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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I took a look at your other readers reviews, Bill, and came away thinking, this site is full of druggies!!!! Lol. I certainly learned a lot. Not that I'll be hurrying out to buy any for me. Lol This was fun, well done. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
    Nowadays people just buy edible cannabis at their local green dealer.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
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'Nickel Bag'- the title got my attention.
This story has humor. I didn't get it at first, so I read it again.
--Now, I haven't heard anybody say that. I heard them say 'Dime Bag'. I guess the Nickel Bag must be cheaper.
The image is perfect for the story.
Thanks for sharing this.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2017


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2017
    In my misspent youth, a nickel was $5. In this story it's fifty (inflation).
Comment from Teri7
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I never entered this Drabble Flash Fiction contest as I was not sure what it meant. You did a very good job with this short story for the contest. It was easy to read along and see the meaning of the story! Best wishes in the contest! Teri

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thanks, Teri.
Comment from F. Wehr3
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Your story is funny and a good entry for the contest.

I'm a big believer in you should write about what you know, and I do have some factual problems with the story. Forty bucks is an awful lot of money for a nickel bag. You could get a quarter for that amount, five times. Think about it this way if you have a plastic bag with about one to two fingers worth filled, that would be a quarter, and if you cut into five parts, that's a nickel (about a gram and a half). So, ten bucks would be the max you would get for this.

Best of luck in the contest. Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
    I will probably not revise with this more correct data, but it is good info so I don't get ripped off in any future drug deals I'm involved in. If I ever use a scene like this in a more serious piece, I will appreciate more this perfected metric. Happy day. Bill
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Wow. If pot smokers weren't mellow by nature, I would say that someone could get killed for this type of deception. Joey was desperate for money. Its hard to imagine someone destroying a peanut butter sandwich for a sale though. Thank you for sharing this short piece of fiction, and good luck in the contest,
~patty~

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
    Thanks, Patty, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
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Anyone dumb enough to be fooled by this level of amateurism deserves to be cheated. The buyer is obviously an amateur himself. First time buyers should only deal with someone they know and trust to guide them to someone trust worthy. I used to occasionally indulge many years ago and I never got taken or fooled, even though I was an infrequent smoker. How lame this guy was.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
    Thank you, nomi, for the enlightening review. Bill
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi Bill,

Very nice little piece here for the competition. Joey better hope that dealer doesn't know where he lives or things'll be getting a hellova lot spicier from here on in.

good one
G

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
    Thank you, G, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from closetpoetjester
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Silly boy!
One rule when buying weed...NEVER buy kiff. Even if you're hard up. Always buy buds LOL At least you can see what you're getting.
Obviously anything is ripe for the selling.

I guess if he was making a pasta dish, that bag of apparent dope would give it a nice flavour haha

Great job Bill.
I love your originality and quirky style. It never fails to put a smile on my dial.
Cheers P

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Thanks, P, for the one-toke review. Bill
reply by closetpoetjester on 23-Mar-2017
    LOL
    Just call me Lungs
Comment from Susanjohn
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Oh now joey going to get into some big trouble for that little "oregano stunt" tsk tsk tsk :-) great job on this drabble flash fiction!! enjoyed :-))

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Thank you, SJ, for the fun review. Bill
Comment from Stacia Ann
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Hi, Bill. Thought I'd stop by. I entered this contest, too--am interested in seeing what other people did with it.
LOL! That's an interesting way to earn a couple of twenties:)
Good voice/dialogue here--I liked particularly "connoisseur of cannabis." Funny.
I can't help wondering if the buyer will know he's smoking oregano and what he'll do about it?
The oregano leaf does look like the cannabis, now that I think about it.
Thanks for posting this. Good luck with the contest.
Stacia

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 23-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Staci, for the thorough review. Good luck to you as well. Bill