thanks for sharing
Dan

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your comments and encouragement.
~patty~