Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "haiku (morning birds gather)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
37 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Lovely work. Outstanding satori. Superb word economy, superb imagery, superb spiritual overtone. superb phonetics with alliteration of M and consonance of H and R and L. Loved reading it about.
Every word well-weighed. I FELT your standing ovation!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Lovely work. Outstanding satori. Superb word economy, superb imagery, superb spiritual overtone. superb phonetics with alliteration of M and consonance of H and R and L. Loved reading it about.
Every word well-weighed. I FELT your standing ovation!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your encouragement and support, rd. I truly appreciate your taking the otime to read and share your thoughts for this,poem. I'm always delighted to receive your feedback, and I'm glad you enjoyed this autumn haiku. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was such a cute and sweet Haiku. I loved it. Perfectly done; A Magnolia tree
is so magnificent- a choir of birds added in, of course a beautiful choir on this beauty of a tree, can have the no-tone birds on it with lousy sqwaucking- LOL
Have a great weekend. ~Kerry~
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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That was such a cute and sweet Haiku. I loved it. Perfectly done; A Magnolia tree
is so magnificent- a choir of birds added in, of course a beautiful choir on this beauty of a tree, can have the no-tone birds on it with lousy sqwaucking- LOL
Have a great weekend. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your great review for my tree haiku, Kerry. I truly appreciate your encouraging, kind comments. I loved your no-tone birds comment! Ya made me laugh!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Your welcome, glad you had a chuckle.
Comment from Janet Foor
I concur - the songbirds are gloriously singing their songs at our home too. I loved your satori line. Hallelalu choir us a perfect description.
Well done.
Happy Sunday
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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I concur - the songbirds are gloriously singing their songs at our home too. I loved your satori line. Hallelalu choir us a perfect description.
Well done.
Happy Sunday
Janet
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your great review for my tree haiku, Janet. I truly appreciate your encouraging, kind comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and Happy Sunday back at you.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Donya Quijote
A wonderful, simple haiku that does indeed capture a moment in time, a moment that so many of us share and don't always appreciate. The birds in WV, though many did not leave this winter, have begun their morning concert series. The warm up begins about 4am. Always nice to hear in morning while getting ready for school. A fine write...
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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A wonderful, simple haiku that does indeed capture a moment in time, a moment that so many of us share and don't always appreciate. The birds in WV, though many did not leave this winter, have begun their morning concert series. The warm up begins about 4am. Always nice to hear in morning while getting ready for school. A fine write...
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you so very much for this wonderful review, generous extra star, and your encouraging comments for my tree haiku, Donya. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the poem, and appreciate your kind response. I love around 4am when the first chirping reaches my ears. Love it!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from catch22
This is a lovely haiku with what I assume is correct adherence to the form. I know very little about the short forms, but it seems to have the required seasonal reference and interconnected lines--as well as a clever final line that gives a fresh perspective to the concrete images. Very well done.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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This is a lovely haiku with what I assume is correct adherence to the form. I know very little about the short forms, but it seems to have the required seasonal reference and interconnected lines--as well as a clever final line that gives a fresh perspective to the concrete images. Very well done.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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It seems from your review, you know all the important aspects of the haiku form, catch22. Thank you for your great review, and I truly appreciate your encouraging, kind comments for my tree haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written and very beautiful you describe the dawn chorus so well using this form I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Hello my friend this is well written and very beautiful you describe the dawn chorus so well using this form I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your great review for my tree haiku, JIll. I truly appreciate your encouraging, kind comments. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from artemis53
What a lovely piece Karyn from beginning to end and end to beginning. I hadn't noticed a difference in the birds this Spring which means I've got to get outside with my gardening ;)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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What a lovely piece Karyn from beginning to end and end to beginning. I hadn't noticed a difference in the birds this Spring which means I've got to get outside with my gardening ;)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your great review for my tree haiku, Artemis.I truly appreciate your encouraging, kind comments. Maybe it's not the birds, but my being more in tune to the songs. I love hearing the first notes of morning around 4 am.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Irish Rain
What a beautiful interpretation...'the hallelujah choir'...I love it. I thought the birds were rather lively this spring too. Maybe here, because they came so early. Love your haiku, blessings...
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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What a beautiful interpretation...'the hallelujah choir'...I love it. I thought the birds were rather lively this spring too. Maybe here, because they came so early. Love your haiku, blessings...
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your great review for my tree haiku, Irish Rain. I truly appreciate your encouraging, kind comments. I'm glad to read I'm not the only one noticing the incredible morning music this spring.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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It is lovely!!
Comment from CD Richards
Magnolias are indeed gorgeous trees. You don't mention in your notes what type of birds, but obviously they make a beautiful noise. A lovey haiku, congratulations on an excellent contribution. Craig
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Magnolias are indeed gorgeous trees. You don't mention in your notes what type of birds, but obviously they make a beautiful noise. A lovey haiku, congratulations on an excellent contribution. Craig
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your great review for my tree haiku, Craig. I truly appreciate your encouraging, kind comments. With it being a choir, I like the idea of it being an assortment of birds lending their voices to the songs...kind of like soprano, alto, tenor, and bass. LOL
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a beautiful and sunny view of the morning in lyric and fluid free verse - fully compliant with the prompt - best wishes in the contest...
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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In my opinion, a beautiful and sunny view of the morning in lyric and fluid free verse - fully compliant with the prompt - best wishes in the contest...
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your review and taking the time to read and share your comments for my tree haiku, evesayshi. I appreciate your kind response, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are very welcome, Karyn - truly a work of art...Eve
