From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "The Hum"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Yes, each idea is 'birthed' from the mind of the writer. The germinated seed grows until it is a full-fledged thought. It flows from the pen, and gives the world something new to marvel over. Thank you for sharing this well penned poem,
~patty~
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Yes, each idea is 'birthed' from the mind of the writer. The germinated seed grows until it is a full-fledged thought. It flows from the pen, and gives the world something new to marvel over. Thank you for sharing this well penned poem,
~patty~
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much Patty, for your very kind and encouraging review! Much appreciated indeed. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Vance,
what a wonderful way you described how a poet conceives thoughts and gives birth to a poem
of how perfect you wrote--
First, there is the Hum
Announcing the pregnancy
Preparing the midwife of words
For the birth
Gert
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Hello Vance,
what a wonderful way you described how a poet conceives thoughts and gives birth to a poem
of how perfect you wrote--
First, there is the Hum
Announcing the pregnancy
Preparing the midwife of words
For the birth
Gert
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thanks Gert, for your lovely and encouraging review with six lovely stars. I'm sincerely delighted to get such an applause from a talent as bright and beaming as YOU! I always love your works and have learned a lot from you with many thanks, Vance
Comment from alf collier
From first embryonic whisper, to the final birthing of the idea, you have personified the events of thought process with smooth flow and cultured voice!! Oh that I had a delicious six to pass on!! A most worthy effort, my friend, and a joy to read!!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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From first embryonic whisper, to the final birthing of the idea, you have personified the events of thought process with smooth flow and cultured voice!! Oh that I had a delicious six to pass on!! A most worthy effort, my friend, and a joy to read!!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thanks so much alf, for your very kind and uplifting review! It's an encouraging and motivational review that is sincerely appreciated. Kind regards, HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from nuthead
Neat personification of Hum for muse/inspiration. The birth of thought and ideas, the hum of meter, ink blood, scribbled gift - all great imagery!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Neat personification of Hum for muse/inspiration. The birth of thought and ideas, the hum of meter, ink blood, scribbled gift - all great imagery!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you sincerely for this very kind and uplifting review! It is indeed, much appreciated and I hope to see you again soon! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from Badger_29
A wonderful writing with what I detect to contain many levels and layers of meaning. I loved the tapping of the conducter's baton, it set a lively pace for this enjoyable read. I also liked how you stated "newly injected soul". You have woven wonderful concepts together here, great job.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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A wonderful writing with what I detect to contain many levels and layers of meaning. I loved the tapping of the conducter's baton, it set a lively pace for this enjoyable read. I also liked how you stated "newly injected soul". You have woven wonderful concepts together here, great job.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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And Blessings to you, my friend, for this wonderful review and uplifting comments. I'm truly honored and delighted that this work has had positive meaning for you and I hope to be able to deliver more in the future! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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Thanks for prompt, warm reply. Evidence of positive networking ~
Comment from Oatmeal
His Grayness,
Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth. Very descriptive.
Very well reflected thoughts and opinions, expressiveness is working well.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
You wrote this one very well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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His Grayness,
Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth. Very descriptive.
Very well reflected thoughts and opinions, expressiveness is working well.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
You wrote this one very well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much Oatmeal! Your words have created a warm and rich smile of encouragement and inspiration. I will work hard to keep my works meaningful and hope you will keep me on your watch! Blessings Love and Gratitude!! Vance
Comment from tfawcus
This is a magnificent poem, Vance, and I do wish I had for it the six it so richly deserves. What a wonderful pair of extended metaphors, giving birth to the new poem and then likening the result to music. You have here both the excitement of creation and something of the poet's diffidence in offering up this part of himself to the glare of a wider audience.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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This is a magnificent poem, Vance, and I do wish I had for it the six it so richly deserves. What a wonderful pair of extended metaphors, giving birth to the new poem and then likening the result to music. You have here both the excitement of creation and something of the poet's diffidence in offering up this part of himself to the glare of a wider audience.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Thanks Tony for the wonderful and uplifting review and virtual sixes (as many I've had to bring to you with bowed head as well) so no problem as I really appreciate your insights and always helpful feedback. I've spent much of my life writing music with the joy of sharing the emotions thereby and so the blending with writing poetry seemed perfectly natural and I'm hopeful this work will be helpful to many writers as well. It is always a genuine delight to share your brilliant thoughts and I really appreciate your feedback. All the best, dear friend! Vance
Comment from Irish Rain
Out of sixes Mr. Vance...sorry! Isn't this the truth though?? Every time I'm writing, I get SO entrenched in it, then, as though it were a newborn...I am fascinated with it for days afterword. Like, 'Whoa! I made this!!!' Great poem, blessings...
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Out of sixes Mr. Vance...sorry! Isn't this the truth though?? Every time I'm writing, I get SO entrenched in it, then, as though it were a newborn...I am fascinated with it for days afterword. Like, 'Whoa! I made this!!!' Great poem, blessings...
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Sincere thanks for this wonderful message and I'm honored and delighted that this work related well to your works in poetry and writing in general. I really enjoyed writing it and as a musician and composer, the blending of creations of word and music made complete synchronicity with me. Glad you enjoyed it! Best wishes and thanks! Vance
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Just wonderful! A musician and composer...I'm thinking 'Mr. Holland's Opus'...maybe one day yours!!!
Comment from Spitfire
Oh Vance, what a beautiful extended metaphor. I connect with the Hum and the mating of thought and passion. Skillful references to music and art. Best of all, the line about some form of love. This deserves Poem of the Month, my friend.
Hugs,
Shari
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Oh Vance, what a beautiful extended metaphor. I connect with the Hum and the mating of thought and passion. Skillful references to music and art. Best of all, the line about some form of love. This deserves Poem of the Month, my friend.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Dear Shari: I'm doubly delighted to hear from you with such a warm, positive, and encouraging review as I so deeply respect and admire your poetic (and general) writing skills. Your words here are a gift of priceless meaning to me and I hope to be able to share this with many other poets that may find it inspirational and meaningful to them. Blessings and hugs always! Vance
Comment from Nan Beeson
Dear Vance...
First of all, your title, "The Hum," captured my attention and I was so anxious to read what you had to say about it ~ but first, I will tell you how it effected me....
It reminded me of God's Omnipotent Sound Current -- that is faster than the speed of Light and high octave Vibrational force of the Universe ~ and the the only way one could hear it with the inner ear that is attuned to it, otherwise the person in a physical body would explode from the slighest sound it... And now to my review of your truly revolutionary understanding of the "Hum," as you effectively refer to it.
I particularly resonated with the stanza...
"The impatient tapping
Of the Conductor's Baton
Demands response to the call
For word music"
I liked it since everything is manifest to the sound of music ~ or, I like to refer to it as "Music of the spheres."
I was also intrigued with your line. "Fear and Will"
The word "Fear" really got to within the core of me -- since the Bible says there is nothing to fear but fear itself-- and yet -- I fear the pain of the physical body since no amount or kind of medication has any effect on me... Such as now -- I have been patiently waiting to review your poem... and now while my back still hurts.... I am persisting...
I wish I understood this ~ and then perhaps the fear would vanish....
It is an exceptional poem of Truth expressed as a "HUM," so aptly expressed in your choice of words to bring forth this vital message to the masses of people who are not aware of the significance of it.
Thank you for sharing it... and I will go back now and read it again in the event I missed something.
Nan:))
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Dear Vance...
First of all, your title, "The Hum," captured my attention and I was so anxious to read what you had to say about it ~ but first, I will tell you how it effected me....
It reminded me of God's Omnipotent Sound Current -- that is faster than the speed of Light and high octave Vibrational force of the Universe ~ and the the only way one could hear it with the inner ear that is attuned to it, otherwise the person in a physical body would explode from the slighest sound it... And now to my review of your truly revolutionary understanding of the "Hum," as you effectively refer to it.
I particularly resonated with the stanza...
"The impatient tapping
Of the Conductor's Baton
Demands response to the call
For word music"
I liked it since everything is manifest to the sound of music ~ or, I like to refer to it as "Music of the spheres."
I was also intrigued with your line. "Fear and Will"
The word "Fear" really got to within the core of me -- since the Bible says there is nothing to fear but fear itself-- and yet -- I fear the pain of the physical body since no amount or kind of medication has any effect on me... Such as now -- I have been patiently waiting to review your poem... and now while my back still hurts.... I am persisting...
I wish I understood this ~ and then perhaps the fear would vanish....
It is an exceptional poem of Truth expressed as a "HUM," so aptly expressed in your choice of words to bring forth this vital message to the masses of people who are not aware of the significance of it.
Thank you for sharing it... and I will go back now and read it again in the event I missed something.
Nan:))
Comment Written 31-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2017
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Wow, Nan, how wonderful to hear from you and share your lovely thoughts. Yes, we see "births" of many things in our lives and I certainly remember quite often finding myself Hmmmm'ing a guttural consonance at times of deep thought and curiosity so it became a logical undertaking to acknowledge and celebrate it with a poem of reflection. I'm so glad you enjoyed it and I do hop you find some comfort and relief soon. Blessings always! Vance with deep gratitude for your lovely review.
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Dear Vance... I do hope you got the
correct version of my review....
I understand what you are saying and have experienced similar feelings you described.... LIfe is a joy when one experiences this and makes life even a greater joy while we are clothed with the temporary body of flesh.
I often refer to your "gratitude" poems when I review a post that I believe warrants it.
Blessings galore....Nan:))
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Nan: I'm sure that I received and well understood with endless gratitude, your wonderful words and positive that I ALWAYS WILL! LOVE ~ Vance
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I am so relieved, Vance.... and thank you for telling me.... You are so kind with your praise
Nan:))
