Blood Brothers
In grief we bond with others15 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Your poem is outstanding. I'm not sure if this contest is over or not. I'll check. Beautifully composed. Sweet and empathetic with great word choices and rhyme. Marilyn
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Your poem is outstanding. I'm not sure if this contest is over or not. I'll check. Beautifully composed. Sweet and empathetic with great word choices and rhyme. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
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Thank you , Marilyn, for sharing my poem and your effusive praise. Rod
Comment from kathleenspalding
Beautiful, mournful, and powerful poem! Paints a vivid mental picture and creates a strong mood. I would recommend it to everyone. Did not see any errors. If it didn't place in the contest, it should have!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Beautiful, mournful, and powerful poem! Paints a vivid mental picture and creates a strong mood. I would recommend it to everyone. Did not see any errors. If it didn't place in the contest, it should have!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Kathleen, for reading my poem and your very kind praise. Rod
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You're welcome.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Terrific meter makes this a smooth sailing read. You did a good job with this writing challenge, a very interesting scenario. Good rhyme choices as well.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Terrific meter makes this a smooth sailing read. You did a good job with this writing challenge, a very interesting scenario. Good rhyme choices as well.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Louise. I am delighted you found "Blood Brothers" smooth sailing. Rod
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was a wonderful poem of grief, All death and sad poems always get me sad; this truly touched my heart. Well done my friend. Good luck. ~Kerry~
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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That was a wonderful poem of grief, All death and sad poems always get me sad; this truly touched my heart. Well done my friend. Good luck. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Kerry, for this very warm-hearted review and kind praise.
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Your welcome
Comment from MLEaton
This is simply brilliant! I love the imagery of the first line: 'teasing breeze' and 'moon filled sky'. You drew me in so that I revelled in the whole poem. I've read it five times!
Thank you.
Marion :)
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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This is simply brilliant! I love the imagery of the first line: 'teasing breeze' and 'moon filled sky'. You drew me in so that I revelled in the whole poem. I've read it five times!
Thank you.
Marion :)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Marion,you have made my day with your enthusiasm and effusive praise. I am thrilled you enjoyed my poem so much.
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I loved it! Thank you!
Comment from wondertwin
This is beautifully written, tugging at the heart as I'm sure did yours to write...
Excellent job keeping the 8 syllable cadence throughout your poem and the aabb rhyme pattern works well. Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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This is beautifully written, tugging at the heart as I'm sure did yours to write...
Excellent job keeping the 8 syllable cadence throughout your poem and the aabb rhyme pattern works well. Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my poem, Amy. Thanks so much for your kind praise.
Comment from melyuki
Hi Rod thank you for sharing your poem about grief and the sharing of pain from one to another.. The words are sincere and very moving . The emotion running through each couplet is warm and loving and most appealing.. Your rhyme and meter is perfect and the image sets the scene beautifully. Thanks for the journey Rod, cheers mel xx
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Hi Rod thank you for sharing your poem about grief and the sharing of pain from one to another.. The words are sincere and very moving . The emotion running through each couplet is warm and loving and most appealing.. Your rhyme and meter is perfect and the image sets the scene beautifully. Thanks for the journey Rod, cheers mel xx
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, melyuki, for your warm-hearted response to my poem and your wonderful praise of it. The six bright stars are much appreciated, too.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, your poem is beautifully penned in soft images.
Of special note:
Your thoughts of her cling silently
like raindrops to a leafless tree,
(vivid imagery and great analogy)
Great complementary artwork choice. silky rhyming couplets. A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Hello author, your poem is beautifully penned in soft images.
Of special note:
Your thoughts of her cling silently
like raindrops to a leafless tree,
(vivid imagery and great analogy)
Great complementary artwork choice. silky rhyming couplets. A pleasure to read. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, LateBloomer, for your warm response to my poem. I appreciate your praise and your best wishes.
Comment from ceramic
Presumably it is the mother who is the departed, but what is the significance of 'sep'rate graves' ? Confusing. Is it a common girlfriend involved or are the two men just sharing the same emotions? Too ambiguous for me.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Presumably it is the mother who is the departed, but what is the significance of 'sep'rate graves' ? Confusing. Is it a common girlfriend involved or are the two men just sharing the same emotions? Too ambiguous for me.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for sharing my poem, ceramic. I am sorry the story was ambiguous for you. It is the tale of two men visiting SEPARATE graves, but sharing similar grief for their respective loved ones. The Speaker knows exactly what the other man feels.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a heartfelt poem, with exquisite rhyming and fluid, almost perfect flow. The picture is amazing in its complement of the piece. I have only minor suggestions to maintain its smooth flow completely. Please do not be offended - I cannot remain still when I encounter such truly "great" writing;
1. 12th line - delete word "me," for a more fluid read,
2. 16th line - change words "that won't" to "without."
Best of luck in the contest - you have my vote...
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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In my opinion, a heartfelt poem, with exquisite rhyming and fluid, almost perfect flow. The picture is amazing in its complement of the piece. I have only minor suggestions to maintain its smooth flow completely. Please do not be offended - I cannot remain still when I encounter such truly "great" writing;
1. 12th line - delete word "me," for a more fluid read,
2. 16th line - change words "that won't" to "without."
Best of luck in the contest - you have my vote...
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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I am thrilled by all your superlatives and truly appreciate your taking time also to suggest ways to improve my poem. Thank you so much!
