The Silence Speaks
500 words10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a terrific story could be ripped from the headlines of recent hostages, having lived for years as prisoners. Nicely builds to the confrontation and the happy resolution.
"Jesus!" is all he can say.
"I don't think he's here," I say. "But then again, maybe he is."
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
This is a terrific story could be ripped from the headlines of recent hostages, having lived for years as prisoners. Nicely builds to the confrontation and the happy resolution.
"Jesus!" is all he can say.
"I don't think he's here," I say. "But then again, maybe he is."
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Oh, thanks so much for the lovely green star, Bill. I did think of the stories from the headlines as I wrote it and I would want more revenge...though I'm pretty sure I couldn't do it myself. Much appreciated.
Comment from frierajac
thank you for the story. I liked all the interior voice of the girl and the ending
in which she speaks. Actually, it reminds me of the book, "ROOM" which was a true story. It just took the girl a few years more to escape and her child by her captor
helped.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
thank you for the story. I liked all the interior voice of the girl and the ending
in which she speaks. Actually, it reminds me of the book, "ROOM" which was a true story. It just took the girl a few years more to escape and her child by her captor
helped.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much for this magnificent green star. It is truly appreciated and I am pleased that you thought it was deserved.
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Frongs and Toads 2 U!
Comment from MelB
Wow! This is a gruesome, but gripping story you have written. I can't imagine being locked up for many years with a crazy person. I can see why this won the contest! Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
Wow! This is a gruesome, but gripping story you have written. I can't imagine being locked up for many years with a crazy person. I can see why this won the contest! Well done.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was a super terrific kidnapping story. I would kept stabbing him as well, I like the last line in your ending. It was a well played out kidnapping.
Good luck. ~Kerry~
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
That was a super terrific kidnapping story. I would kept stabbing him as well, I like the last line in your ending. It was a well played out kidnapping.
Good luck. ~Kerry~
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and the great comments.
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Your welcome
Comment from valmay
A great contest entry. Gritty and believable. P4 makes the protagonist so pitiful as well as establishing the time line. P3 the analogy of the hearse is also a mood setter. Good luck
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
A great contest entry. Gritty and believable. P4 makes the protagonist so pitiful as well as establishing the time line. P3 the analogy of the hearse is also a mood setter. Good luck
Comment Written 24-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thanks much for reading and your thoughtful review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Yu crafted a great little piece here for this competition. Good tension, taut writing and excellent voice in the story. very nice end line to wrap thing up.
Should do well
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
Hi there,
Yu crafted a great little piece here for this competition. Good tension, taut writing and excellent voice in the story. very nice end line to wrap thing up.
Should do well
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 24-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much. I appreciated the read.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very dark and moving short story. The images stand out and are easy to imagine. I wrote a similar short story "Snapped", the young girl was being molested by her father. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
A very dark and moving short story. The images stand out and are easy to imagine. I wrote a similar short story "Snapped", the young girl was being molested by her father. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and I will have to go check yours out.
Comment from mbroyles2
You managed to pull off a complete story in so few words.
Love the detail and determination .
Great descriptions.
Good luck in the contest.
Michael
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
You managed to pull off a complete story in so few words.
Love the detail and determination .
Great descriptions.
Good luck in the contest.
Michael
Comment Written 23-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Thanks much for reading and your thoughtful comments.
Comment from emptypage
Great story!
I adore the fact that this woman took back her strength, he voice, her everything.
Pass it on! Everyone needs to read this.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
Great story!
I adore the fact that this woman took back her strength, he voice, her everything.
Pass it on! Everyone needs to read this.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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Ah, I thank you so much for this wonderful green star. Truly appreciated.
Comment from Mustang Patty
A sad tale of kidnapping and physical, sexual torture. Your words flow well and tell a compelling story. Thank you for sharing,
A nit: conger (conjure) up her twinkling eyes.
~patty~
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
A sad tale of kidnapping and physical, sexual torture. Your words flow well and tell a compelling story. Thank you for sharing,
A nit: conger (conjure) up her twinkling eyes.
~patty~
Comment Written 23-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
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You know I didn't think that looked right-thanks so much -will chg it.