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Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "haiku(diffused light)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
17 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is beautiful, Ulla,And I think it creates a great image of sunlight through the trees.Good luck with having a haiku selected for the book.This one has a great chance, Giddy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
This is beautiful, Ulla,And I think it creates a great image of sunlight through the trees.Good luck with having a haiku selected for the book.This one has a great chance, Giddy
Comment Written 24-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much Giddy. I'm so pleased you like it. I've been lucky to have two selected so far. I'm really pleased. Thanks a lot again. All the best. Ulla:)x
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is very beautiful.
The first two lines create a wonderful image. It is lovely when this happens, the sunlight through the branches and the leaves, it quite stunning.
Your satori is wonderful. The life in the forest, "majestic new life" often deer, moose are often referred to as majestic.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
This is very beautiful.
The first two lines create a wonderful image. It is lovely when this happens, the sunlight through the branches and the leaves, it quite stunning.
Your satori is wonderful. The life in the forest, "majestic new life" often deer, moose are often referred to as majestic.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Wow, Lu, thank you so much. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Douglas Paul
Beautiful imagery in this one, my friend. This flows well through the first two lines and the satori is a great moment of insight. Well done
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
Beautiful imagery in this one, my friend. This flows well through the first two lines and the satori is a great moment of insight. Well done
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2017
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Awww, Douglas, thank you so very much! All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
diffused light <>shines softly through green canopy --
majestic new life
A beautiful haiku, Ulla, I love it. Your connection is strong and it flows like a soft summer breeze. Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
diffused light <>shines softly through green canopy --
majestic new life
A beautiful haiku, Ulla, I love it. Your connection is strong and it flows like a soft summer breeze. Well done!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Muchisimas gracias. I'm so pleased you liked it. Un abrazo de tu amiga Ulla:)))
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
I like your haiku. My favorite part was the second line. It creates an image with the photo as help, but I can visualize, also.
I love trees!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
Hello,
I like your haiku. My favorite part was the second line. It creates an image with the photo as help, but I can visualize, also.
I love trees!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Thank you so very much Rasmine . I'm so pleased. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Diffused Light, uses sixteen syllables to create the image of a new day trickling through the dense timber and lifting spirits.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
This haiku, Diffused Light, uses sixteen syllables to create the image of a new day trickling through the dense timber and lifting spirits.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Thanks so very much, Bill. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very well composed, lovely haiku, Ulla.
Lines one and two show a distinct grammatical connection and concrete imagery.
At just sixteen syllables, your haiku is well within the seventeen syllables or less required by haiku poetry.
It is written in present tense--as a moment in nature, captured in time.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, is green canopy (aota, late summer).
Last but not least, your satori is an excellent observation of the phrase, or two lines, which come before it.
Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
This is a very well composed, lovely haiku, Ulla.
Lines one and two show a distinct grammatical connection and concrete imagery.
At just sixteen syllables, your haiku is well within the seventeen syllables or less required by haiku poetry.
It is written in present tense--as a moment in nature, captured in time.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, is green canopy (aota, late summer).
Last but not least, your satori is an excellent observation of the phrase, or two lines, which come before it.
Well done!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, Dean. So glad you liked it. Ulla:))
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:-)))
Comment from rama devi
NICE SATORI INDICATING THE INTERCONNECTIONS OF LIFE--THE SUN STREAMS THROUGH AND NOURISHES NEW LIFE. LOVELY DESCRIPTIVE TONE AND IMAGERY WITH FINE WORD ECONOMY TOO. oops- caps lock. Sorry, did not meant to shout!
Love the sounds of S read aloud in all lines. Nice consonance of F and alliteration of L as well.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
NICE SATORI INDICATING THE INTERCONNECTIONS OF LIFE--THE SUN STREAMS THROUGH AND NOURISHES NEW LIFE. LOVELY DESCRIPTIVE TONE AND IMAGERY WITH FINE WORD ECONOMY TOO. oops- caps lock. Sorry, did not meant to shout!
Love the sounds of S read aloud in all lines. Nice consonance of F and alliteration of L as well.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, Rama. So glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))
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:-))
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image for your haiku.
-Format is good.
-The imagery is effective,
especially in line two with the 'green canopy.'
-The satori is effective.
-Thanks for sharing, Ulla.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
-Nice image for your haiku.
-Format is good.
-The imagery is effective,
especially in line two with the 'green canopy.'
-The satori is effective.
-Thanks for sharing, Ulla.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Thank you so very much Pam. So sorry I'm late with my answer. All the best. Ulla:))
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You are welcome, Ulla, no problem being late.
Comment from rspoet
This is another fine haiku
with excellent imagery and grammatical connection
in the present tense in lines one and two
Just the right touch of alliteration, as it should be
A very nice satori line with reflective thought
Excellent choice of picture to match
Nicely done
RS
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
This is another fine haiku
with excellent imagery and grammatical connection
in the present tense in lines one and two
Just the right touch of alliteration, as it should be
A very nice satori line with reflective thought
Excellent choice of picture to match
Nicely done
RS
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much. I'm pleased you liked it. And do forgive my late answer. All the best. Ulla:))