My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Has it really only been 60 days?"a collection of my poetry
101 total reviews
Comment from Lindagail Hall
And he's made each day on the news in UK since he took over. For the restraint of words you've done this prompt justice. And it's up to date , this health issue I hope Es forward and is not destroyed. Good luck in the contest .
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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And he's made each day on the news in UK since he took over. For the restraint of words you've done this prompt justice. And it's up to date , this health issue I hope Es forward and is not destroyed. Good luck in the contest .
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
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Your very welcome hope it wins
Comment from Louise Michelle
You did a fabulous job with this writing challenge. Each word you selected has a lot of punch. Well, he's certainly lost round one, hasn't he? I do hope health care can get straightened out or we all lose.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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You did a fabulous job with this writing challenge. Each word you selected has a lot of punch. Well, he's certainly lost round one, hasn't he? I do hope health care can get straightened out or we all lose.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from Oatmeal
The arrangement is formatted very well. Created impressions through the descriptions are vivid, forceful and making the reader think about it. I can only wish you the best of luck in this contest.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
You wrote this one very well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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The arrangement is formatted very well. Created impressions through the descriptions are vivid, forceful and making the reader think about it. I can only wish you the best of luck in this contest.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. Everything looked in place.
You wrote this one very well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
IT DOES SEEM LIKE FOREVER... UGGH WHAT A FACE.... I was beginning think he could do anything he wanted... thank you for sharing this... good job on the form and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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IT DOES SEEM LIKE FOREVER... UGGH WHAT A FACE.... I was beginning think he could do anything he wanted... thank you for sharing this... good job on the form and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from frogbook
Haha. You speak the truth (unlike some-no names mentioned.) Great picture and great title also. Seems like a real contender for the contest. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Haha. You speak the truth (unlike some-no names mentioned.) Great picture and great title also. Seems like a real contender for the contest. Best of luck.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from Pantygynt
He doesn't look vvery happy about it all. Have the Mexicans refused to pay then? Oh dear!
(Flourish - Enter the old fool, stage left)
FOOL: I'm but a walking shadow, a poor player
That struts and frets his hour upon the stage
Upon the campaign trail back then I shone
But now I'm listened to no more. An order
issued by an idiot executive,
full of sound and fury, soon rescinded
Signifying nothing.
MACDUFF: That's good to know.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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He doesn't look vvery happy about it all. Have the Mexicans refused to pay then? Oh dear!
(Flourish - Enter the old fool, stage left)
FOOL: I'm but a walking shadow, a poor player
That struts and frets his hour upon the stage
Upon the campaign trail back then I shone
But now I'm listened to no more. An order
issued by an idiot executive,
full of sound and fury, soon rescinded
Signifying nothing.
MACDUFF: That's good to know.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
with the correct 5-7-5 syllables
Lions have a little more pride than Trump
He'll soon learn how dysfunctional Washington really is
and that few actually support him.
He may give up an go back to his tower
We can always hope.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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This is a fine entry for the contest
with the correct 5-7-5 syllables
Lions have a little more pride than Trump
He'll soon learn how dysfunctional Washington really is
and that few actually support him.
He may give up an go back to his tower
We can always hope.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from RGstar
I haven't been following the affairs in USA lately, so much happening on this side of the pond so I am not sure the implications of the Health care issue, but I am sure to have a peek after reading this.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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I haven't been following the affairs in USA lately, so much happening on this side of the pond so I am not sure the implications of the Health care issue, but I am sure to have a peek after reading this.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
a lion roared in
executive orders flew
health care stopped him dead
your 5/7/5 syllabic count is right but the poem doesn't flow... it reads like a telegram.
I suggest the following changes....
angry lion roar
as executive orders
flue and health care died.... this makes more sense
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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a lion roared in
executive orders flew
health care stopped him dead
your 5/7/5 syllabic count is right but the poem doesn't flow... it reads like a telegram.
I suggest the following changes....
angry lion roar
as executive orders
flue and health care died.... this makes more sense
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Very well done. I never thought until now that a haiku could be used so well for a current event (hopefully it won't last much longer). You did a marvelous job with your poem and found just the right illustration. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Very well done. I never thought until now that a haiku could be used so well for a current event (hopefully it won't last much longer). You did a marvelous job with your poem and found just the right illustration. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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thank you for your thoughtful review
