Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Exceptional

Yes my friend this is well written and a meaningful poem it reflects the part that God plays in your life and what it means to you well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Hi Jill. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. This poem came directly from Him. I couldn't have done this without His influence and love in my life,
~patty~

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Nice sentiments Patty...both tribute and acknowledgement.
Nicely presented, with faith at the helm.
Wishing you a good day.
RG

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I am happy you enjoyed the poem.
~patty~

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This cherita has a nice sentiment about faith in God. I think your rhyme scheme, if you were following the guide you posted, is a bit off. SIDE LIFE STRIFE BRIDE WIFE DIED is an example of ABB ABA. The guide says AAA ABA. I like the poem the way it is. Nice job.

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I am happy you enjoyed the poem. Yea, I messed up the rhyming scheme, but when I looked at the finished project, I couldn't bear to change it,
~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Cherita. When we invite Christ into our lives we can be assured that we will never be left alone by Him. He died on the cross to save us.

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Yes, Christ is at the center of my life, and I'm thankful He is with me each day,
~patty~

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I've not come across this form before. It has a rising impact as each verse adds a line to build on the idea and I liked the interlocking rhyme scheme. Your poem does the form justice.

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~

Comment from melyuki

Excellent

Hi Patty thanks for sharing your Cherita verse and the beautiful image to accompany your words. I appreciate your author's notes explaining the complexity of the Cherita form.. of which I was not familiar with.. so thanks for the gained knowledge. Your verse is fuelled with warm emotion and loving thoughts and reflects your love of the Lord. thanks for sharing Patty. happy smiles from mel xx

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~

Comment from Thal1959

Excellent

I believe you have done as good as you can with a somewhat restrictive poetic form. No title makes the subject vague, if not unmemorable. (Imagine having written a hundred Cherita's and someone saying, I like your Cherita about faith... "which one?" The one with Christ in it. "I mention him in several poems." The one where you mention his death... etc.) The lack of meter is more apt to render a clumsy or awkward rhythm.

These are not comments against you, just the "Cherita" form. As I said, you've done well with it considering the form's difficulties.

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~

reply by Thal1959 on 22-Mar-2017

You're welcome, Patty.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

This is the second Cherita poem I've had the pleasure of reading today, Patty.
It's an interesting form, and you faith-driven message here should certainly resonate with many.
Well done!
God bless,
~Dean

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Hi Dean; Thank you for stopping by to read and review. As always, I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is a beautiful first attempt at a Cherita. I love your message of faith which reminded me of the modern parable about two sets of footprints on the beach becoming one because Christ was carrying a person during tough times. The line that resonated with me the most because of your sheer joy and gratitude is the last line:

"I live because He died."

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What an interesting poetic form! The first line states the truth of Christ's presence. The couplet shows how it is applied in life and the tercet expands that truth with examples. I love the ending "I live because He died."
One question I have is that the information says the rhyme scheme should be aaa/aba but the poem has abb/aba. Is that optional?

 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017

Hi; thanks for reading and reviewing. The rhyming scheme wasn't fully explained. I typed the information, and then I wrote the poem. I think I may have messed up, but I really liked the poem the way it was - bad poet!
~patty~

reply by lyenochka on 21-Mar-2017

It's fine, Patty! It comes from your heart and the form and scheme is subordinate to that.