My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Cherita"a collection of my poetry
47 total reviews
Comment from Oatmeal
Mustang P,
You did a wonderful job with this challenge. I have never written this style. You did a nice job with it. Thoughts are expressed and described well. Very reflective, all thoughts are very understandable and comprehensible. Your arrangement here is very creative.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Mustang P,
You did a wonderful job with this challenge. I have never written this style. You did a nice job with it. Thoughts are expressed and described well. Very reflective, all thoughts are very understandable and comprehensible. Your arrangement here is very creative.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~
Comment from Thamp
Very nice. Beautiful work. I would have praised your work even without you explaining what a "Cherita" was. But with that complication and you still created this... well, I think you had help!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Very nice. Beautiful work. I would have praised your work even without you explaining what a "Cherita" was. But with that complication and you still created this... well, I think you had help!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~
Comment from nancyrabbrose
I like your poem very much. There is one thing that I would like to suggest, just my idea, maybe not right: the last line of the poem falls dead for me. The poem flows until it gets to the last line. Otherwise, it is a great poem and has beautiful truth and joy to it.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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I like your poem very much. There is one thing that I would like to suggest, just my idea, maybe not right: the last line of the poem falls dead for me. The poem flows until it gets to the last line. Otherwise, it is a great poem and has beautiful truth and joy to it.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~
Comment from Irish Rain
A lovely testimony here in this Cherita. We are all so blessed in our lives, and in this lovely world, by the grace of God...blessings....
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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A lovely testimony here in this Cherita. We are all so blessed in our lives, and in this lovely world, by the grace of God...blessings....
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and encouraging comments,
~patty~
Comment from Badger_29
Outstanding. You have woven this wonderful "cherita" with elegance and style. Your rhyme, meter, and flow are impeccable, easy and fun to read. And a wonderful confirmation. Thank-you so much for sharing this.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Outstanding. You have woven this wonderful "cherita" with elegance and style. Your rhyme, meter, and flow are impeccable, easy and fun to read. And a wonderful confirmation. Thank-you so much for sharing this.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words. He is my rock, and I lean on Him every day.
~patty~
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Hallelujah~!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really lovely. I like this style and must try it. You chose your words
carefully and they do tell the whole story in these few lines, it's still the best
story ever told. Well done, I did enjoy it. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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That was really lovely. I like this style and must try it. You chose your words
carefully and they do tell the whole story in these few lines, it's still the best
story ever told. Well done, I did enjoy it. :) Sandra
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm happy you enjoyed the poem. Its only through Him and His grace that I'm here,
~patty~
Comment from MelB
Hi Patty, I'm no expert on this style, but it is a beautiful poem. He is by our side through everything. The last line brings it all home and stresses the importance of our lives.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Hi Patty, I'm no expert on this style, but it is a beautiful poem. He is by our side through everything. The last line brings it all home and stresses the importance of our lives.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and warm encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a wonderfully worded poem. Low key and yet proud in your chosen role as mother and wife with guidance from Christ. The last line sums it up perfectly. Nicely done Cherita it seems to me, although I haven't written one myself. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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This is a wonderfully worded poem. Low key and yet proud in your chosen role as mother and wife with guidance from Christ. The last line sums it up perfectly. Nicely done Cherita it seems to me, although I haven't written one myself. Marilyn
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and warm encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from Rlegel99
Nice poem about Christ being in each step of life. This poem flows well. As we enter into the Easter season this poem is timely.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Nice poem about Christ being in each step of life. This poem flows well. As we enter into the Easter season this poem is timely.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and warm encouragement,
~patty~
Comment from dragonpoet
This short poem says a lot. God/Jesus give us all we have and we should follow the path He/She pushes us toward.
This is a new form for me. It seems your rhyme scheme is abb aba not aaa aba as listed in your notes.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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This short poem says a lot. God/Jesus give us all we have and we should follow the path He/She pushes us toward.
This is a new form for me. It seems your rhyme scheme is abb aba not aaa aba as listed in your notes.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and warm encouragement,
~patty~
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You're welcome, Patty.
Joan
